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PropMaster


Master of certain tangible things, writer, mandalorian. Commission Info

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Princess Celestia wanders the lunar landscape, alone, trapped by an unknown magic. She follows a set of hoofprints that are not her own, which lead her towards the dark side of the moon.

What she discovers there may be more than she can handle.

A 30-Day Challenge story, with a new chapter guaranteed once a day, every day, for a full month. Inspired, in part, by Austraeoh.

Chapters (32)
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Comments ( 417 )

OOOOOO.

HELL YES.

Faved and tracked.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Update: Yeah. This is gonna be a DAMN good one.

~Skeeter The Lurker

Ah yes, the re-straeohing.
Dis gon b gud

Somewhat hilariously, I actually have more favorites than likes on this story. That's a new one! :rainbowlaugh:

Looking pretty good so far Props. Got nothing to complain about story-wise, except that there isn't a third chapter.

As for the technical side:

Many claimed that the Elements of Harmony were a dumb tool, a weapon that simply acted on the idea of Harmony: purifying, making clean and whole, or destroying where it could not make orderly. Celestia felt differently.

It'd probably be better to say who claimed this, i.e. Scientists claimed. . . etc. It's not necessary, but as the Elements of Harmony only resurfaced recently, I imagine that only relatively few people would know enough about them to make such a judgement.

[as she] so dramatically enjoyed shouting

Did you mean for dramatically to modify enjoyed? I guess you can dramatically enjoy something, but it's hard to visualise. Might want to play around with the phrasing here.

Otherwise, it was all pretty good and I'm looking forwards to more :twilightsmile:

Interesting stuff. Liked and favorited.

Can't wait to see how this pans out.

Well well. If it isn't my mortal enemy. Dr. Cliffhanger.:trixieshiftright: (Liked and faved immediately :heart:)

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Hmm I always seem to get more favs than likes by a good margin actually.

You know... It's really not that hard to reason why the Royal Guard exists in the first place.

It makes perfect sense.

Also, are you using the comics for references and ideas for the moon?

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Nope. It's my own thing going on.

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Oh, ok. So far so good!

I await tomorrow with anticipation!

~Skeeter The Lurker

Looking forward to reading this. Especially since a chapter is gaurntteed everyday!

So she's obviously stumbling around the things that Nightmare Moon built during her imprisonment. My question is, how did Celestia end up here? She's apparently still herself, and there doesn't seem to be any sort of melancholy atmosphere. She almost seems to be here on the moon by choice. Interesting.

I also like the idea that the Royal Guard was formed so that Celestia wouldn't have to risk fighting on her own. A god without restraint is a bad thing.

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It's a world made of cardboard to a being like Celestia.

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So she's got a Superman complex? Makes sense.

Now if only it were actually canon. If the wedding was any indicator, Celestia's about as threatening as wet tissue paper. Kind of hard to get hit by the Worf Effect when you've yet to do anything badass. :c

She's had her moments in the comic, though, which is turning out to be a better medium anyways.

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Celestia noted that there aren't many things that could truly harm her. A changeling queen powered up by the love of the Princess of Love's Husband qualifies.

Daaaaaaaaaayum....:twilightoops:

Holy hell...

The Diary of Nightmare Moon herself!

Juuuuiiiicyyyyyy!

~Skeeter The Lurker

I like this.

"I cannot abide puns"

Well, somebody isn't the element of laughter.

Looking good, Props.

Luna is one angsty pony.

:'( Don't hurt Celestia.
;'(

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Despite my stories, I actually like Princess Celestia. :rainbowkiss:

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:pinkiecrazy: I promise nothing! Stay tuned, true believer. You won't be disappointed.

2741695 You know I've yet to see what this needle I'm holding does... And before I can send my report to Princess Celestia I'll need to test it on somepony.....
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It would be a shame, if it was you.

(This Twilight Science thing would make a great version of Twilight Pinkamena come to think of it)

One for every day.... Yikes.

Has to be, what, over 365,000 buildings? All of which are built by hand by her?

God, I'd LOVE to see artwork on THAT.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Imagine how much you'd hate building things after a thousand years of building things. Imagine how much you'd hate it after just a hundred.

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I hope to never have to find out...

I love my legos something fierce.

~Skeeter The Lurker

2743116 Remember....
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Don't try anything funny.
Celestia must remain... UNHARMED!

