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Sparkler


Not the G1 Sparkler. Nor the G3.5 Sparkler. Nor the G4 Draft Sparkler. Nor the Winningverse Sparkler (even though she's awesome).

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For fear of rejection, she has been silent for years, never admitting her affection. But now they have grown ever closer, and she has learned how to trust her friends. Tonight, she will tell her everything.

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Comments ( 19 )

Well, no matter your constraints, you did very well. Bravo! :pinkiehappy:

She was concerned for a moment, seeing her laying there, her heart skipping a beat as, for a moment, she assumed the worst.

Lying, not laying.

She was not strong enough to pick her up, and neither could not imagine waking someone who was sleeping so peacefully.

"Neither could not"? That's a double negative.

I was expecting something a bit worse than that. Glad to say I was wrong.

I was hoping it was gonna be longer to the part where it shows her about to tell "her love" about her feelings:fluttercry:...oh well i can't get everything i want..:twilightblush:

2770642 love is different for different people....

I like this. Short, simple, and nicely written too. The ending is very Fluttershy - made me smile :twilightsmile:

Nothing 'pony' about it, in vocabulary or character names.

Huh, wow - I didn't even notice until you mentioned it. That's actually pretty cool, well done!

You used the word mane to describe her hair. Pony vocabulary op

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I think he was trying to say that my prose was so purple you could stick a horn on it and call it Twilight Sparkle.

Nice story, if a disappointing ending. xp But altogether not as sad as it could be. Very sweet. Just wish there was a second chapter to wrap it up. xD

This is beautiful.

Why so short? I expected more.... or at least a 2nd chapter to wrap it all up...:derpyderp1:
But still good :twilightsmile:

Nooo u must finish
I demand a chapter 2!!

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