The ponies were, to say the least, shocked to see both Princess Celestia and Twilight Sparkle standing there. Twilight appeared to be in terrible condition. She was disheveled and exhausted, barely able to stand. Celestia had bandages on her wing and chest, as well as various bruises. But most obvious and puzzling of all was Celestia’s mane and tail, which were pink, not shining, and not flowing. The device on the back of her head was small enough for them not to notice it.
“Twilight!” Spike exclaimed as he ran towards the pony whom he had missed more than anything. He hugged her as tightly and as dearly as his little arms could manage. “I missed you so much.”
“Welcome back, Twilight! Welcome back, Princess!” Pinkie Pie shouted jubilantly, throwing confetti in the air. “I made you guys an ‘I’m so glad to see you back safe and sound’ cake!” Pinkie pulled a vanilla cake out of nowhere for the guests to see, which had “I’m so glad to see you back safe and sound” written in pink icing. There was also an icing drawing depicting Twilight and a pink-maned Celestia, with Pinkie Pie between them with her hooves around them.
Twilight felt sick from looking at the baked treat. All cake did now was remind her of how she had helped GLaDOS. “I’m sorry, Pinkie. I’m not really in the mood for cake right now.” Celestia, however, was eying the baked treat fondly.
“Good heavens, what happened to you two?” Rarity asked. “Twilight, you poor thing, you must have been through such a rough time. I am treating you to a full day at the spa ASAP. And, dear Celestia, Celestia, what happened to your mane?”
Rarity tried to approach the two ponies, but before she could, Luna shouted:
“Stay away from her!” The lunar princess pulled Spike away from his hug with her magic. Rarity and the others were unsure of how to react. “Something terrible has happened to my sister.”
“Luna, dear sister, I’m so happy to see you again,” Celestia said sweetly. She slowly walked over towards her younger sister, holding her wings out as if ready give her a hug. “You don’t know how much it means to me just to be able to see you. I was afraid that we would never see each other again.”
Luna stepped back and spread her wings outward defensively. “Stay back!”
Celestia stopped and tilted her head in confusion. “Sister, are you not happy to see me come back okay? Don’t you love me” Celestia asked tearfully. She tried approaching her sister further.
“You are not okay,” Luna hissed. She continued backing away cautiously. “Tell me what happened to your mane,” she demanded. Luna tried to appear assertive, but she could not control a few tears that seeped from her eyes.
“Princess?” Chell asked Luna. “What’s going on here?”
“Care to explain?” Luna relayed to Celestia, giving her one last chance to reveal herself. The ponies could see how upset she was, though they were not exactly sure why.
GLaDOS knew she was playing a fool’s game, so she stopped trying to masquerade.
“You’re good, Princess. Clearly, you’re the smarter sister. It’s probably for the better that you get to live on while she dies of old age.” She mockingly held a hoof to her mouth to cover a devious smile littke.
Luna could no longer hold back her anguish. Her face contorted until she wept uncontrollably.
Though most of the ponies knew what was going on, none of them wanted to admit it to themselves, until Chell finally decided to say it.
“We’ve had enough of your torment!” Chell snapped. “What did you do to Princess Celestia, and why did you come here in her body?”
“Chell, I’m so glad to finally see you again… face to face.”
“What. Did. You do. To her?” Chell repeated.
“Don’t worry about dear little Twilight. She’ll be okay, but I’m afraid she won’t be able to answer any of your burning questions right now. I’m so dreadfully sorry about that,” Celestia said in mock apology.
“You monster!” Spike cried as he ran towards Princess Celestia in a desperate attempt to attack. The white alicorn effortlessly flung the small dragon away with a simple magic spell.
Luna gasped upon seeing her able to use this power. She was horrified that Celestia, despite forfeiting most of her power, still had enough left for GLaDOS to use.
“I asked about Princess Celestia,” Chell reiterated sternly.
“Oh… her?” GLaDOS scoffed. “Why would you possibility care about her? She was too stupid to do make decisions on her own, so now I’m making them for her.”
Wheatley, finally catching on, realized the truth in horror. He slowly tried backing away from her, being surprisingly completely silent. However, this still caught her attention.
The turned her head to face him. “Well, this is quite a pleasant surprise.” She grabbed him with a telekinetic spell, pulling him towards her.