(But seriously do what you like, I hate when I see commenters trying to tell the author what to do!)
For such short chapters you are keeping me very interested and the story seems to have a good depth to it which is great. No so much in Celestia's movements but more so in NMM's dialogues, and I suppose that is where it counts for this story.

Looking forward to reading more of this story!

"Celestia wondered if there were parts of Luna lurking beneath Nightmare Moon’s subconscious, influencing her."
Chekhov's gun: locked and loaded (possibly :twilightsheepish:)

Still going strong Props. I'll be interested to see how the ambient dream magic is going to interact with Celestia. Is it going to go all Freddy Krueger on her? Either way, things are looking pretty good :pinkiehappy:

I'm still wondering at why Celestia is here, but I guess that isn't a major plot point yet. I'm getting the feeling that this is going to end up looking a little bit like that one fanfic about Nightmare Moon's diary on the moon. Meaning, these mirrors are going to become a tragic and dreaded plot device.

Fun!

I am really, really liking these diaries.:twilightsmile:

And deeper down the rabbit hole we go.

I half expected it to be NMM who shot her to the moon.

But that isn't the case. So who could possibly do so?

(And suddenly, Twilight did it.)

~Skeeter The Lurker

Yay another chapter!

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What? I'm allowed to speculate...

Even if it's batshit crazy.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Angel did it. Pinkie did it.

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Experimental Party Cannon?

Still, the question of how the hell she even GOT on the moon remains.

~Skeeter The Lurker

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Bitch please, this is Pinkie. We don't need an explanation.

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True enough.

~Skeeter The Lurker

So she DIDN'T plan to end up on the moon. Doesn't seem too bothered, though. #Coolcatcelestia

Cool that we get some foil action with Luna, too. The cast is lonely if you have like one character.

I find the idea of the royal sisters having to extinguish lives in the past a provocative concept. So often are the alicorns portrayed as sinless and godlike. I believe few authors have attempted to give them dark pasts that they've have to cope with in order to become the saintly figures they are now. It's nice inspiration for Celestia-centric character analysis stories and jazz.

I dig forsaken messages left by ghostly inhabitants of abandoned locales, especially when it adds to a journey's narrative.

Oh, and bring the blue pages.

I dig that Celestia almost immediately becomes lucid when dreaming. I suppose, when you're immortal, it's hard to be surprised by your subconscious.

I'm a bit disappointed that you broke the solitary narrative of Celestia's journey with this--admittedly genius--use of exposition. There are so many dayum interesting ways to play off of Luna's ability to dreamwalk, and this is a really clever take on it. Still, I think the story would have been more intriguing if you allowed us to gleam everything important exclusively from what Celestia witnesses on the moon and from the shiet left behind. When you allow Celestia to make contact with Luna in her present-day mentality, it kind of sucks the tension out from the mystery, y'know? At least that's the way I perceive it.

Still, this is sexy landscaping (moonscaping?), and I appreciate that Celestia can take most of it in stride without getting unnecessarily anxious about it all. We could use less angsty protagonists in our poni poni poni stories, yes?

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I've always assumed that our sweet Alicorn Princesses have had to kick some serious flank in the past in defense of the realm. Things may be peaceful now, but they obviously weren't for a while, what with Discord and Nightmare Moon and Sombra running around. And have you seen their silhouettes in their flashbacks when they fight bad guys? Freaking terrifying aspect to 'em, man. I'd think that Celestia had it a bit worse. After all, a thousand years being the sole protector of the realm...

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Twist the knob counter-clockwise three times, then pull the lever up, then run across the map and poke the buttons in sequence, middle middle right left left, and then run all the way back and pull the lever down. Congratulations, you just acquired... a cup of water. WHAT? Oh, it's for the steam power machine in the next area... god, this game...

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I'd like to think that Celestia doesn't sleep often, but when she does she's enjoying her time in her sister's realm.
Yeah, I was considering keeping the narrative a pure Myst experience, but I've slowly begun realizing that with the length of each chapter, and my rough constraint of 30 days of time, I'll have to move things along a little faster than I'd like. I might end up stretching my 30-day goal out a little, already. Regardless, I'm glad you like the use of the dreamwalking stuff. It popped into my head a few days ago and I waffled over using it, but ultimately I went with it for the sake of this little moment.

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