I’m a cat loving viking from sweden, who enjoys mlp and everything that is typical for a classic nerd.
Why do we fear death when we don't fear birth?
They are both as natural as the other, yet one is frowned upon and one is a joy filled event.
Pinkie Pie suffers a heart attack and falls into a coma. Twilight is by her side doing everything in her power to save her.
Will she succeed or is Pinkie gone forever.
Rated teen just in case, for some things that some people might find disturbing.
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2766189 Yes.
The beginning of the story was quite dry i.e. boiling down this happened, that happened, they went here, they went there, etc. Use of descriptive wording and sentence transitions would have helped immensely. But, when you described the angel, that was perfect! From that point on, the story was amazing in every single way! I'm not kidding when I say that.
Your story does an awesome job of explaining the contradictory nature of birth and death. Here's my thoughts on the subject: Birth is not always a happy thing especially in situations of overpopulation or unexpected childbearing. On the other hand, death is not always something to be feared as it could mean an end to suffering or an accepted natural summation of one's life. For reference, look up the jazz funeral processions of New Orleans, Louisana. It is a celebration after death meant to appease the spirits that protect the dead. At the same time, this procession honors the recently deceased.
All in all, I think the story is 'Nito' (nee-toe).
2767901 Thanks for the feedback, I'm glad you liked it.
A possible reason for the beginning being a tad dry, could be that I started writing this thing almost 6 months ago, I have learned a lot since then and I was to lazy to edit the whole thing.
I appreciate your point of view and I accept it, I wont say you are wrong or anything.
I prefer to view birth as a happy occasion.
This made me cry. Buckets. I love the story line and how you can make everything 'chime in' especially with Surprise! *sniffs as tears dribble down her face* that was... Really good...
3961015 Thanks. Glad you liked it.
Enjoyable read, even though some parts were rather morbid. Only problems that I had were that many letters were not capitalized when they should have been, and horrible spacing errors. However, the spacing errors may just be the fact that I'm reading this on my phone.
4232525 Thanks for the comment. This is an older piece and my grammar was not on the same level as it is now. I have not bothered to rework it since I published it. Perhaps I should.
Also it seems that you commented the same thing twice. :P
I'm sorry.
I couldn't get through this. Sentences were cut off.
it was painful. Not to be mean, I actually liked the plot, but...... I couldn't get past halfway. Sorry if this comes across as harsh.
6664207 It's cool. Everyone has the right to their own opinion.
Also, this was one of my earliest attempt at a fanfic. Thanks for giving it a shot.