“Ah!” he screamed. “No, no, no, no! Let me go! Let me go! “Let me—”
She cast another spell which overlaid a volume icon over Wheatley that resembled a speaker emitting sound waves, which then disappeared from the icon, and Wheatley was mute. In actuality, the effect was really just for show. The true nature of her spell worked by removing the air from a thin spherical shell of around the target, creating a soundproof vacuum. With the different laws of physics of this world, GLaDOS actually wasn’t sure that it would work.
She chuckled in the same pleasant manner that Princess Celestia would. “I wasn’t actually expecting to see him here, but I’m so glad that I did. Come to think of it, I’d say he would make a pretty fair exchange for little Twilight.”
“Let Wheatley go!” Chell’s shouted. “He’s apologized for what happened. I won’t let your hurt any of my friends,” She held both of her front portal guns towards him and used their miniature gravity guns to grab a hold of him. The force was enough to keep her from falling back down. But Celestia levitated Wheatley higher and shook Chell off halfway across the room. Had it not been for her long fall boots, she would have been hurt.
“So, you’re friends, now?” she asked in confusion. “A little quick to forgiveness, don’t you think? But I am not. Besides, I haven't heard him apologize to me.” Wheatley struggled to move, but was unable to do much against the golden magic that held him in place. “Besides, you don’t even know why I truly hate him, neither does he for that matter. But I assure you that he will deserve everything that I will inflict upon him. So, please give me the benefit of the doubt that my reasons are rather justified, not that you would understand.”
“You have no excuse for this,” Chell said defiantly.
Princess Celestia sighed. “You always assume everything I do is bad. In fact, I came here because I was feeling nice. Though I suppose coming here in the princess’ body does look pretty bad, I assure—”
“WHAT DID YOU DO TO MY SISTER!?” Luna screamed.
Celestia just smiled back. “Only what your sister asked for me to do. I suppose I could tell you the details, but I think it would be best if you heard it from… her mouth. Although not… literally, of course.” She couldn’t help but giggle a little bit.
Celestia used her magic to deactivate the spell which powered Wheatley’s rotor, causing him to crash to the ground. Then, she briefly convulsed and fell down. She gasped for breath and looked around at her surroundings. Her eyes immediately watered. She just lay on the floor as she was.
“Luna, I’m so sorry. I never meant to hurt you.”
Somehow, Luna knew that this was in fact her sister speaking, and not a trick played by GLaDOS.
“Tia, what are you saying? You… let her do this to you?”
She nodded sorrowfully. “I’m sorry, Luna, it was the only way. I couldn’t let her do this to Twilight. I’m taking Twilight’s place so that she can go back home. Please forgive me.” As much as she wanted to, she wasn’t willing to let GLaDOS know the atrocities she saw GLadOS commit in her vision of the future. The full truth was that this was her only chance to convince GLaDOS to spare the lives of her subjects.
Luna had no idea how to react. “You let her take away your immortality? Did you not think about how this would affect me? How could you do this to me? WHAT AM I GOING TO DO WHEN YOU DIE?”
The room was silent. Luna could no longer speak, or even look her sister in the eye, for that matter. She grieved, thinking of the inevitable loss of the closest pony in her life.
Celestia didn’t know what to say back.
“You’d never do this to me!” Luna sniffled, still looking away.
“I’m so sorry, sister. I can never ask you to forgive me, but I want you to know that you—”
Celestia convulsed again briefly, eyes forced shut. Then she calmed down and opened her eyes. She stood back up off the floor.
“… Really don’t mean that much to me. I sacrificed my life because I care about Twilight more than you. Says a lot about how meaningless you are to me, doesn’t it?” Celestia snickered coldly in a whiny imitation. She picked Wheatley back up again.
“You heartless fiend! You didn’t even let her finish!” Luna scolded.
“I’m not really the type for emotional moments. Besides, she isn’t even sorry, anyway. If she were, she would have considered how telling me how to take away her immortality would have impacted you, or all of Equestria for that matter. She was just interested making up for how bad she felt for failing to stop me. It’s a really funny story, actually. You know, I actually think she loves you less than when she sent you to the moon.”
“You lie,” Luna stated. “Everything you say is a lie. I trust my sister with all my heart, so I know that whatever reason she truly had, it was a good reason. I will not let you hurt her or anypony ever again.” Luna prepared a powerful magical spell, which summoned darkness in the room. The swirling energy gathered around her horn.
“Wait!” Celestia shouted. Luna kept her spell charged, but did not act. “Before you do that, let me explain why that would… not be in your best interest.”
