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Oooo! This seems fun!

~Skeeter the Lurker

Well. Writing that went better than expected.

Well, it's not Dash and Lyra, but it's a start. :trixieshiftright:

Also, I'm going to wait until I'm home alone with my pussy to read this.
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great job man! :pinkiehappy: a quick qestion... ARE you going to make others? ... ponies/humans, i mean

Comment posted by LunarLover deleted Jun 17th, 2013

I would have used dead eye on her horse and have her tumble on the ground.:ajbemused:

Ohh i can see another chapter in this XD OHH i want more. Hahaha This is a great fic though i wonder what happens i mean Cody kinda fell in love with her...soo i wonder. That's me just wanting more and kept thinking about it.

Congrats on getting featured!

2736649
Aww, why thank you. :rainbowkiss:

Well, that was entertaining. Also, found a slight error,

tip of her shaft

since when did AJ have a shaft?

2736979
Heh, thanks for catching that one. :rainbowlaugh:

FEATURED! BAM! :rainbowkiss:

All within a few hours, too. We make a good team, Bob!

2737188
True dat! Also, will need your help with some sexy stuff in the future.

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Never done before shipping ahoy! :derpytongue2:

Another humanized featured again, eh? Oh, you. You keep my hopes up for one of my favourite fic genres like no other (EDIT: by adding some emotional scenes you truly make these kind of fics more enjoyable. It's not like other dung-fics by authors where it's nothing but mindless fucking, not mentioning names...). A good show! You've earned a commendation from me.

2737307

you keep my hopes up for one of my favourite fic genres like no other

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If it's humanized stories you're looking for, then you should stop on by and peruse my wares. With this being an equal-part collab with Bob, I was in charge with a decent amount of the emotional weight to the story, and think you might enjoy yourself with some of my solo outings.

Unless, of course, you meant your favorite fic genre is clop, in which case disregard my self-promotion, and I'll just go sit away from the glory light by myself somewhere.

2737434 Yes, I have read one of your stories: Fool's Gold. I already have The Laughing Shadow on my 'Read Later' list; we talked about this before, remember? Rest assured, it's definitely a high priority.

And no, I despise clop - unless it's done right (even then I still have standards) - but humanized gets a free pass; after all, I prefer to differentiate between clop and humanized erotica (I like to use the term 'clop' for erotic pony literature rather than humanized, that is). Not to mention I don't find equines attractive...

2737510
You'll have to forgive me, conversations tend to slip my mind sometimes.

Dammit, Bob. Why u always get featured and make good works!?

I'd have to say, this was action-packed, funny and sexy all at the same time. Loved it.

Although I am in the mindset of a more pure Applejack, so her actions in this when it came to being in the jail cell kinda threw me for a loop, but then I remembered, hey! This is a story! Then I just kinda went on with it from there.

While I did get a boner with the jail scene, I didn't act on it. Sorry, no jizz award for you here.

Reminds me of a good ol' western film that I used to enjoy...
Ah, the memories.

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You always make stories that leave us wanting more. Well more specifically me, but that's besides the point :twilightblush:. Will this ever be expanded on? There's so much potential!

Anyway's great work as always!

Can't wait for WolfGear to get bitchy 'bout this one.

Good job, Bob-O.

2738141
He hasn't touched my clop for some reason. :applejackunsure:

2738166

It's "2good4him"

It's so high that he can't even get on your level.

I'm probobly not the only one who thought of red dead redemption but I thought this was pretty good. Didn't really read any of the sex stuff( hardly ever do despite the tags and ratings) but still found this to be very enjoyable.

Dude, seriously, turn this into a big story. It's got loads to becum a really good one. Really want to see what happens after this.

This is one story that deserves a sequel! Please:applecry:

I kinda want this to become a full story, not just a one time thing. It has TONS of potential man

im dirty dan!.. I mean great story!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Haven't read a western in quite awhile and this was most excellent. I wouldn't at all mind seeing more from this universe. :eeyup:

2737610 Understandable, seeing you make and receive numerous replies. By the way, why is the first chapter's title 'chapter 1' seeing the story is over? There's little point naming it so if the story is complete.

2740734
It's just a thing with me. I always title a chapter with the word "Chapter" in it. :twilightsmile:

Humanized is the only form of clop I can handle. Proper humanizations. :trollestia:

The town’s mane trading source were those apples

I can't tell if that's a pun or a typo...:rainbowhuh:

You really should extend this into a small story. You have a great premise that deserves to be expanded upon.

While the plot is a tad generic, the details and dialogue make up for it by a huge margin. Well done dude. Heck, this would probably have been featured, even if it didn't have the cloppy bits. Additionally, I loved the setting and could easily see a series or at least a sequel out of this one. Or you can leave it as is.

The only proofing you missed was early on.

he spurs on his boots clinked with each of his footsteps as he he rested his hands on the grips of his pistols.

2743562
Caught that, and it did get featured, silly. :twilightsmile:

2743620
Just sayin that it this story, sans sexy bits, would have made it to the feature box. Now take you compliment like a man......silly:moustache:

2743643
No, I meant that it is in the featured box. Well, it is, if you have your mature settings on. There are actually two different featured boxes. One for mature settings on and another for mature settings off.

words can not even describe how good this was i mean...god that was good!:raritystarry::pinkiehappy:

Are you turning this into a series? Where a dude meets a humanized member of the mane 6 and they get it on? Cause this was vaguely similar to the one with Rarity, even the art! Not that there is anything wrong with that. These r great! If my hunch is correct cant wait for the next one.

MOAR, I NEED MORE! :rainbowwild:

That was a great story, keep it up.

Well... that certainly escalated quickly. I've never read a story that made me get that red. Nicely done.

Wow, this was another hot one! :heart::raritywink: Excellent!

The part about Bloom and their dad gave me some sad feels. But they were good, sad feels. :pinkiesad2:

RainbowBob is the king of humanized! :rainbowdetermined2:

This was a very well written and enjoyable story. Humanised and mature done right, in my opinion.
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The idea of Applejack, the Element of Honesty, making a dishonest living amuses me greatly. There is great potential here for a whole alt-universe "Wild West Appaloosa" series featuring the Mane Six in less-than-good roles. Basic ideas that spring immediately to mind:
- Pinkie Pie as a saloon gal and card sharp, who fleeces her marks one way or the other...
- Rarity as an upper class fashionista con-artist, using her feminine wiles to get what she wants...
- Rainbow Dash as a quick-draw/trick-shot gunslinger, who is not afraid to resort to cheating to stay the best in the west...
- Fluttershy as the rancher/land-owner, with a hidden mean streak that shows why a lone lady is able to hold onto so much land by herself in the rough-and-tumble west...
- Twilight Sparkle as the government official sent to clean up this one horse town, who weilds her authority in more ways than one...

I wish I had the time to write and turn these seeds of ideas into something a tad more fruitful. :ajsleepy:

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