I awoke in a cold sweat, wait, I only paid for 1 night. I looked around and I was in the hotel room I was in last night. I got out of bed and headed into the bathroom, I went over to the sink and turned it on. I got both my fore hooves and splashed my face with the cold stream of water, I looked at the mirror with shame. All I’ve done and I’ve been given a second chance, I got the council killed, I wasn't able to save more on Earth, I got half the galaxy killed in the fight ageist the reapers, I lost my first team in a Batarian raid and I left my crew and now I have no way to help them. I just stared at the disapproving face in the mirror for a while till I punched it. I hated that face, I don’t deserve a second chance at life. The broken pieces of the mirror cut up my hoof to the point it was covered in blood, I walked to the corner broke down and cried. How could I leave them, I was there for them but I’m not anymore.
I just sat there in the bathroom with a small pool of my blood and broken mirror everywhere until the door burst open. I didn’t bother to look up, I knew who it was.
“What’s happening?!” I still sat there with both my fore hooves covering my face, the blood slowing rolling down my arm.
I didn’t move nor answer. I heard her approach me and took me into a hug witch I returned , we sat there hugging for some time till I stopped crying.
“What’s wrong?” she broke the hug to try and look me in the eye to witch I was too ashamed to return.
After a while of just sitting there I sighed and spoke up. “I don’t deserve you, we’ve only known each other for about 24 hours and you don’t know how much I’ve been through.” I began to cry again.
I guess she didn’t know what to say because she went silent for a while.
“We need to bandage up you hoof, you’ll bleed out if we don’t.” She went over to the cupboard and pulled out a roll of gauze.
“I’ve had worse, can you just get me a glass of water and I’ll fix myself up.” She left the bathroom and then I was all along.
I let out a sigh and began to fix my hoof up, I put some medi-gel on then wrapped it in the gorse. She came back in with a glass of water on her back, she then handed it to me with her wing.
“Are you going to tell me what happened?”
“I punched the mirror.” I thought it was obvious.
“No, I mean what happened to make you punch the mirror and by the way you’ll need to pay for that.”
I let out I slight chuckle. “I know and no I won’t tell you, I have no way to get that life back so I should just as well forget it.” I than began to drink the water.
“Also I guess I should be thanking you for carrying me back here.” I wanted to change the subject.
“Yea, you’re heavy you know that, it was like your full of rocks.” Well my biotic amps weigh a lot.
I let out another small chuckle. “Yeeeea, I get that a lot.” I rubbed the back of my head to witch I was met with a sting, dam, wrong hoof.
“It’s weird because you're thinner than a normal mare.” She than began rubbing the bottom of her chin in concentration.
“Are you a cyborg?” Really, that’s the question.
“Yea, I’m a cyborg, I also are so advanced that they put emotions into my head.” I hope she knew I was being sarcastic.
“YOU ARE!?!?” Really, I was being sarcastic.
“No, I was being sarcastic.” Her worry was replaced with annoyance.
“Hey, that’s not funny.” It sort of was.
We just stood there, for some time until I spoke up.
“Are there any paper towels in the kitchen?”
“Yea, let me get them, you grab the broom in the corner.” She pointed to the corner towards the broom witch was there.
I picked up the broom with my mouth and began to sweep up the broken mirror. Rainbow soon came back with some paper towel in her mouth. We cleaned up the bathroom for some time till It looked the same as before minus the mirror.
“Also by the way you were asleep for 5 hours, it’s about 8 at clock at night.” Wow, that late already.
“Then I guess I’ll go back to bed.” I started to head to my room but I felt a tap on my rear shoulder.
“Umm, would you like to sleep with me?”
Shepard wants to TASTE THE RAINBOW!
i have to err go with the former (totally not creepy or anything)
will Shepard meet the other elements
2799229
Eventually, it's just I wanted to introduce the setting.
2799570 that's good to hear
so what great evil will Shepard face here not MORE reapers is it
2799573
No, she killed them all with 'shoot random pipe win war'
2799664 like at the end where she dies in one of three disappointing ways.
GOOD JOB BIOWARE YOU DISCOVERED CELLOPHANE!
2799668
Or you have her stand there and let the reapers kill everyone
2799676 that's just TOO evil even for full renegade Shepard
and don't call Shepard poor she will kick your ass
2799677
I was planning on having Shepard on the half-half with the renigade and paliden
(Please forgive bad spelling)
2799687 that's renegade and paragon.
2799693
As I said forgive the spell, there's little to no spell check on the iPod
2799703 yea yea don't call Shepard poor or insult her
also i am eating cheese
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jq9TnI7ssTU
oh yeah tast the rainbow.
Gorse = a small shrub in the pea family
Gauze = medical, used to cover wounds
2906131 you are having a joy ride aren't you lol
Welp it was interesting while it lasted. In every chapter I have noticed the same mistakes over and over again. You have even ignored Rainbow87dash when they have pointed out some of your errors and missteps.
If you want an example here:
Fith paragraph in you used the word 'witch' instead of the correct word 'which.' This is not the first time you have made this mistake and like I said in the previous chapter's comments, once is fine but if it becomes a repeating pattern then it is a problem that irritates readers to no end.
Sadly while I did find this story somewhat interesting at the start, it is not interesting enough with all the errors for me to continue and for that I will have to give you one down vote.
2906131
Help him, because the writter really needs it.
I don't see romance tag