Interesting chapter.

No pointers by me sorry:) But stil great you updated! how many times are you gonna post a new chapter? if i may be so bold

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Currently working on the next chapter, I don't really have a set amount but I suspect a pretty long story

Best fan fics are where the humans aren't little girls when taken to equestria. The best ones are when the humans are percieved as 'Armed and Dangerous'

2976385 What about when they're seen as nucking futs?

2976796 That too. One question this is a LunaXHuman fic right?

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It may be my friend, It very well may be. His favorite pony is Twilight. BUT! You never know. I AM ALREADY WORKING ON IDEAS FOR SEQUEL! I HAVE NO LIFE PLEASE HELP ME!

2976796 those are fun as well

I actually would beg to differ from that statement in your author note. It was nicely done and I still look forward to the next chapter.

2978035 Well, in that case, shameless self promotion!!!

Are you looking for OCs? Because I have quite a few that are interesting with both Mary Sue and standard modes.

2978356 i wooooould.... but since i barely have any time to do diddly shit i might not get around to reading it for like... 4 months... maybe more.

>>>Yeah, I don't think this is my best work but I didn't wanna keep you waiting to long. Again first time writing an HiE where it isn't several months after the humans arrival. If anyone has pointers they would be much appreciated..<<<

Quality over quantity, my good man.

I'm aware of the pressures of trying to put out chapters on a schedule (or at the very least something that resembles a schedule), but you can't rush yourself, or you'll only deliver a shoddy product, and nobody wants that.

Most of the other things I've written on other sites have been slowly updated, but I heard nothing from my reviewers about the chapter's quality, and in the end that's what really mattered; how well the chapter was written, not how many were made.

Take your time, we'll all still be here when it's ready.

Nice that's he's calming down. I wonder how he'll take it when he finally realizes he's truly in Equestria... I hope it turns out well for him but even if it does, it looks like it won't any time soon.

Luna needs to get her royal mind out the gutter

Just saying but I think he was way to nonchalant about being transported to another world... Well I guess he's away from the apocalypse.

If I was ever teleported to equestria during the apoc, I would be like "WHOO WHOO FREE CANDY AND PRETTY PONIES EVERYWHERE!!!"

That's my childish side for ya

My other side would be like, "WHAT IN GODS NAME??? I WAS HAVIN FUN KILLIN SHIT!!!!"

The (in my opinion mind you) problem in this chapter is that dispite the fact the MC used to watch the show, he was in an APOCALYPSE! He woke up in a foreign land that he was still coming to terms with accepting as reality, so his interaction with the princesses went too smoothly. He just goes with the flow after a simple conversation, that isn't right. Also, that very fact of isolation and inability to trust others he'd been ranting about at the beginning of the chapter almost completely disappears at the end of the chapter when Luna puts a wing on his shoulder and he's cool with it. He should have at least flinched at the initial contact from expecting something whether Iit be his own mistrust in the situation or reflex.(again, he just came from an apocalypse, so suprise undead attacks and raiders should have paranoiya at least alittle ingrained to him).

The end was good though

If he's "quite a male" and they're horses... Damn.

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More likely they're using his overall proportions as a gauge rather than their own standards, but that's me being charitable to the writer.

he had taken a name from Fallout 3 and dubbed it, Excalibat.

It was first coined for Rise Of The Triad by Apogee games around 1996.

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I dunno. Calm reaction makes perfect sense to me. Perfectly, eerily calm. Then a few minutes later, jumping out a window. Or suddenly going berserk and beating something until it is a stain on the ground. Or grabbing his stuff and rocking back and forth while muttering about his precious. Y'know. The normal reactions for a perfectly sane, healthy, well-grounded individual.

Overall, I can see a great fix forming here! Your spelling is a bit off, and two of the narrative choices in particular trouble me, but I'm still enthusiastic as to where this leads! Here's to many another late night reading this!

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*sniff..SNIFF,SNIFF*
yup that smells like a feminist to me

The description of the actual zombies sounds like World War Z.

judging by the looks of them they are more than likely clubs

I physically face-palmed myself from this part of the sentence, ohhh Celestia, wait until you see it in action, and at least we know this AU of Equestria doesn't have the knowledge of guns... yet