When Rainbow dash is turned in to a foal by a strange new plant in the Everfree Forest, it will be up to Fluttershy to take care of her, will this help them become closer as friends or more, or will they fall apart.
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Having the title spelled wrong and the description a run-on sentence doesn't really make me want to read this.
>ranibow
Shouldn't it be 'Rainbow'?
Sorry about the title ill fix it
i love it and i can't wait to read more chapters when they come out
VERY CUTE!
however a lot of missing words and grammar errors (like I'm one to talk) so whenever you feel unslothful it'll make it easier to read if you fix it. Other than that! You get a like and a 
A hypothetical question in the synopsis that doesn't even have a question mark at the end? Colour me unimpressed. This story needs some Super-Editing more than anything.
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this has been done on writing.com like a dozen times already....
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That picture just made me smile. Cheers.
Okay I fix some of the word as for grammer.... I blam our schools
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My pleasure.
This story is sooooo cute
good job
+1 for the premise. Dashie-foal + fluttermom = diabetes, and gladly, with seconds and a cherry on top. But, -10 for execution. You really need to work on spelling and grammar.
That said, keep plugging away at it; nothing beats practice, and writing fanfiction means lots of feedback. I'm looking forward to future chapters, or even an edited 1st chapter!
Not a bad premise, but the delivery lacks substantially. Grammar is also horrendous. Do please take advantage of the help section in the Padded Ponies forum. It would be beneficial.
Editing is a pain , trust me I know, my grammar tends to slur sometimes, but please just read your story over before you publish it. you've got a good idea an It would be a shame for its grammar to destroy it...
Can't wait for what you've got in store for the rest of this story...
I came her fot the cuteness of the Dash. You know, I might just correct this story. Grammar pains my eyes. And oh the commas.
Hurr durr.
Not bad but a bit lacking. I just hope this doesn't end up like "Pattycakes" with Fluttershy going crazy. At least you didn't write Zecora out of this plot.
It was kinda like the first chapter. A lot of missing words and grammar problems. One sentence you put 'u' instead of 'you' common mistake if you're used to texting. I was a little disappointed with Zecora not rhyming as that is what makes Zecora who she is. I can understand though since its incredibly difficult to rhyme (at least I think so) Other than that I like the d'aww moments in this chapter. Rainbow Dash and Fluttershy are so cute!
So whenever you feel like it. It would probably be best to edit some of your chapters before you continue. Just make it easier to understand (and try to get Zecora rhyming 
) doesn't have to be perfect. So keep it up! Otherwise you have to deal with! 
i love it great job keep up the awesome work on making chapters
I would suggest getting an editor, not tha anyone ever listens to me
Zecora...doesn't rhyme? WHAT SORCERY IS THIS!?
Also I noticed a lot of capitalisation errors and grammatical errors. Like Ive already said, get an editor
I have one problem though, why is Dash acting like a foal? she's still Dash, she has her adult mind. So she'd just be an adult in a babies body. Also Fluttershy won't talk down to her as if she was one
you're just adding stupid stuff to make it seem more 'cute'. Stop!
Hmmm... reminds me a bit of 'Pattycakes' just without the force... in the moment.
I wonder what Rainbow reaction to the......"nurse"...... from Fluttershy will be.
Lokking forward for more.
Mostly good but you'd be better off just mentioning the visit to Zecora if you can't make her rhyme.
Still not bad so far, just don't fall into the same pit trap that other stories with this idea do (the caretaker goes crazy and instead of trying to help they try to erase the regressed pony's life.)
i,m falowing
Okay everyone let me get one thing straight
I'm sorry for the terrible g'rammer but i'm doing my best as for getting an editor........I don't know how
I am the most stupid pony on fimfiction if there is anypony willing to help and now how to send said chapter to editer please tell me it would really help
Oh and another thing ill also in the next chapter explain why is Rainbow acting the way she is the best I can this stuff is all in my head and makes sense to me I maybe a liiiiittle crazy 
But roll with me Okay
it'll all make sense....I think 
2966420 I'm guessing English isn't your first language right?
A member of the Mane Six transforms into a foal for by whatever the reason may be, then her friend decides to raise her until the effects ware off.
I do enjoy the idea, but I'm afraid to tell you that Crimsonbrony2507 may have beaten you to it. Look up Auntie Fluttershy and see for yourself. It may not be well written and might have a plot hole, but at least the story is interesting.
first thing i thought when Zecora came up in this is " ya more rhyming " so im a little sad but i got over it soon. i like where this is going with the whole fluttershy nursing thing
I would love to be an editor for this story.
Can I? Can I? CanICanICanI? PLEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAASE?
But seriously. Send me your password for the story, I'd love to help!
This story gets cuter and cuter
i have the strangest sensation of deja vu reading this, like I've read it before somewhere.
TBH, this story was very cute, even though your grammar is kind of bad, it's still cute. Nice story!
I think you mean Traumatize, not Dramatize. Although that was a hilarious typo.
While your chapters have slowly increased in quality, you should try and find an editor. If you can't find one then take some time to see what doesn't sound right to yourself upon reading.
Much better chapter quality! I love it! Rainbow Dash is so cute! All of them managed to stay in pretty good character too! For your troubles have a
2973934 What a surprise.
So Rainbow Dash can understand the animals huh? Why do I get the feeling that's going to be useful at some point?
Awwwwwwwww<3
The grammar was much better this time around! Very cute and I must say that I'm wondering how Rainbow Dash will react when she finds out
Oh dear Celestia, this is about to get interesting. BY the way, the story is pretty good, but there are some things that are holding it back, such as the occasional mispelling or grammar problem. But keep it up, definitely interested at what happens next.
ohhhhhhh
Interesting little story. hoping for the next chapter soon you are good at putting out chapters at least slightly frequently.
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Thanks I don't like keeping pony's waiting and I already have an idea of the next chapter
Oh boy the next scene is going to be intresting.
The next chapter should be interesting
i love it and i got a question later in the story when Rainbow is older is Fluttershy going to adopt Rainbow Dash yes or no