When a young man encounters a strange new alien in his school, he is forced to travel with her through dimensions to an entire new world where there's magic and ponies not only exist, but come in different shapes and forms!
This is the kind of stuff that happens when you consume a liter of soda, a quart of ice cream, and you've been awake for 18 hours. I have absolutely no idea if I will continue this story. Just give some constructive criticism on the writing style!
Rating subject to change!
Chapters (1)
2982395 this is why I prefer editing and proof reading to writing a story. I can write small chunks of text that mesh well together, but pacing, character development, and setting have never really been my thing. But that just means there's a few things for me to get better at. Thanks for the review, and here's a free brohoof for your troubles
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-Diamond Brook
P.S. I found the "Your" and "You're" mistake, plus a TON of spelling errors. I really need to go back and proofread this
Be there human magic?