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Talon and Thorn



After Prince Blueblood and Pinkie Pie met at the Gala, he'd expected it to be a one off thing, like so many times before. So why is he finding it so hard to tell her that?

Set in the The Lunaverse and taking place shortly after the Gala.

My entry to the June 2013 writing 'more than a thousand' challenge

18/12/2013 - I have revised the story (mostly chapter one to fit the changes to the Gala story) there is also some tidying up of the grammar. Thanks to Georg with his help.

Chapters (4)
Comments ( 86 )

Wow, a suprisingly lovely story. I am impressed.

Yes, some editing would be good, and there are bits that could be writen better, but the core of the story, the heart of it is lovely.

Apparently, the Equestrian equivalent of the Lousiville Slugger is the "Love and Tolerance." Eakin's Twilight calls hers "Home Run."

When did Raindrops become a romantic? Usually she's such a Gloomy Gus.

Pretty Woman reference? Big Mistake. Huge. (just kidding... I loled.) Actually, I could see another version of Blueblood trying to pull a Pygmalion/My Fair lady on Pinkie...

Ultimately, this was absolutely adorable.

my biggest issue with this story, is I see no real evidence that the Night Court viewed Luna as a real god.


Raindrops reading romance novels was established... somewhere. It might have been in In the Heat of the Moment though and thus of questionable canonicity.

Anyway, this is pretty awesome and I am behind this ship 120%.

*Grins and applauds* Very sweet! I really love your characterization of Blueblood, it fit in beautifully. The scenes were well described and well set up I loved the line about the baseball bat and Gummy's burning hatred of Blueblood. The only thing I can think to criticize is some small grammar and spelling issues but even they really didn't do much to lower my enjoyment of the fic.

Anything with a sturdy balloon ladder wins my vote.:pinkiehappy:

For the record, I really like this story, and hope everyone else does as well.

It's also alluded to in one of the Hearts & Hooves day stories that made it to canon; InsertAuthorHere's, specifically.

Such a new author in the middle of the feature box already?:trixieshiftright:
You're gonna go far kid:moustache:
Keep it up:raritywink:

A Sweet Taste of Cake inspired back story for the Cakes? I approve!

Very well done! Any chance of Lunaverse canonical status for this story?

I saw that too- and was quite pleased as well!

Needs to be canon so badly.

Excellent story, I enjoyed it quite a bit.:pinkiehappy:

I really enjoyed this story and how you portrayed both Blueblood and Pinkie Pie. I also like how Blueblood thought, makes lines he said in "At the Grand Galloping Gala" in a new light, such as "I am not certain I deserved that." when Luna talked to the night court the first time.

Ah, "Love and Tolerance" must be on loan from the Postmaster. That bat seems to be the only police force the little town needs. :pinkiehappy:

This story is littered with grammar errors and run-on sentences. There are periods in odd places and a fair number missing capitol letters. I don't think I've come across using single apostrophes instead of italics to designate thoughts in years and it was occasionally hard to make out on the first read through. Normally, the shear number of issues with the writing would have been a deal-breaker for me and I'd have quit after the first misplaces comma... but...

I wouldn't change a single thing in this story if you put a gun to my head.

Everything works. Every mistake, every odd turn of phrase, everything, just works. Whether intentional or not, the crazy and disjointedness of the writing actually accurately captured Blueblood's mental state perfectly, in a way I didn't even think was possible. This isn't about the soft kind of love that grows over time, nor the sudden attraction you feel at first glance, or the meeting of two who are destined for each other. This is the kind of love that hits you out of nowhere like a bat to the side of your head; the kind that sweeps you up into a whirlwind of confusion and doesn't let your feet touch the ground until you are miles out to sea. And this is the only kind of love I could ever see Pinkie involved in.:pinkiehappy:

You have taken a genre I normally have little interest in and wrenched my soul. You took a pairing that has no basis in anything and not only made me believe it, but turned me into diehard fan. And, and I swear to god this is true, when I finally stopped reading and realized that over an hour had passed, I looked around and suddenly realized there was cake in front of me. I have no memory of where this cake came from. I don't even think there was any cake in my house.

Your story is so sweet it actually, literally, spawned cake for me.

Liked, up-voted, favorited, and desperately wishing there was more!:heart:

:rainbowlaugh: This was incredible. That addition of squeeing Raindrops and Trixie finding Blueblood only makes this even better.

