I don't know, I thought it was pretty good, there aren't that many gorefic writers out there (at least to my liking) but good idea non-the-less

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Okay, I'm sure the reason for Zecora's death makes perfect sense in your head. But here on the page it doesn't. If you didn't want to keep coming up with rhymes you could just as easily have Kyra kill Trixie or somepony.

Now there's no shame in unintentionally using a story idea that somepony else thought of. It's just that Past Sins is one of the most read fanfics to come from this show.

>...and then followed Twilight downstairs.
You said "downstairs" twice.

>She then proceeded to introduce them. After the introductions were finished it was Kyra's turn.
How would each of them introduce themselves? Show, don't tell.

>"I'm Kyra and I..." She paused and her facial expression slowly became sad. "I have no family. They died a while back."
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243056 i agree with the shortage of gore stories(well, scary gore stories like this). but if you havent already, u should see my gore fic and see if u like it or not.

im lovin the cheesiness/predictability of this story!!!!!! now all it needs is alot of blood and its perfect