A contribution to the 500 member writing contest in Fallout Equestria, under the theme "At the Sea." Drifting somewhere in the marediterranean, a lone AI has been charged with taking care of a nuclear submarine until such time as the crew are freed from stasis. The intelligence, fond of the name Rusty, has grown increasingly lonely and desperate in the years following armageddon. In his desperate and only occasionally crazed radio broadcasts, he makes contact with a friendly vessel for the first time in over a hundred years and remembers just what hope feels like.
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I had just finished watching The Hunt for Red October when I read this.
Good job.
That was an amusing one-shot. Rusty didn't go crazy, even after all those years…
It's a nice one-shot, though I did notice a few things that were off. First was the mention of nuclear reactors. Nuclear technology never existed in Equestria or any part of the world. Best thing to go with would be some kind of magi-engine. Madman should probably be madpony. Aside from those tiny nitpicks, this was a pretty interesting concept.
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I changed madman (thanks for the heads up) but I don't think there's a problem with the idea of a 'nuclear reactor.' Nuclear is tossed around a whole bunch in FoE in reference to balefire, and I don't personally think nuclear power is stretching it too much. That said, there were a few times where I planned to specifically mention that "nuclear=balefire" but that, like many other things, was snipped to keep the story under the 5000 word limit.
(I find it amusing how the technology changes depending on the viewer. Some people just assume the zebras used planes while others don't believe anything more concrete than magic flight talismans were used. The complexity and terminology really depends not only one what one remembers from the story but what one interpreted from it. Probably just another reason why there are so many side fics.)
Nice little one-shot.
As Tonto said am I not fond of the nuclear reactor, since nuclear is a word that have something to do with nucleus so far I know, or in other words science and not magic. Not saying that you can´t use one, but why not call it a radiation reactor like Red Eye did instead of nuclear?
Beside that are you by Overstallion degree ordered to make me another story with Elusive and his city, or show me a link to such story if another person have written it.
Nitpick:
"The foggy glass in the window began to clear and Rusty looked upon the first face he had ever seen.. " You have a double period here.
" Rusty searched through a lexicon of over 200, 000 words for something to adequately describe this pig-headed pony’s callous disregard and brutish irresponsibility." You have a space in your 200,000 was that done on purpose or?
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Thanks for spotting those errors.
To each his own, I guess... I like hearing terms like 'nuclear' in these things so I throw them in when I write.
Now Elusive City isn't my idea, but I know the person who thought of it. One of the editors for Project Horizons, O. Hinds. He and Harmony Ltd have been constructing a possible future of the wasteland after (and during) the epilogue of FoE. As far as I know, nobody's written anything on any of it. But I'll be sure to tell you if Elusive City gets another story!
This is a charming story.
#7 is quite the jerk. Very different from another 7 I know...
Nice story.
But I still don't understand Rusty's orders.
When is he supposed to wake the crew from stasis?
Only when he received the order from the mainland?
No timer or something?
Also: Why didn't #7 wake the other crew-members? If he want to cause as much damage as possible, he would need help.