Dominic is the last living human within 200 miles of his hometown of Evergreen Colorado. On a trip to find supplies he finds himself ensnared by some unknown force and ripped from his world. Where is he now? What will he do? Only time will tell.
Page generated in 0.038 seconds
Total duration
1,079 users online
1,964,274 hits today, 2,004,447 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
He should have expected or warned Luna. Kinda like "Hey I remember how you're the one dreamscaping... don't do it to me" or something like that but then again, it's good that you didn't. You wouldn't have been able to advance the plot like you did just not. Good chapter, makes me feel bad for the guy. Now we know what happened to the rest of his family.
pleaz wright more its realy good
I'm really hoping that this won't turn into zombies come to mlp fic. Never really like those. Still good thuo.
Bad twilight no weapons for you
I only have two issues.
1. Zombie apocalypse. Again? This sort of thing is overdone and unrealistic. There's no such thing as a super virus, there's always going to be SOME people that are immune. Its just a cheap way to create a pain and angst-filled backstory.
2. These ponies have magic powers up the wazoo. They've healed him, agreed to save his world...despite him treating them so badly and being a pottymouth...and he is STILL snapping at the only hope he might have of saving his world? The proper response should be "Look, I don't want ANYONE looking at this. I appreciate how you want to help, I will do ANYTHING if you can save my people. But please... just leave my dreams alone."
2990693
He hasn't told them about what he truly knows about them, he can't go back to his world, his mind still isn't fully comprehending what is happening. And as for the whole 'Some people are immune.' statement.....when the virus struck he was 16, in the mind of a sixteen year old disaster prepper no one is immune. I speak from personal expirence on this, Dominic is slightly based off of my brother. But I digress.
Thank you for commenting on the story, it helps me learn better techniques and come up with better idea's
2990721
Okay, I'm willing to give him leeway because he's only sixteen. But I sure hope he understands pretty quickly that these people are his only hope. And he'd better suspend his disbelief quickly. If you've seen a zombie apocalypse unfold, very little should surprise you anymore.
2990693
1. its overdone? are you sure ? cause even if an idea is overused only a handful of them turn out good like this story for example
2. I do agree with you on that point he's being a major dick and could have went about the dream thing differently
Is the next chapter on its way?
3081975
Yeah, I'm working on it
I'm enjoying the story quite a bit. If there are haters out there don't let them get you down.
As i was reading it sent shivers down my spine and body picturing this also made me shed a tear. Nothing compares to losing loved ones i know from my father was a soldier and died in combat bullet to the lung. Nothing hurts more
See, why are ponies always messing up.
I really am enjoying this. It's nice to see someone in a story every once in awhile not just say "fuck it, forget the past, I'm going to enjoy this while it lasts."
So, either she just broke the player, or she nearly broke the player...he will not be happy.
This chapter is alright ;)
3082023 the only problem I have in as so far is his name being Dominic as this is the male version of Dominique (i think at least) the problem with it is I dated a girl on and off over my schooling years by that name so every time I see his name I read it as hers so it just a bit confusing it state him as male when I think female its silly yes but that all I can think of problem wise (not something to be fixed) any way much ramble done with pointless back story of my life. love the story keep the great work up.
Kind of an asshole thing for him to do. But all the same good story so far.
So Twilight is messing with somebody else's personal possessions like he has no rights as a sentient being and basically treated him the same way? If this does not improve, there will be another Downvote on this.
I can see why you doubt your writing. Naturally you need improvement.
That being said, GODDAMN some of those review bronies are fucking harsh. Yeah, you need work but y'know what? You've got a damn fine main character, with an interesting personality, backstory, and life.
6818155 was waiting to see if anyone accidentally killed themselves fucking with his guns.
Oh ye gods and little fishes! Thine attempts to imitate Luna's dialect make my ears bleed. The blood drippeth like a leaky faucet and bringeth with it a surfeit of misery and pain.
Avaunt, thou foul spirit of typos and wretched grammar! Long hast thou spread thine insidious influence, like that Serpent first known as the tempter of men. I call thee by name, Ye Olde Butcherede Englishe, and banish thee to the outer darkness! I command thee in the name of one mightier than thee, before whom thou canst not stand, get thee hence!
Deliver us, oh Muse of Early Modern English! For what is dark in us, thou dost illumine; what is low, thou dost raise and support. Thou drivest out typos and mangled grammar, and thy presence cleanseth the blights from erroneous passages. Be thou our guide!
7272589
This is beautiful. We commend thy work to imitate the old speech. We art still lacking in the art.
OKAY WHO IN THE HECK THOUGHT IT WAS SMART IDEA TO LET BOOKWORM TWILIGHT TO STUDY AND FREAKING TRY TO HOLD HIS GUNS, EVEN AFTER SEEING WHAT THEY CAN ACTUALLY DO!?
9743555
Spoilers for chapter 3
TWILIGHT FUCKING DIES
jk
Unless...
10103513
and the rest is history...
Its a little rushed but good so far great job
How could Twilight have his weapon...IN HER MAGICAL GRASP...if they cannot interact with them ?
11412688
If I recall correctly, my thinking there was that if she dumped enough magic into it the sheer volume would be enough to overcome the resistance, not 100% sure on that though. Bear in mind it's been about... Holy shit, 9 years? I feel old. Still glad to see you keep coming back though, starship! Every comment I get from you makes me about as happy as finding $20 on the street! Which, if you haven't experienced it, is a very good feeling.
Did Twilight discharge one of his bullets ? If so, how did it not wake him, in a panic ?