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love it very nice
Love the "Family Guy" reference. Glad to see that you didn't just take the easy way out of "and then they totally did it".
That was a good job with Golden Ingot.
Family guy reference. Love it.
Good grief with ever chapter I find myself wishing harder and harder that I could multi thumbs up this fic. Keep this brilliance up mate its awesome!
Family Guy reference HA.
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where?
3093266 When will he be off the leash He doesn't deserve it at all....
3093464 At the end ehwn He offered to poop on the pony's lawn, like from that one time stewie ran away to see his favorite show but was disappointed.
Looking forward to the next chapter, young woman showing him more attention then humans usually do... could it be his physic or is he not the only sol human in this world?
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ahhh, but of course.
Random Racist Pony hoooooo!
You know... now that he asked that question, I find myself wondering even more... why not? Absolutely no reason whatsoever has been given as to why Twilight hasn't taken a single step towards revealing his true nature in a positive manner and getting him acknowledged as a fellow sapient. Max's own behavior can be attributed to a severe case of Stockholm Syndrome, but Twilight has absolutely no excuse.
She personally knows (and has a direct line of communication to) one of the two ultimate rulers of the country they live in. She's a national hero with her image prominently displayed on several large stained glass windows in the main hall of the Canterlot Palace. She could, with very little effort, start the process of getting Max acknowledged as a person rather than an animal by the rest of her society.
Yet she sits there and quietly watches as Max's psyche slowly continues to devolve into a tamed version of the animal he was so afraid of becoming before.
Twilight, you criminally negligent bitch.
3093465 In this story, the leash is the disguise he needs, not the one he deserves. Groucho Marx glasses are not universally effective.
One point of criticism: Please do not write accents.
Zat is still spelled as That. It's a common mistake to write accents but it's incorrect way that's why you rarely see it in professional books.
It should be more like this: "Accents aren't written" He said with a heavy accent.
Instead of: "Aczentz aren't vritten" He said.
It can be pretty annoying to read.
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Valid points. It's still in character for Twilight, I think, to try and work this out without the (other) Princesses involved, but you are right that it shouldn't take too much work to get him the status he deserves; and considering how Equestria worships the very ground Celestia trod, I doubt any overeager scientist would even consider going against her wishes.
Once Max asks, of course.
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A pity- he would once again have a moustache; one that's detachable, even!
Considering Rainbow Dash couldn't be fooled by Pinkie's Haybob disguise, somehow I doubt any would work sufficiently...
Looks like Golden Ingot is going to get...
*Shades*
Rusty.
That ending....how very cliche but fitting and absolutely hilarious
Lets talks about what works and what doesn't.
1. Max actively trying to do good for others. It makes him less of an animal in their eyes and more of a person. Good. His open compassion for Twilight and now a connection to RD could lead to other interactions and connections with the Mane Six.
2. That human girl. An idea comes to mind with Max admitting she's humming something familiar. Could it be that all humans here were forcibly teleported over to Equestria and they've all just become animalistic over time with nothing to live for and nobody able to communicate with them? Though I feel that even that is something of a stretch because there would always be at least SOME who would try to hold onto their old ways of life and to make their own societies.
But...I do feel the need to ask...really? Pooping on his lawn? What are you, FOUR? I thought you wanted to be treated like a person, not an animal. So stop acting like one!
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"Did you hear the latest?!"
"No?"
"Princess Twilight Sparkle has a talking human!"
"So what? She already has a dragon and she and her friends are always doing all kinds of crazy manure. If anypony would have a talking human, it would be Twilight Sparkle."
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LOVING IT
3094354 I think the whole pooping on his lawn was a joke between Max and Twillight
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This fic is filled with so much greatness!!
oohh, some bizzare love sqaure between twi, dash that new human girl and max?
I hope dashie wins
I'm starting to get a bad vibe off of Max's inability to communicate verbally. Groaning, growling, roaring; all these indicate that his vocal cords are working, since you have to have them to be able to make those kinds of noises, so his inability to TALK indicates that something else, and possibly magic related, is responsible.
Or maybe it's an unintentional side effect of having him mute for story purposes and I'm reading too much into it.
That ending omg
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implying there aren't negative adverse effects in magic based food preservation that ponies don't know about cuz their medical system ain't nothing but trash. As for the rest of this boy-scout is whipped.
And in another dimension he was adopted by Applejack. Winona takes him under her wing and Big Mac sees something special in him and with Big Mac's and Winona's help he becomes a sheep human.
And though every single pony in the stands or in the commentary boxes was at a complete loss for words, the pony who in his life had uttered fewer words than any of them knew exactly what to say.
Big Mac: That'll do, human. That'll do.
i sense that everybody here has forgotton sunny i miss that mare
All of those grunts and roars and shit, all that shows that his vocal cords are well able and very much capable of speech. Fix that shit!
THE LOLS AT THE END
THEY ARE UNCONTROLLABLE
3093476 You wanna take a dump in Mother Maggie's shoe?
*Nods*
Come on, let's go take a dump in Mother Maggie's shoe.
3094354 I think that it was more for Twilight as a means to cheer her up.
So now we have a pony that seems to be even more of a jerk than Blueblood...I wonder what issues he has, he's bound to have some sorts of dark issues repressed deep within him.
Do you know how much I do not care?
Despite the fact that there are a lot of grammar errors and improper word choices, this is still a very good story, and they don't seem to take from the story too much. Good job.
3206313 Damaged, not destroyed.
A family guy reference
...Fix this, please.
3245701 It is done. Thanks for the find.
I gazed down upon this sentence, displeasured and displeased.
I deem his fearful afraidness superfluous and redundant.
Rather odd of her to assume that this animal is a doctor with a great deal of experience. I would just figure he has patience.
3093892 Then you won't ever know what KIND of accent it is.
"~Okay. Let’s go let me take a shit on Golden Ingot’s lawn~ "
Excellent.
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Don't belabor it, or you risk yourself becoming repetitive and periphrastic, which leaves you as a loquacious and verbose twat.
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Thats good television right there, I tell you what.
After reading all the way up to this point, something has been really bothering me. It's nothing big, I just would like to clarify what's bothering me and a way you could fix it (if you think it needs to be fix) or you could just call me nitpicky.
So what's bothering me is the sign language. What bothers me about it is how long his sentences are. To me, it would make a lot more sense if he signed, say, ~Surgarcube Corner? Better?~
Something like that would make more sense to me.
Thank you for taking the time to read (and possibly consider) my little nitpick. Besides that I'm rather enjoying your story. Happy New Years.
Ugh.
Shipping.
Omg, I couldn'tsto laughing with that. Ending.
It always has been weird seeing love between ponies and humans, I mean, how does that even work?
The reason love even exists is for the purpose of reproduction. So being in love with an other race doesn't make much sense...
...lol who fucking cares am i right or am i right
the last part reminded me of some show or movie i watched "want me to poop in his shoe?" *nod* "ok imma poop in his shoe"
3721842 In a world with only one species, yes. But if you look at any fantasy settings inter-species relationships are different. They might not all approve, but its not all frowned on.