Luna placed her spell on standby, waiting for the pony that took her sister’s form to speak.
Celestia turned her head to the side, letting all the ponies see the device on the back If her skull that was controlling her body. “Within this little device are multiple redundant dead pony switches: the mechanics of which will remain a secret. If this unit were to fail or be incapacitated in any way, or at my command, Princess Celestia dies in one or more of several rather painful ways. As for me, your sister found out the hard way that I have a tendency to… not die. That is to say, I make backups of myself and upload my memories to that backup in case anything were to ever happen. You don’t think I’d be stupid enough to come all the way here at a risk of being permanently disabled, do you?
“So think very carefully about what you’re going to do. Do you really want to risk losing what precious little time you have left with her? I suppose it would delay me a bit, but I’ve ensured that I will always know Twilight’s location, no matter where she is, and she’s still fully capable of serving her intended role. And it’s only a matter of time before my own body is fully functional again, so you’ll just draw this whole thing out even more, which is something that nobody wants. So, it’s your choice, really.”
Princess Luna huffed in frustration. Angrily, she dissipated her magic spell in a quick, outward puff.
“That’s a good little princess. And you know, I honestly don’t care what you think about your stupid sister, because that’s not even why I’m here. I’m simply making good on my non-obligatory to promise to to her that I would return Twilight home in exchange of such a generous gift from her. I’m doing this out of what little kindness I have. I’m only trying to be far.” She levitated Twilight forward into the room and placed her down in the center. “So, if you’ll excuse me, I’ll be leaving with that cake now.”
She then levitated Pinkie Pie’s cake out of her grip, causing her to shout: “Hey, I worked hard on that cake for Celestia and Twilight! Not for meanie heads like you, BLaDOS! No cake for you!” She flailed her forelegs wildly in the air.
“Celestia will be eating this cake, you idiot. And if I know her, she will be enjoying it just as much as me. But don’t you think I deserve some cake as well? I’m trying to be nice, I really am. I brought Twilight back home safely just because I think she’ll be happier here. I didn’t really have to do this, unless you’d rather I take her back.” She snickered. “Hm hm… And I can assure you that Twilight won’t be wanting any cake, anyway. So, it’s a win-win. Besides, my cakes are better.”
“You still haven’t apologized for whatcha did to Fluttershy,” Applejack defied, “and it ain’t very kind of you to be using Princess Celestia like that. That don’t sound cakeworthy in my book.”
“I’m not here to make amends. I’m just holding my end of deal, which was optional, may I remind you. And I’m only using Celestia’s body because she broke the one I already had. So, if you think about it, this is just her paying me back.”
“Hold up, didj’yall just tell us that you’re body’s broken?” Applejack pointed out.
“Whoops. Never mind I said that,” Celestia said rather calmly, as if she didn’t even care.
“You aren’t getting away with this, GLaDOS! We’re gonna stop you, right here, right now,” shouted Rainbow Dash, hitting her hooves together in a threatening manner. “... Or you’re gonna taste the PAINBOW!”
Princess Celestia rolled her eyes. She wasn’t the only one.
“And how do you suppose you’re gonna do that? You gonna ‘wup my flank,’ or rather, Celestia’s? That would be very effective, at hurting her. What a simple, simple mind you have, Rainbow Crash. Now, I really have better things to do than to be throwing petty insults at you ponies. There will be plenty of time for that later. We’ll have the rest of your lives for that. Right now, I have a plan to enact.”
She paced around the room playfully, getting uncomfortably close to each pony as she did so. “Let me give you a little hint of what I’m doing: it involves creating a gateway to an alternate universe. It’s gonna bring forth something really nasty into this world, which will give me everything I need to rebuild Aperture Science in all its technological glory. I’ve already built the machine that will create the portal, I’ve already found a power source,” she tapped on her horn, “and I’ve figured out the calibrations to make everything work. Now, all I need to do make the proper adjustments... and hit the switch.”
She faced Chell. “So if you really want to stop me, then we’ll have to do this the old-fashioned way, in my lair, just before I hit the switch. You still have just enough time if you hurry fast enough. I look forward to seeing you there, Chell.”
“Why are you even telling us all this?” Chell asked. She thought about how just GLaDOS casually revealed that her body was under repair a minute prior. “I know you’re hiding something. There is no way you would let us know how weak you are.”
“Hm… you do raise a valid point, but come on, when have I ever made sense?” Celestia paused for a moment, as if she was listening to something.
