This is just my opinion, but y'know what this needs? An alternate ending. Preferably splitting off after chapter 3, where maybe Twilight catches on to Spike's odd behavior and they have a really complicated talk about it all to figure out how to solve this problem, leading to a happy end. Or at least happier than this.
8033 You mean a wussy ending?? :P ...tell you what, I'll think about writing one. I won't promise an ending that's all candy and rainbows, I'm not even promising I'll write one at all, but if something comes to me...
8036 I agree. Some people are hatin' on the grimdark aspect, which really only comes in at chapter four, i think. Spring for a somewhat happy ending, and everyone'll be happy. Also, add a link in to the altered ending at the top of chapter four, and warn that the ending below is grimdark, and nobody can complain.
Huh. I read the comments and thought it was really bad, but then I read it and it wasn't that extreme at all XD
And wow, that probably means I'm really desensitized and have been on the Internet too long :) Anyway, you should never be afraid to write what you want :p
I wouldn't so much want an alt ending as much as an epilogue following Ch 4's events. Just curious to see how everyone else took it. Especially Applejack who was last seen furious and probably planning on beating the crap out of him.
^ this totally agree with metaxzero, it would be great if there was an epilogue by the way just love the way you describe everything on the most "disturbing" scenes, makes them feel lively (don't really know if I'm using the right term for this), and I really got high expectations on you as writer this is the kind of story with the car wreck logic the "worse" it gets the harder it is to look away keep up the grat work
8617 I much appreciate it sir!! An epilogue is an idea that does intrigue me, a lot more than the alt-ending everypony keeps clamoring for. People should know how the others reacted and what happened in the following days. School is pretty busy for me right now and I'm busy conceptualizing my third fic, but I might have to make some time to write an epilogue. Thanks for the idea metaxzero, and thanks to you as well Gsbrill!!
I look forward to the epilogue I hope you write. It's an opportunity to flesh out your characters more on their feelings for life in Ponyville. For instance, not that you feel the same way, but I don't feel as though Twilight has the kind of personality to move on from something like this.
It may very well halt her emotional growth and leave here in a permanent stage of self-pity and blame for what has happened.
So I read this, all the way through, and I think, "Yeah, that's sad, but it didn't really hit me that hard."
2 hours later I still feel depressed and all I can think about is Twilight sobbing uncontrollably. Y-Y And then I cried. I also want to add my vote for, yes, we need some sort of follow up to this. Especially as regards how this effects AJ and Twilight's relationship.
Although i did not have a single boner throughout the entire fic, MANLY TEARS WEAR SHED MAN. You're story was amazing, it was more psychological then smut (to me anyway) and i think you did a good job. would like an epilogue.
thedood64. That sounds like it would shift the tone of the whole fic into a dark and sadistic comedy or just an anti-Spike fic. An epilogue could do the same thing without beating Spike further. Unless what you want is Spike getting kicked when he is down more then the reactions of everyone else to Spike's actions.
When I read, “SPIKE!! WHAT IN TARNATION ARE Y’ALL DOIN’ TUH MY DOG?!?!?!” I LOLed. I wasn't that impacted by the ending perhaps because of the lol that broke the tension for me, and I read a comment that spoiled the story. Interesting read regardless.
Somehow I as soon as I saw the title I knew I would regret reading this... But the description, the title, and the comments make it so horrifically compelling that I must!
I like the whole grimdark genre, but I just wish that the ending wasn't so abrupt. I'd've liked to have had the characters figure out why spike suicided, and come to terms with his problem.
Wow. That's all I really can say as a reaction. That and "Dang." Excellent story. Ending was spoiled on another site for me too but I just had to read it. Kinda sad that Spike died considering he's one of my two favorite characters but since it's just a story and not real I'm not super sad. 5/5 from me for emotional-ness and great writing
7866 well if woud be funny of you made an Alt ending, in where applejack dit not showup.and spike thinking that he got waywith it...but then fines out that Winona is pregnant ehehehe
YOU KNOW, IDEA! maybe insted of doing an alt. ending or somethin like that... you can make an epilouge of something btwn twilight and applejack...maybe even rarity. twilight must make applejack feel sad
Rule 59 all the way man! This was so whyboner that I cannot even explain it. I personally think that we should have gotten to see Spike wresting with his thoughts for a bit longer (the ending was a bit too abrupt) but otherwise it was very well written (disregarding the story).
The ending...damn
You bastard. I cried manly tears at tears at the ending.
oh lawdy
This is so messed up..... Yet so awesome.
This is just my opinion, but y'know what this needs? An alternate ending. Preferably splitting off after chapter 3, where maybe Twilight catches on to Spike's odd behavior and they have a really complicated talk about it all to figure out how to solve this problem, leading to a happy end. Or at least happier than this.
*shrug*
8033 You mean a wussy ending?? :P ...tell you what, I'll think about writing one. I won't promise an ending that's all candy and rainbows, I'm not even promising I'll write one at all, but if something comes to me...
8036 I agree. Some people are hatin' on the grimdark aspect, which really only comes in at chapter four, i think. Spring for a somewhat happy ending, and everyone'll be happy. Also, add a link in to the altered ending at the top of chapter four, and warn that the ending below is grimdark, and nobody can complain.
Holy sweet Luna.. goddammit Spike. Why'd you go and do that? ;w; but I loved the story. Well written. Definately and easily one of my favorites.
Not sure if I should be mentally traumatized by pure disgust or if I should be crying horribly.
