Equestria is teetering on the brink of war. Twilight Sparkle is sent in to try and salvage the situation. Along the way she meets an old friend, and together they try and save what they had as the world around them burns.
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First comment woot!
The plot thickens, keep it up, great fic!
4254558 I'm glad you're enjoying it
I'll do my best to keep things cool.
Fear not, things will explode shortly.
Thanks for the comment btw.
As usual, another amazing chapter. Keep it up! I did see a few typos here and there, but with almost 13k words, that's a given.
Now to wait for the next chapter.
Wait, so now they have power armour?
I'm confused. Equestria is led by four immortal women, and they're still so patriarchal they haven't even given women the vote? Don't you think maybe you're pushing the early twentieth century feel a bit harder than the rest of your setting can support? I really can't imagine Celestia (or, gods help me, Luna) putting up with that shit for five minutes, much less millennia.
Other than that, and the fact that general grouchy's earlier treatment of Twight (off of the instruction course) boardered on insubordination, I am loving this story.
I liked this chapter, even if it felt a little too long. Looking at the story front page, I'm sad that I will soon be done with this one.
I thought these were bolt action rifles.
Since when was she here? The flashback placement was horribly awkward and could have been its own chapter preceeding this one. Very well done on the espionage stuff. Good political and fight scenes, too. I see why you're merging what would have been multiple chapters into single large chapters.
5972737 OOps, I should have made that clearer. There are two Adrelanas in this story, Zsaryna Adrelana (Valorossiyan ambassador) and Vladmir Adrelana, her younger cousin, who is in the Legion for reasons that shall be explained later in the story.
yeah I have to agree here. I can understand the military being patriarchal all that would take is one generation of officers being nothing but men and just preventing promotions. combined with the general gallant attitude of Equestria it would be easy to keep it that way via white knight syndrome. celestia wouldn't be able to do to much about due to culture and her status would just hurt the issue as while she has the power to back her claims she is the exception not the rule. but really? civil inequality is about to fly as much as with her as the military does with Luna.
the only way this makes sense is the fact that the princess does not in fact have absolute power but is the head of a confederation. if all of the nobles were supported by the same kind of witch hunts that ponyville does against people that are different that might make a little bit of sense, but you'd think over the hundreds of years she'd have manipulated things like the education system to undermine that stance.
... then again with all the civil wars and invasions equestria has she probably had to curry favor with her nobles to get support for her wars. still your pushing it there I think.
you know when I was thinking about getting the support of fellow heads of state I was thinking about the holy roman empire.
that's a scary thought since equestria is an alliance of city states lead by Celestia does that mean it's like the holy roman empire but it's emperor never dies... you know that makes a lot of sense. Celestia is the Charlemagne of this world who went on an adventure ended up in control of a country and never stopped. gaining a sort of stability the real empire never did. it would explain why people refer to her as empress and equestria as empire occasionally. they even have a runner for the paladin position in the elements of harmony... only problem is that by canon the six are the first since the princesses to use them... well there are always the royal guards I guess but those are more like run of the mill knights.