“She didn’t ask you. Just shut up. Shut up!”
“What?” Chell asked in confusion.
“No, that’s not true. You don’t know me!” Celestia slammed Wheatley into her head as hard as she could. The core rolled in place as if in pain, but it was impossible to hear anything from him. She backed away, pulling the levitating cake and core with her.
“I told you to shut up, you stupid horse! Why the hell am I even listening to you again?”
“Celestia?” Twilight croaked quietly to the princess herself, despite her exhaustion. “What are you telling her?”
“That wasn’t the answer I asked for!” GLaDOS shouted madly. When I don’t need you anymore, you will receive a very slow and painful death, you understand? And I’ll make your sister watch!”
Luna had already cried out all her tears. The threat against her sister felt like a kick to the ribs as she already lay helplessly on the ground.
Celestia levitated a dull letter opener nearby and forced it against the side of her right temple. Then she moved Wheatley in position, ready to use the metallic sphere as a hammer.
“Please, don’t hurt her!” Luna begged.
“I don’t care if I can feel it!” Celestia shouted to herself. “Anything is better than having to listen to you.” She waited for a moment, and then swung the core hard against the handle, driving the dull blade through her skin. It wasn’t sharp enough to break through her skull, but the sting was blunt and powerful, and it hurt like hell. She dropped the blade to the floor, but held onto Wheatley and the cake
Celestia erupted in painful, uncontrollable laughter. There was blood dripping from the side of her head. She got a kick out of seeing the utter horror on everypony’s faces. Once she calmed down, she turned her attention back to the ponies in the room, specifically Chell.
“I’m sorry about that. I thought I disabled my ability to scan her thoughts, but apparently, I still am. There must have been some malfunction with my active neurologic scanner. But as I was saying, you only have so much time before Equestria as you know it will end, so you might want to hurry up. I’d say you have about… two hours before I’m ready. I think you know where to find me. Don’t get lost, and don’t… be late.”
Before anypony could respond, both she, Wheatley, and the cake disappeared in white flash of light.
“Hey, she stole my cake!” Pinkie shouted, shaking a hoof at where Princess Celestia was standing.
“Who cares about the cake!?” Chell shouted angrily. “Didn’t you just see her take Wheatley? She just thinks she can do whatever she wants with my friends. What the hell does she even need him for, anyway?”
“Aw, I miss Idsy,” Pinkie sighed.
“Sounded like it was personal,” Applejack said. “I mean, she’s the grudge-holdin’ type, right? Didn’t you say he took her body before?”
“Hey, we have more important stuff to be worrying about right now,” Ditzy interjected, “like GLaDOS doing that… inter-mentional… thing she was talking about. What are we going to do about that?”
Twilight found herself feeling faint, and she could no longer stand. She collapsed from exhaustion, but Rainbow Dash was quick to swoop down to catch her before she hit the ground.
“Thanks, Rainbow,” she whispered. “Just lay me down. I’ll be fine.”
“What did that monster do to you, Twilight?” Rarity asked.
“Are you gonna be okay?” Spike asked. He ran by Twilight’s side and put a claw on her forehead.
“Yes, I’m fine,” she whispered.
“Twilight, I know you’re not feeling well, but is there any chance you could tell us anything that would help us,” Rainbow Dash asked hesitantly.
Twilight only looked back. She tried to say something, but looked as if she was in pain. “I can’t… just don’t… worry about me. I can’t…” Twilight could say no more and gave up trying.
“You see what she did to her?” Applejack protested. “How can we stand around while this happens to Twilight? She has no concern for anypony. We can’t let this go on no more! We gotta stop her before she hurts anypony else.”
“Yeah, she’s done some really nasty stuff before, but this just takes the cake!” Pinkie exclaimed while slamming her front hoof down on the living room coffee table. She was met with a few awkward glances
“What?” Pinkie defended. “I was talking about the whole ‘hurting Twilight, turning the princess into a cyborg, and taking over Equestria’ thing.”
Princess Luna slowly walked towards the center of the room and paced around. “My sister’s magic is far weaker than it was before, but she is still capable of performing some advanced spells. Her knowledge of magic is vast, but with most of her power gone, GLaDOS can surely now be able to see inside her mind and obtain this knowledge. She may be weak, relatively speaking, but she is not to be underestimated. Undoubtedly, just as Chell suspects, there is something in her plan that she hasn’t told us about, so we must proceed with caution. But failing to act is not an option.”