Seriously, this Blueblood x Pinkie ship is the craziest and yet most fun couple the Lunaverse ever produced! :pinkiehappy:

This, so hard. I doubt i could put it better without using 2 or 3 more paragraphs
Sweet, compelling, and engrossing, half because of its errors and half in spite of them.
I'll be shocked if this isn't cannon in the Lunaverse, it has my vote.

2737407 I adored it! It could use a run of editting but on the whole was amazing. I vote for canonicity and keeping Blueblood and Pinkie a couple in the Lunaverse.

FOREVER!! :pinkiehappy:


I think the case with that is, they generally don't.

However, Blueblood has just had a very nasty shock and there a case of something quacking and waddling like a duck. Generally ponies don't think of her as a god and she doesn't think of herself as a god but she's the closest to a supreme being anyone can think of so when you're under stress and shouting at someone how are you going to describe her to get your point across?


Its one of my favourite stories, so gentle and yet deep.

Carrot standing up to his future father in law despite being terrified, his righteous anger when the old man asks if he's going to leave when it looks like Cupcake can't have children. "Is it because I'm round?" is one of the most heartbreaking lines I've ever read.

The Decendent is a great author and I feel somewhat under valued although The Father of My Children seems to have broken into the big time, and for good reason.


My personal cannon is that the love and tolerance bats are on sell in Ponyville, probably one of Filthy's biggest sellers 'For all of your threatening needs'

Thank you all for your kind comments, at this rate I'm going to need a slave to ride behind me and remind me that I'm mortal.


It was one of the hearts and hooves stories that gave Raindrops her hidden romantic streak. She basically changes from 'I don't really care about love' to 'No, your perfect love must live for ever' when it looks like the spark might have gone out of the Bon-bon / Lyra relationship.

I'd say she's quite out of character here. I probably should have stretched out the conversation more giving a more gradual change from distrusting Blueblood to 'this is the most perfect love ever!' but hind sight is 20/20. If I had to defend it I'd play the sexist card and say she was either leading up to or just come out of her time of the year and was a bit more hormonal than normal.


Originally I had the entire Pretty Woman scene word for word but I was persuaded by my wonderful proof readers to trim it down and make the manager a little less silly. Personally I liked the image of Blueblood lazing in a chair with a drink at Pinkie put on a fashion show in front of him, that how all clothes shopping should be done.


Really? :pinkiegasp: I was in the feature box? :pinkiehappy: and I missed it! :pinkiesick: That what I get for sleeping I guess. :pinkiesad2:


I would really like to say I planned all the errors to make it better, but I won't because I don't like lying.
I was keeping Pinkie's grammar a mess of run on sentences because that's how she talks and tried to make it so that all her rants could be skipped without missing anything important so your brain could just fill in, Pinkie jabbers away about some here.
All the rest are just my own errors, punctuation doesn't come to easily to me so if they somehow improve the story its just a happy coincidence.


I'm not sure about forever, on a realistic front I could see them breaking up quite quickly. But I prefer not to live in reality which is why a Mr Blueblood-Pie and his very pregnant wife will be cameoing in one of the future chapters of my Dr Who / Lunaverse story set a few years in the 'future'.


Thank you all for your kind comments, at this rate I'm going to need a slave to ride behind me and remind me that I'm mortal.

To be historically correct, I believe the lowest-ranking slave in all the land must be standing at your side as you ride through the parade in your chariot, whispering in your ear, "Caeser, thou art mortal." :scootangel:

I don't have one of those, but I do have a wife to tell me to take out the trash and clean up the dog poo, which is much the same thing....


Well got to get rid of that pesky hubris somehow.

Now I just have to figure out who the lowest-ranking slave in the land is, Baldric's never around when you need him.

I really enjoyed this too. PinkiexBlueblood is best couple!
I hope it does become canon. It fits well with the After The Night revisions I'm doing, and if we're not going to have Blueblood as Evil Noble anymore, I think he works best as Pinkie's Stallion. Mostly because that gives him reason to show up in Ponyville at random times.

Trixie: Ah, a perfect vacation day! nopony around to bother me--
Pinkie: Trixie! Bluey's in town, but the motel is being remodeled and Gummy's on a date with a female alligator in my room. I told him he could sleep over in your Residency. Hope that's okay!


Or even better, they both need a bed for the night.

Trixie spends all night lying awake fearing there going to do 'something', but they just spend all night asleep resulting in both of them being well rested the next day but Trixie being a wreck.

