I would like to see where this will go keep it up

interesting

I think the only ponies he'll kill is the gaurds, because the Yautja cant kill a target if its unarmed, and the citizens are to peaceful to fight. But I would like to see the mane 6's reactions when they see his "trophies", and whats underneath that helmet.

He shall kill ALL teh griffins!

Nice... I see a few errors but nothing to call to attention. Pretty good story so far, keep up the good work!

Predator in Equestria = Insta-fave.

Will follow this. But don't bring in the aliens or human. Somehow that always ruins it.

2785682 Don't worry, Im not going to add them in this one. If this fic gets popular, I may however make a sequel....... but only time will tell.

Kill them all! ........ Please?

hooray for the walking armory!!

wow, this could be the first time i see a predator fic. though you need to fix the character's lines; don't put them all in one paragraph, its just a bit confusing in my opinion. one more thing, i really, really need to ask you... isn't the predator's personality a bit... i don't know, human? i'll just have to wait and see. good work. keep it up, hope to see more soon!

Ace out

2788653 Thanks for the input bro. I will separate the speaking from the paragraphs for the rest of my story. Also I will be going complete predator lore, you know honour, language, attitude crap like that to make his ways of living and moral code different than that of a humans, So in other words I will try my best to make him less human
Thanks for the view!

Now, I will wait for the epic time between stare battle, Predator versus Fluttershy!

...... I really wish Fluttershy will fine after she witness Predator's trophy room... lot's of skull......

anyway, I like it!

damn, the predator's gonna have some fun earning him some new trophies from those guards!
EDIT: my call is that one of Celestia's best goes down first

2789036 I'd enjoy giving you info on the Yaut'ja any time you need it, what they'd attack, who to attack first, their weapons, etc.

Aww, yeah. This story has great potential.

i think that you should space out the words more and use different people talking in separate lines and make it more clear about who is talking. i also think that you could go into more detail about the image that you want us to see, such as the predators armour which you barely described.

Welp sucks to be celly and lulu at the moment.

want moar NOW

Oh sweet Dorito this is epic and awesomely written