Huh. I read the comments and thought it was really bad, but then I read it and it wasn't that extreme at all XD
And wow, that probably means I'm really desensitized and have been on the Internet too long :) Anyway, you should never be afraid to write what you want :p
... LOL
Reading this makes me wish there was an alt ending.
I wouldn't so much want an alt ending as much as an epilogue following Ch 4's events. Just curious to see how everyone else took it. Especially Applejack who was last seen furious and probably planning on beating the crap out of him.
^ this
totally agree with metaxzero, it would be great if there was an epilogue
by the way just love the way you describe everything on the most "disturbing" scenes, makes them feel lively (don't really know if I'm using the right term for this), and I really got high expectations on you as writer
this is the kind of story with the car wreck logic
the "worse" it gets the harder it is to look away
keep up the grat work
8617 I much appreciate it sir!! An epilogue is an idea that does intrigue me, a lot more than the alt-ending everypony keeps clamoring for. People should know how the others reacted and what happened in the following days. School is pretty busy for me right now and I'm busy conceptualizing my third fic, but I might have to make some time to write an epilogue. Thanks for the idea metaxzero, and thanks to you as well Gsbrill!!
I look forward to the epilogue I hope you write. It's an opportunity to flesh out your characters more on their feelings for life in Ponyville. For instance, not that you feel the same way, but I don't feel as though Twilight has the kind of personality to move on from something like this.
It may very well halt her emotional growth and leave here in a permanent stage of self-pity and blame for what has happened.
Hope to read you interpretation!
Not the friendship report I was expecting... This is Equestria, where ponies and dragons talk out their problems...
Imma cry now...
The only thing I can bring up is pretty asinine, but Twilight's screaming "Oh my God" doesn't really make sense, you know?
My feelings on this story
the epilouge would be an excellent touch. :)
The Ending Reminded Me Of School Days Don't Ask Why
YOU BASTARD
So I read this, all the way through, and I think, "Yeah, that's sad, but it didn't really hit me that hard."
2 hours later I still feel depressed and all I can think about is Twilight sobbing uncontrollably. Y-Y And then I cried. I also want to add my vote for, yes, we need some sort of follow up to this. Especially as regards how this effects AJ and Twilight's relationship.
Ah. You took the epilogue idea eh? You're welcome for the idea.
Can't wait to read it!
Although i did not have a single boner throughout the entire fic, MANLY TEARS WEAR SHED MAN.
You're story was amazing, it was more psychological then smut (to me anyway) and i think you did a good job. would like an epilogue.
thedood64. That sounds like it would shift the tone of the whole fic into a dark and sadistic comedy or just an anti-Spike fic. An epilogue could do the same thing without beating Spike further. Unless what you want is Spike getting kicked when he is down more then the reactions of everyone else to Spike's actions.
When I read, “SPIKE!! WHAT IN TARNATION ARE Y’ALL DOIN’ TUH MY DOG?!?!?!”
I LOLed.
I wasn't that impacted by the ending perhaps because of the lol that broke the tension for me, and I read a comment that spoiled the story.
Interesting read regardless.
Is it wrong that I got aroused by this?
Somehow I as soon as I saw the title I knew I would regret reading this... But the description, the title, and the comments make it so horrifically compelling that I must!
I like the whole grimdark genre, but I just wish that the ending wasn't so abrupt. I'd've liked to have had the characters figure out why spike suicided, and come to terms with his problem.
Wow. That's all I really can say as a reaction. That and "Dang." Excellent story. Ending was spoiled on another site for me too but I just had to read it. Kinda sad that Spike died considering he's one of my two favorite characters but since it's just a story and not real I'm not super sad. 5/5 from me for emotional-ness and great writing
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An epilogue is being made dealing with how the other characters viewed Spike's suicide and his actions before then. Just letting you know.
7866 well if woud be funny of you made an Alt ending, in where applejack dit not showup.and spike thinking that he got waywith it...but then fines out that Winona is pregnant ehehehe
YOU KNOW, IDEA! maybe insted of doing an alt. ending or somethin like that... you can make an epilouge of something btwn twilight and applejack...maybe even rarity. twilight must make applejack feel sad
when I read chapter 4 and instantly read winoa, I pretty much TeaL DeeR'd it all the way to the ending which was to say half-assed. I call Rewrite.
Rule 59 all the way man!
This was so whyboner that I cannot even explain it.
I personally think that we should have gotten to see Spike wresting with his thoughts for a bit longer (the ending was a bit too abrupt)
but otherwise it was very well written (disregarding the story).
Poor Spike...
We all know waht it's like to be caught raping an animal.
I thought he was gonna go for Granny Smith at first. For some reason, Winona was less horrifying.
When I saw that It said spike hung himself I started lolling is that wrong?
I jacked off to this........THE ENDING
Do spike still tasted like dog pussy when Twilight was doing CPR to his corps?
*Sheds a manly tear* Godspeed you magnificent bastard.
SPIKE! NOOOOOO!
R.I.P.
Spike Sparkle
He was a crazy son of a bitch.
Spike kills himself after he rapes a dog.
BEST STORY ON FIMFICTION! 5 STARS! FEATURE!
No, in all seriousness I actually liked this. However, don't get your hopes up as I like some pretty strange things.
Sad thing about this fic It can actually happen in real life.
THIS WAS SO FUCKING SICK..... Thank you :3 <3
>goes straight to 4th chapter
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damn never thought this would happen. i thought he was going to like do some other disturbing things but it was a great ending but very sad
Holy. Fuck. I was not expecting the story to go in this direction.
Yeesh. Now that's a well-deserved Dark tag if I ever saw one.
Bravo.
Dat ending . . . was fucking tragic
I mean DAYUM that was some sick shit!