I wonder if we could have something similar to the way Fluttershy thinks Trixie is persecuting her with Trixie thinking that everything Blueblood does, no matter how small, must be designed to get at her somehow.

"A punnet of strawberries, my good man"

"What are you going to do with those? You know I'm allergic to them, you're going to slip them into my food aren't you? Well I just won't eat or drink anything for the next week. You won't get me!"

And perhaps another running joke where Blueblood never remembers Raindrops's name or even that she exists. He met her at the Gala but has forgotten her in my story.

"Ah yes, the famous elements of Harmony, Trixie, Cherilee, Ditzy, Carrot Top, Lyra and the yellow one."



"My name is Raindrops, not the yellow one"

"Of course Draindrips, how could I forget"

"RAINDROPS!" she has to be held down by Cherilee and Carrot top to stop her gutting Blueblood

I guess we need a name for the couple, Pinkieblood sounds rather to 'cupcake' like. Bluepie maybe? Princepie?

That was really, really good :pinkiehappy:


I read entirely because of this comment. Worth it, too. /)


Blood Pie, of course. Which I'm almost completely certain is a real thing, but I'm apparently too lazy too google right now.

PinkiexBlueblood is awesome.

And as said, this showed it in a very sweet light, without ruining the craziness that makes it so awesome.

Adding to the requests to canonise.

I'm not sure Equestrian society would even have the concept of a god, actually; with Luna and Celestia (and even Discord) physically present, there wouldn't be a reason to develope that archetype.

Other than that, I like it :D


I did wonder about that. I wonder if the proto ponies in the pre unification period before they met the Princesses / Discord had some concept of a divine being. However, you've got to wonder who was running the sun and moon back then, unless they were on automatic.


The Kingdom of Unicornia raised and lowered the sun pre-Celestia. For maintaining this responsibility, they received tribute from the other nations.


So who taught them to do that? and what happened before the kingdom was formed?


I actually wrote a story about that. My headcanon is that the Sun isn't technically necessary for life, but was invented by unicorns to avert famine. It's very helpful, but life predated it, and (some) life would survive after. Nightmare Moon wouldn't be the only pony singing that it's the end of the world as we knew it (and she feels fine).

Obviously, this is nothing like how the sun works in the real world, but heliocentrism isn't plausible in a world where the sun and the moon can literally move at the whims of the world's inhabitants.

Astounding story and definitely has canon potential. I am of the opinion that the grammar and spelling errors should be cleaned up for the narration, though.

this is good. If I cry, I blame you. Yes, you. The one reading this. Only you. Don't think I'm blaming anyone else.


I don't know if this is cannon or not, but it should be.

A wonderful story. Wish it could be Lunavers cannon. Sad it ended, but it did end beautifuly. :pinkiehappy:

All shipping, to one degree or another, is crack shipping. This was one that I'd neither heard nor seen done before, and I was pleasantly surprised. It was a sweet, endearing little story and I rather enjoyed it. Pinkie's combination of unnatural tenacity, generally niceness and mind boggling Pinkie-ness can often be overplayed or misused in a fic, but you struck a nice balance here using it in ways that supported the story rather than detracted from it or that appeared tangential. There were little errors, as other reviewers have described, but the story stood quite well as-is. Good job!

Aww, Raindrops, your inner romantic is showing. It's nice to see how romantic the weather can be when a pegasus is setting it up that way for you.

Mr and Mrs Cake as protective parents is sweet. They do care a lot about Pinkie, and she honestly isn't always the best judge of character.

This is so adorable! It's also very believable. It's a good reminder that there are very, very few truly bad ponies in Equestria, but plenty of ponies who have let their emotions or ambitions lead them astray. Blueblood wants to be a better pony, but he doesn't believe that he can be. Fortunately, Pinkie Pie believes the best of practically anypony, and is very good at not holding grudges, making her exactly the pony Blueblood needs right now. Beautiful.

That cupcake probably had a Dash of RainBow in it.

The Pink Room was orange, but the Pretty Pink Party-Planning Party-Pony Pinkie Pie painted place pink. After painting it pink, Pinkamena Diane Pie went into an hypoglycemic catatonic state until the Cakes forced some sugar into her. Then, she started the mural.

D'aaaaw, Pinkie and Bluie, probably making some silly shade of purple...ie.
This was adorable, and more than a little touching. :twilightsmile:

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