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Brainhorn


I used to write stories but don't anymore. Sometimes I think about writing more. Never say die.

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Anonymous had been engaged to Lyra, but decided he wasn't ready and left town before the wedding to think. Days became weeks, weeks became months, and months became years. He decides it's finally time to return to the pony he'd left at the altar.




I started writing this on my phone when I had to evacuate from hurricane Sandy, and it's been mostly unfinished until recently. Reading my old works, I noticed I always get dialogue over with very quickly instead of fleshing much out. This time, I wanted to try and write better dialogue, with more "meat" to it. I don't know if I succeeded or not, but I'm pretty happy with the way this turned out.
I'm also aware that the pacing is pretty fast, but that's something else I'm trying to work on.

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Comments ( 30 )

Is this a sequel to another story?

2762887
No, it just starts after he left and just as he's getting back.

He sounds like a real jerk.

Damn....... that ending was just perfect. :pinkiehappy:
Seriously though, how is this not featured yet?

2764503
Haha, thanks, glad you liked it,
And I assume it hasn't been featured because it's not all that good, heh.

Great story, if a bit odd using the name anonymous. Not to be rude but if you read over it you can find that you can take that out and it wouldn't change the sentence.

But still a great piece of work! :pinkiehappy:

Dang, that dude is a grade A flank hole in my book.

2764534 Well it is in the popular category.

....it's still alive, why is it still alive? Because really, this guy is the worst asshole I've seen in a long while. Good story though.

Intredasting, my interest is piqued. though I must say there was not as much drama as I expected there to be, I mean anon left for FIVE YEARS you'd thiink there would be a little more than
ohiaider I'm sorry and I was a douche
okay i'll try to forgive you
the end

2765108
I'm glad you like it, otherwise. As for the name, this story was written for Anon in Equestria, which is the title and the rules. So I had to. Besides, I guess I like naming them Anonymous, because it means I don't have to try and think up a new name for each and every character I write.

2765130
He is, but I think everyone deserves a second chance. Within reason, I mean.

2765217
Is it? I didn't check, haha.

2765769
You must not have read my others, then. This guy is one of the better ones.

2766099
I know it seemed a little fast, but like I said, I'm working on my pacing, and I guess I still need practice. If I had to explain it, I'd say it's because they had history and she still has feelings for him, so she's eager to try and patch things up, too.

2766673

fair enough, it's still a one of the better stories I've read

2768461
Thank you. What's with the face, though?

Would there be a chance for this to have a sequel? I'm just really curious how things turn out. Also how the rest of Ponyville would go about.

2772676
I suppose it's possible. I never thought about it, really.

I liked this.
Also hoping for a sequel

2802025
Awesome that you like it. Maybe I COULD do a sequel at one point, if people really want one.

i liked this, there should be more to it. like how he got to equestria, what he did while he was gone and then the aftermath of this fic. i really liked it and would love to see more!

4599211 I'm not sure how I could do it. I usually skip him arriving because I can't think of original ideas for it, haha

Yep, the guy is a real douce bag.

4988827
douce
adjective
sober, gentle, and sedate.

I don't get it

Comment posted by Asashi - Dark Fist Inari deleted Dec 22nd, 2014

You should definitely do a sequel

what?!!!!!!!!!!!!! no sequel?:facehoof:
more pls!!!:yay:

I got nothin'
I just feel like a cunt with how this is a 2nd person fic
Guess that reflects how well it was written, ay?

7437007 Well thanks, man! Glad you thought it was written well, heh

While reading this I just have to shake my head sideways throughout the whole story.
I'm the kind of person who has a deep grudge.

A little short but pretty sweet and well written, great job! :twilightsmile:

8820044
Thank you! This one was definitely a change of pace for me

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