Chell held a portal gun in front of her. “I’m ready to stop her. Just say the word, and I’m there.”
“I’m afraid you will not be able to face her alone, even with the help of your friends. Only my magic will be able to stand against hers. But although I am more powerful than her at the moment, she has wit and cunning, and most likely, tricks that we do not know of. Worst of all, she has my sister as a hostage. I’m afraid that we cannot afford to let her use that against us, so I am prepared to…” she sighed, “make the necessary decision… if it comes down to that.”
“Wait, you’re not saying you’d actually…” Rarity began. She tried imagining if she could let go of her Sweetie Belle if she were in that situation. The thought sickened her. Applejack, as well, had trouble imagining herself making the same decision if it had been Apple Bloom in that place.
Luna nodded slowly. “I cannot fathom the pain my sister endured when she was forced to banish me to the moon, but she did so to save Equestria from eternal darkness. I know that she made the right decision. Now that I am the one faced with this impossible choice,” she took a long, deep breath, “she would not want me to place her life over the fate of her kingdom.”
“I can’t imagine how difficult that would be,” Ditzy consoled.
Luna huffed. “Talking about this anymore is not going to get us any closer to stopping her. Now, we must plan how we will do it.”
“This isn’t going to be easy, but, what other choice do we have but to make our stand?” Chell said.
“Didn’t she seem a little… off to you?” Applejack mentioned. “I mean, other than that whole crazy freakout at the end there. Like, why was she telling us about what everything she’s gonna do? Only overconfident idiots do that. And why they hay does she want us to go all the way up to her lair way on top of some mountain to just to face her? Doesn’t that just seem just a might... cliché?”
“Indeed, something doesn’t add up about this, “Princess Luna pondered aloud, “but I can’t figure out what it is. Her behavior seemed to contradict itself. I almost felt as if she wanted us to stop her.”
“Whaaaat?” Rainbow exclaimed obnoxiously.
“I think there’s more to her than her desire to do harm, and I think that is what my sister sees, “Luna explained. “As terrifying as it was to see Tia’s body hurting herself, I think that I now understand the reason she did what she did.” Luna thought for moment as she continued her pacing. “She wasn’t trying to drive GLaDOS insane. Although it’s something that she is can be quite good at, I don’t think my sister was intending to make GLaDOS do that.”
“So, what do you think she was doing?” Ditzy asked.
“I think my sister was trying to help her.” A few of the ponies looked at her awkwardly. “What I mean is,” Luna quickly corrected, “she is trying to help GLaDOS realize that she doesn’t need to go down her current path. I know Tia. She loves all ponies, even her enemies. By putting herself in the position that she’s in, she can better gain GLaDOS’s trust so that she will be able to change her heart. My sister has a gift to see the light of good in all ponies, no matter how hard of heart, even if it’s someone such as GLaDOS.” Her tone became heavier. “But this is also her weakness. I suspect that her compassion is what led to her defeat.”
“Well, I’m not as willing to see whatever ‘light’ GLaDOS has in her,” Chell said. “I tried that once. I trusted her a long time ago as if she were my closest a friend. It was only after I found happiness that she showed me that she was nothing more than the monster I always thought she was.” Chell felt some pain inside as a deep seeded anger boiled up. She thought about when she found GLaDOS as a potato being consumed by a bird. Had she known what she would do in Equestria, she would have left just her there, or perhaps crushed her in her hand.
“I… hate her. You know I did not start a new life here to let her destroy it. That’s why I am going to stop her. Who’s coming with me?”
There was a groaning from low on the floor, from Twilight. “Uhhhh… you… she wasn’t able to finish what she was trying to say.
“I’m in!” exclaimed Rainbow Dash from where she was at by Twilight Sparkle. She hushed the tone of her voice upon realizing the pain of her nearby friend. “But somepony’s gotta stay here and watch over Twilight. She doesn’t look very good right now.”
“Donnn…” Twilight whispered.
“Oh, Twilight,” Rarity interjected, “would you feel better if I took you down to the spa like I promised I would? You must be overwhelmed with stress from being in that nasty place for so long. But I know that Aloe and Lotus will fix you right up.”
“Thank you... but... you really don’t have to—”
“And you must be super hungry,” said Pinkie Pie. “You can’t go to the spa on an empty stomach. How about I treat you to anything you want from Sugarcube Corner first? Then I’ll do whatever I can to cheer you back up!”
