Octavia just wants to get some shopping done. Get in and get out. Naturally, that's not going to happen. Especially not when Vinyl like's to look with her hooves, not her eye's.
2 mare's
1 superstore
Hilarity ensues.
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Funny, but in the beginning Octavia said that Scratch was just her friend and at the end their in a relationship, tis a problem.
Blast!
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DISMISSED!
that opening
GIVE YOURSELF A PAT ON THE BACK, SON!
you found the reference!
Wow, shisno, I haven't heard that word in a looooong time
ASTRO-GAZER!
You have found the RvB reference!
Give yourelf a pat on the back, you've earned it!
That was absolutely hysterical! And that ending was a gem! Well done
THANKS!
Stay tuned for MOAR, recruit!
Oh Vinyl we can't take you anywhere. Good story! I imagine that this is exactly what it looks like when Vinyl tags along with Octavia. Also...
I think you forgot a "she" before sashays. Other then that, good job!
Really enjoyed this! It's really well written, a good read!
Nice, the typos and grammar mistakes kinda ruin the impression, but it's nice. Definitely worth a thumb up.
I noticed a number of typos throughout. While they didn't detract from my enjoyment of the story, I'll just list them off so you can fix them (spoilers ahead for those who haven't read the story)
3. Egg's
Eggs shouldn't have the ' since it's plural not possessive
and i can see that Vinyl is starting to outpace me.
Uncapitalized I
if I wasn't already looking at her, i would have missed it.
Uncapitalized I
Sighing, i take off after her
Uncapitalized I
You know what, I'll stop here with uncapitalized I's. You should go through and look for them, though.
and was now strutting up and down the isle-ways,
aisle-ways or aisles.
Sorry boy's, she's taken.
Boys should be plural, not possessive.
After doing that for a few minute's, she falls in stride beside me.
Minutes should be plural, not possessive.
electric blue lightning started to ark from her body and horn.
arc is the word you're looking for here, not ark
And when she get's mad, she get's as unstable as a nuclear reactor on meltdown.
gets shouldn't have a '
Specifically the drowsy one's
ones should be plural, not possessive.
I smiled, and walked downstair's.
Downstairs shouldn't have a '
"WHAT IN THE NAME OF FAUST DID YOU DO TO THE T.V, WHY IS IT HOOKED UP TO THE MICROWAVE, AND YOUR SPEAKER!?"
Replace the comma after T.V. with a question mark, since that's two separate sentences.
"Atomic powered Wub's, duh- AH! NOT THE FACE!"
Wubs shouldn't have a '
It's a little harsh, but I think this is warranted.
Thanks for pointing out my mistakes. Be rest assured, I will rectify these as soon as I can!
Keep reviewing!
Ok,
I think I mended all the mistakes. Please correct me if I'm wrong!
I JUST FOUND OUT MY STORY IS IN THE "WHATS HOT"
SECTION!
page 3,4 or 5 I think...
screw it, my memory is terrible
A dislike?
I have been shamed....
oh well,
Sh@% happens
oh i needed a good laugh today
thank you good sir, for brightening my day 
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I fucking love that image.
I have it constantly copied, ready to be shown to idiots with a simple Control + V.
Oh my celestias flank this is amazing!
I'm glad you think so! Pt.2 is on its way! Yes, you read clearly folks, I am going to make a siries out of this! (Of course, they won't all be shopping trips) next adventure, Vinyl and Octavia vs the airport!
I have no idea what I just read
... but it was good. So, upvote! 
2730550 I'm not normally a fan of these but its a great laugh :)
ETA on the airport scene?
Loved this fic, even made a reading! can't wait for part two, at the airport!
here is the recording
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=mBOHln7eo7E&feature=youtube_gdata
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You can expect the airport scene tonight! It's been a long time in the making, but I think your gonna like it!
2934358 Meh I'm sorry but is it on an alternate account or something? I can't find it in your 5 stories ^^
Sorry, I'm doing some last minute revisions, and I've had lots going on, but dont worry, it will be up soon!
2964256 Looking forward!
That is now one of my favorite lines to appear in any fanfic ever
Very funny story, I loved it!
I liked the way you wrote Vinyl's character, which gave the story a touch of comedy.
Have a like!