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I'm kind of disappointed that Max didn't try and play with Pumpkin a bit besides just patting her. First thing I thought of was picking her up, setting her down next to me, then curling up next to her to take a nap. That was followed by standing up and giving her a piggy-back ride.
Like the rest of the chapter though.
Maybe Max should tell Twilight just how expensive he was to Celestia.
I mean, he sold for what? 2 million bits or something like that, and AJ wants to use him for a standard fee? (I assume it to be pretty low)
Mrs. Cake.....................nevermind
I wonder what Twilight's hoof-language name is. It must be sound-based, since it wouldn't make sense for Twilight to flinch from Max signing out her name while she's not looking at him:
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They would propably tear him into a new one, remember that people in this story are treated like an animals, so they could take his affection as an agression.
For the story : so damn good.
Some banging is incoming I think, and it's gonna be so damn good.
Keep up the good work man, keep it up.
3164219 I know what you mean. I would liked to see him Play with Pound and Pumpking. Or better: "Pound fly about him, then became a Wingspasm (hope It's the right word) and fell down, but Max Jumps and Catch him before Pound can hit the floor."
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It would hard to see petting or a light scratching of the ears as aggressive, or anything else that a normal person would do while playing with a baby.
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Something other than just patting Pumpkin on the head would have been nice.
What Mrs. Cake did was just creepy.
And I hope that you won't make this into some kind of harem fic. What you have written so far with Twilight is great. I rather don't want it to get ruined just because you want more sex. And ofcourse Twilight fighting for him makes it all the better.
3164500 This will NOT be a harem fic. No..no...non...nein...nunca...nuh-uh...
...maybe...
1. Where do they keep getting this asinine ideas about humans? None of his fits with evolutionary development. Both humans and primates have always been VERY careful around their children!
2. She just came close to sexual assault. Yecccch.
3. Why does he NOT wanting them finding out how smart he is? That's his best chance to be treated as an equal and to get home! The mane six helping him? He could really use their help, and the more they know about him, the more they can trust him!
4. I just thought of something. Why doesn't Twilight cast a magic spell to try and help him speak again? She can cast a magic spell to give somebody wings, to move buildings around, to put people to sleep, to change a person's cutie mark...but not to restore speech? Whaaaa?
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Good. Otherwise the entire build-up with Twilight would be pointless.
And we humans are able to withhold our sexual urges anyway. Doesn't mean we can't become aroused in an instant.
3164702 Despite how often you nitpick the story, I like you. I really do. It's people like you who help me improve my story telling abilities...
...that and you're always several chapters ahead of where we actually are in the story...
haha damn this is hilarious, im rather surprised that he cant talk yet thou, most injuries are healed within a few months at the most. unless its intentional that whoever sent him there wants him to be mute. keep up the good works!
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...OHHHHH. I see.
This story has been well written after an admittedly very rocky start, its just that getting the Mane Six to know his full story and speaking again should be Max's immediate concerns, his best way of being treated as a true equal and getting back home.
I'm just glad your guest didnt go all the way with the Mrs.Cake thing. That would have really been over the line.
3164698 You better not *has sniper ready* jk
If that were me, I would have ripped the biggest fart as soon as cake started touching me. I mean, I'm okay with a little spanky panky between humans and ponies. But they think I'm a dumb animal...so, cease every opportunity, am I right?
Mrs Cake want's some biped action it would seem.........poor Mr cake tough.
I sense some aj rape coming
Gotta be honest here. The rainbow dash parts of this fic are my favorite bits.I'm intrigued now, is she like ms cake? All pent up with nowhere to release? Cause i'd like to see that
Mrs. Cake wants the D!
I have just been waiting for Applejack to do that.
so...mrs cake's in like...post baby heat??..............he gun get molested a lot if mares just walk into human areas and stuff and asses the "merchandise"
3164698 Maybe? There's still hope!
"Yes! Let the jealousy flow through you"
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this is madness!
3236430 Madness? THIS IS FANFICTION!
3170746 Star Wars!!!
Holt shit. We need some magecraft in here, stat!!! Fucking must be avoided at all costs!!!
Ok! Ok! I give! This is an excellent fic!
Please continue?
3164702 thats because our old dear friend Discord is behind all this
know > now?
Did you mean "replied" or "relayed"? Also, you forgot to bold his hoof-language.
Chapter was a little bit blunt... As in I don't really like a new temporary author advancing the plot at all, particularly in the relationship field. Not bad overall though.
*I
He can't speak, this needs to be slightly changed.
3721904 doesnt stop people from making the dawwww face
Hmm...
The way the "humans" act makes me think of Attack on Titan. And of Max as one of the people who can turn into a Titan, but still has relatively sentient thought. Anyone else make this connection?
Blatantly he does
3165313 I agree. They think that he is an animal so come on! Stop with this zoophiliac mumbo jumbo you horny fucks. Jump your husband.
I see alot of poeple complaining about HumanXPony sexual relationships, and that it is like practicing "bestiality".
Yet again this isn't true in the slightest, since both the human and the "equestrian" pony are sentient and sapient beings, both agreeing to conduct this relationship. If there would be a term to catigorize this relation, it would be rather Xenophelia, which isn't as bad at all.
HOWEVER!
Just like alot already mentioned, the ponies in this story are assuming/knowing that humans are none sapient animals, like regular dogs or cats in our world.
Since that is the case, what Mrs. Cake here was trying to do, is indeed to be considered bestiality or zoophiliac, because she knowingly tried to arouse and participate in sexual acts with an animal that is seen as sentient, but not sapient, she was trying to have her way with a pet.
That is bad, shame on you Mrs. Cake.
Another question to judge the level of wrongness here might also be: "Would she have tried, if she had known he was sapient? That he could "talk" with her about this issue?"
My guess is probably not...
So the first mature chapter is written by a guest. I have plenty of reason to question this, chief among them is why an author would allow it without setting it up themselves.
Bah ha ha ha! A man's gotta do, what a man's gotta do! He's been trapped there for months and his species are a bunch of Animals of course he's gonna get fucking ideas. And FUCKING ideas, is what he had! Mrs.Cake was a bit bold though, horny lassy, bah ha ha ha.
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So true.
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Inside Max's head most of the time:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=0XhN3NsLmDQ
(flicking her tale towards me)
Might want to change "tale" to "Tail". Just saying.
Looks like Max just got antiqued.
Looks like Carrot needs to be sent to Jelly school.
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4129441 That could be a new meme...
Men, this chapter is strangely arousing and you know what, by how you make it seem, it's like Max and Dashie have wrestled ALOT, if he's getting as shredded as it sounds.
Keep telling yourself that Max.