Pinkie put both her front hooves in the air holding crudely made stick puppets. On her right hoof were puppets of herself, Twilight, Chell, Ditzy, Rainbow Dash, Applejack, Rarity, and Fluttershy, and on the left was a ridiculous depiction of what she thought GLaDOS looked like as a mechanical alicorn.
“Rrar! I’m evil, and I’m gonna take over the world!” Pinkie voiced in a bad falsetto impression while shaking GLaDOS’s puppet.
“Never! We’re gonna stop you because you’re evil!” she voiced as she shook the hoof with her friends. “Super pony rainbow attack!” She brought her right hoof over to her other one and knocked the GLaDOS puppet down. “Aaaahhhh!” She made GLaDOS scream as the puppet fell off her hoof.
Despite Twilight’s less than cheerful mood, she couldn’t help but crack a smile and let out a little chuckle at Pinkie’s silly show. She wept out of happiness for her friends’ regard for her and nodded slowly. “I’d… like that very much, both of you. It really means a lot to me for you girls to go out of your way to cheer me up, but…” Twilight’s smile disappeared “... I really don’t deserve it, not after what I… helped her do. You girls have more important things to deal with. I should go with you guys to face her.”
“You ain’t in a position to go anywhere,” Applejack spoke. “Let somepony take care of you for buck’s sake. I know I would, but I think Rarity and Pinkie Pie will do the job just fine, that is, if they’d rather stay here. So, I guess I’m goin’.”
“Besides,” Rainbow Dash added, “it’s not like any of this is your fault. There is nothing that you could ever do that would make us care any less about you. We’re just glad that you’re back.”
“But… I don’t want to be a bother…” Twilight protested.
“Nonsense, Twilight,” Rarity assured. “I’m sure Princess Celestia wanted you back here for a reason. Besides, I think I’ll be better suited here with you than going up against that wretched beast. I can’t even stand to be in the same room as that vile monstrosity.”
“My sister sacrificed a lot to let you go back home,” said Luna. “She would want for you to make the best of it.”
“Twilight,” said Chell, “When I face GLaDOS, I’ll be better off knowing that you’re safe.” The other ponies nodded. “Please, stay here.”
“Okay, guys. If it will make you feel better, I’ll stay,” Twilight sighed.
“So Rainbow and Applejack are coming with me… as well as you, right, Luna?” Luna nodded in response. “Rarity and Pinkie are staying here with Twilight, correct?”
“Twilight’s gonna need some super-duper cheering up, and who better to do that than her bestest friend, Pinkie? I’m gonna give her the best puppet show ever.”
There was only one pony unaccounted for. “And what about you, Ditzy?”
Both of the gray mare’s unfocused eyes looked away in their own separate directions.
“Um... I don’t really think I would be much help if I came with you. I don’t know what I’d be able to do. I’m not exactly the most coordinated pony.” She pointed to her eyes. “But I promise I’ll do my best to make Twilight feel better.”
“That’s okay, Ditzy. I understand. ”
“I really want to go with you…” Ditzy defended. “It’s just that… I don’t think I’ll be much help. I don’t know what I could even do.”
“Don’t worry about it. I’m not entirely sure what I’ll be able to do either,” Chell admitted, “but that hasn’t stopped me before. You don’t have to go with me. Twilight needs you more than I do. Just do what you can here.”
Ditzy nodded.
“Time is of the essence,” Luna stated. “We should go.”
Chell opened the front door, beckoning the others to follow her. They all stepped outside, gathered in front of her home. She placed a portal on the wall of the post office, then aimed at the roof of town hall, placing the opposite end of the portal there.
“Just give me a minute,” she said before going through. She was gone for no more than thirty seconds before coming back. “Stand back,” she warned, aiming at the wall. She waited for the other ponies to comply before placing another portal on the wall. What opened beyond was a swirling blizzard. The lower pressure from the high-altitude air created a strong wind that blew into the portal.
“Let me just make sure it’s safe before any of you go through.”
“Hold on a sec,” Rainbow Dash objected. “Why don’t I go through first? That way, I can scout and let you know if I find a good spot.”
“Wait, do you think that’s a…” but before Chell could finish, Dash had already raced through the portal, propelled by the wind. She shot out the other end like a bullet before getting blown around by the violent gusts around the mountain.
Chell carefully moved herself closer to the portal, careful to not let the wind pull her through. But the force was too strong for her to safely get close. “Could somepony hold me back?” The voice of the gem was powerful enough to fight its way across the oncoming wind.
