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I like the idea and the storyline, but you should really either get an editor, or dubble/triple-check your writing, because I've probably encountered more than twenty misspelled words. eg: 'wou;dn't' or 'sh' instead of 'wouldn't' or 'she'.
I've personally experienced that reading stories with few mistakes is nicer and doesn't mess up the rythm of reading.
I also know that some mistakes go by unnoticed even when triple-checked, but most should be out by then. (Also from personal experience)
I hope this helps, and I hope you continue the story. It is certainly a promising start.
~ThePorqupine
2713514 Thank you for your input, I do appreciate it. How ever most of those errors were do to my abnormally large fingers pressing more keys than they weree suppose to. Maybe I should type slower.
2713624 Pretty much
Wat about your other colabs?
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No idea
2714533 Currently being redone cause my computer crashed...
2714625 ah ok... could've wrote a blog or something... but watever
2714633 In hindsight probably a good idea.
2714643 that was a good idea? Shoot I must be getting my sanity back
seems a little bit rushed and i hope this chapter gets a little rewrite but still good also I think it would've been funnier if she sprayed somepony with the bear spray.
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All in due time, I'm debating who will get maced. Either Blueblood or Filthy Rich (I think that's Diamond Tiara's dad)
2715383 Have it be Filthy Rich as much as I dislike blueblood I don't really think he deserves it but filthy... he is related to that bitch diamond tiara and thats more then enough to get him maced.
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2715431 I helped!!!
Maced? Given how quickly she's able to use magic, whoever pushes her too far will be lucky if they don't get a fireball to the face.
Why would going back kill her? The outrush of magic would be the same as the inrush she experienced on arrival in Equestria, and she survived that too.
Why Filthy Rich? He's a pretty decent guy all things considered.
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very little Destruction Magic will be used in this story, and Im thnking on having her go through a similar process that foals go through, surges and such.
Imagine every single vibrating molecule in your body being stopped and then exploding at the speed of light. The magic has actually fused into her body and the sudden loss of background magic (Acting as the positive Pressure that holds magical beings together) would cause it to explode out into a massive fireball capable of the decimation seventeen city blocks. At least that's my theory.
Anyone related to Diamond Tiarra deserves to be maced, shes a very evil little filly
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That's the thing though, the pressure differential would be the same whether it rushes from the magically saturated environment into a container that's a magical vacuum (i.e. Erica) or from said (now saturated) container into an environment devoid of magic. Implosion or explosion, the force is the same. She should be dead.
....what? Oh, all right. "Total protonic reversal. That would be bad. Important safety tip, thanks"
It's not entirely his fault Diamond Tiara is a selfish waste of perfectly good oxygen; whenever she was a bitch in front of him, he at least tried to rein her in. Can't we just chuck her in a wood chipper and be done with it?
2716362 She would be dead if Twilight hadn't knocked her out and brought her to the hospital where they sorted the whole thing out. Magic is very finicky about that sort of thing. And Erica is more of a sponge than a vacuum, which explains how she can cast magic as well as absorb it Squeeze a sponge and water comes out (Magic casting) get it wet and it absorbs it (Magic Absorption) Now Imagine This with Gravity, The pressure of outside Background magic is much greater than the pressure of internal Magic in Erica so it keeps her from exploding. That's Gravity, Now we take the pressure of Magic away by placing her on another planet for the sake of argument earth. Now there's no pressure holding all the magic that's fused to Erica and that means it expands at an ever increasing rate in a fraction of a second stopping the vibrations of her bodies molecules and ripping them apart until finally it can no longer be contained and explodes in a massive fireball that could do a lot of damage. Needless to say that is VERY bad but Erica would be dead within the firs millisecond sooo
2716037 In response to what I said about destruction magic....well I changed my mind. Still going to go through surges though.
this is good
2728972 Thank you Mister President
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P.S. I like the explanation of magic absorption, may I borrow it? Plz?