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Equestria is overrun by changelings, villages and towns are demolished and Canterlot is under siege. There's no way of facing the endless swarms of the enemy. The only hope is retrieving an ancient relic of a long extinct noble family in a far away land. But can a small group of adventurers achieve this goal? Or will Equestria fall to the attackers? Read the story, and find out!
[WiP] The fic isn't even finished in my native language, so translating will take a while.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 8 )

I am curious about the upcoming Chapters! ^_^ :twilightsmile:

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I'm translating as fast as I can, but since one chapter is about 25-30 pages, it'll take some time.

He could feel his wings moving, but he didn’t rose an inch

Change to rise because 'didn't' already puts the action in past tense.

Soon, he will be on land again, and he can spend the night in an inn.

You slipped to present tense here when the rest of your story is in past tense. Be mindful of that. As for everything else,
your english is very good. From what I can tell, you won't have nay problems translating your story :twilightsmile:

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Thanks! I have to admit, I'm a terrible proofreader.

Last time he was to Ponyville he met some other adventurers. Flameray, another pegasus running from his past, and his lover, Diane, who was a pegasus too.

^ Didn't you mention finding a mare on the island the last chapter? LOL HE ALREADY HAS A MARE FRIEND DUDE LOLOLOL :rainbowwild: Are you trying to imply somethinnggg? :pinkiehappy:

Nvm :facehoof: I had to re-read it once again to get it. Stupid 8am readings.

Oh my. This is the first I've seen something like this written. The flirting. Simply intriguing to read about. It seemed natural and not forced.

Well, guess this will get dem upvotes and fave :) Can't wait for more :heart:

P.S. I can offer some help over the weekends (if it's long or editing-wise), or shoot me a PM for any questions, kay? XD

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I apperciate any help I can get, but I'm afraid other than proofreading, there's not much anybody could do. Well, only if they speak Hungarian, and agree to translate. :)

>> well that i can do then :) PM me if you wish xD

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