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A not-so-normal HiE story. Rather than just making the same old I-Just-Appeared-In-Equestria-and-Everpony-Accepts-Me-And-The-Mane-Six-Want-To-Date-Me, I wanted to write something out of left field. So, here it is, the real story of how ponies react when a human reveals itself.

:Authors Note:
Characters will be added as they appear, Tags will be added as they become relevant. Rated Teen for mild language.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 13 )

PLEASE OH GOD PLEASE

Keep this up, its amazing. :twilightsmile:

The blood is on her hooves.

DEATH TO THE PRINCESS:flutterrage:

i like it.

i really hope you go deeper in the history of the humans later though

I'm getting more and more into this I have to admit, can't wait for more.:twilightsmile:

Celestia is a racist, luddite bitch. Period.

2791377 I can't help but imagine the Queen saying that. :rainbowlaugh:

2791384 Now THAT would be satifying. Besides, the ponies themselves are quite ignorant and arrogant too. And that's the way we love them.

Loving how this is developing, your casting celestia in very much a different light to how many normally do, but if there's history with her and humans it could prove to be a very interesting story.

One thing you may want to change. With the conversations, I felt I was getting lost between who was talking and whose reactions were being described. Maybe space these out in seperate paragraph setup as it'll give the story more flow I feel

Sue

You know, it's really confusing when you don't say they got on the train. Or how.

2862353 Woops.:facehoof: I guess I need to put more time into proof reading these chapters. I'll edit that in soon.

Pansy-ass, spineless human. Big frigging surprise there.

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Human talks back to a goddess who could vaporize him in an instant and you call him a pansy-ass.

Oh pls man. If you hate stories of humans in bad situations or like to point out cliches that the story doesn't really have, you should have kept scrolling when you read the cover.

6297189 I know he's wimp who let's himself get pushed around. I don't give a rats ass WHO it is that's doing the pushing, I don't tolerate that spine-less shit one bit.

Open YOUR eyes, idiot.

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