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Viva Revolution

For so the long the tyranny of those with cutie marks and a realised place in this world has gone undisturbed...but not anymore. The rise of the background ponies is beginning. Royal guards, musicians, shopkeepers, and others alike, who have all been shunned to remain in the background for all eternity...

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Soft Shell

Soft Shell #1 · Oct 22nd, 2013 · · ·

Well....that....happened? or did it?

epreeses1

epreeses1 #2 · Oct 26th, 2013 · · ·

Hey dude, remember me?
I have a lot of things to tell you on this. One of the main ones is that your grammar sucks. Don't take this the wrong way, mine did as well (and still sort of does) but I learned, and I have a link for you to go to to practice it.
Grammar help
If anyone wants to look at it then feel free. I can't stop you.

The second thing I saw was that you are overly descriptive; to the point of stalling the story. And I remember how you are afraid to cut things out becouse it will go under the required 1000 words, well, to be blunt, I could write 1000 words in a single hour. If I like the story I am writing.

If you want me to go over some of the mistake I am talking about then tell me. I might not be able to hop on and help you immediately, I will eventually.