“Darn it!” Applejack cursed. “If only I had my…” she then noticed that Pinkie Pie, who was standing to her right, was holding a rope in her mouth. “I ain’t even gonna ask how you did that, but thanks a million, Pinkie.” Applejack grabbed the rope with her hooves and tied it into a lasso. She swung it with her mouth and threw it around Chell’s body.
As Chell moved closer to the portal, Applejack secured the rope with her teeth, her hooves planted firmly in the ground. Finally, Chell made it to the edge. She looked through the oval hole and out across the picturesque landscape below the mountain. She couldn’t see where Rainbow Dash had gone.
“A little closer,” her voice echoed.
Applejack took a few baby steps forward until Chell was at the edge. She looked around. Before not long, she saw Rainbow Dash hovering out ahead pointing downwards. Chell looked down and saw a flat area on the ground thousands of feet down where she could safely put a portal. Moreover, the area was in close proximity to the mountain and looked like a good place to group.
She leaned into the portal, held back only by Applejack’s lasso, and made a portal on the ground below. Rainbow Dash descended towards the ground. “Okay, pull me back,” Chell said, to which Applejack complied.
Chell made another portal adjacent to the one already on the wall. Beyond that was a view of the mountain sky. She could see the descending silhouette of the blue pegasus from underneath some distance through the portal, but unexpectedly, Rainbow Dash suddenly flew somewhere else and out of sight.
With the confirmation that the second portal led to where it was intended to go, Chell closed the original one that led to high on the mountain, and the wind stopped.
“Luna, Dash isn’t flying towards the portal,” Chell said. “I’m not sure what she’s doing, but could you go and get her?”
Princess Luna nodded and stuck her head through the portal. Her large body made it a little difficult to enter a portal compared to most ponies, but she could manage. However, nothing could prepare her for the sudden change in the direction of gravity as forward became up when she stuck her head through. Instead of just walking in, she had to climb out from the other end. When she was on the other side, she flew up to meet Rainbow Dash.
“AJ, are you coming? If you want, this is your last chance to back out,” Chell said.
Applejack shook her head. “I honestly don’t want to even have to ever look at her again, but I promise I’ll do whatever I can to stop her. So here goes nothing!”
Applejack closed her eyes and charged into the portal, having enough momentum to clear the way through the shifted gravity and land on the ground on the other end. Just as Chell was about to step through, Rarity tapped on her shoulder.
“I’m coming too!” Rarity suddenly insisted. She had a determined look on her face.
“Are you sure?” Chell asked. “What about Twilight?”
Rarity nodded. “I… I just can’t stand by while you girls face her without me. I’m sorry Twilight, I know I said—”
“Rarity, go,” a weak Twilight interrupted from the background. “Trust me, I’ll be fine.”
Rarity looked back to Twilight.
“Are you sure, darling?” Rarity asked.
Twilight smiled and weakly waved to her.
“Don’t worry, Rarity!” Pinkie Pie chirped, “Ditzy and I will take good care of her!”
“Pinkie Pie, take Twilight to the spa. Just tell them to send me the bill. They won’t give you any trouble.”
Pinkie smiled. “Will do!”
Rarity took a deep breath and jumped through the portal just as Applejack had done. Chell followed shortly after.
Pinkie Pie then bounced in, but when she came up through the hole in the ground on the other side, she hit herself on the forehead as her jump peaked.
“Oh, right! I’m staying behind.” She made a snorting giggle as gravity pulled her back down through to the other side.
Chell looked back at her remaining friends in Ponyville through the opening on the ground and gave a solemn wave goodbye.
Chell, Applejack, and Rarity all took a moment to take in their surroundings. The jagged monolith that was the mountain stood before them, casting a foreboding shadow over the entire area.
“Boy howdy,” Applejack said apprehensively.
“You’re telling me, Applejack,” Rarity replied with the same tone.
Chell stood frozen, riddled with fear and doubt, oblivious to Princess Luna and Rainbow Dash landing on the ground. It took Applejack poking Chell’s shoulder to get her to notice the return of the two winged ponies.
“I found her,” Luna said, motioning to a sheepish Rainbow Dash.
“Sorry about that,” Rainbow Dash responded bashfully, rubbing a hoof behind her head. “I saw the portal, but then I kinda got distracted.” She laughed unsurely.
“By what?” Chell asked curiously.
“Well, I saw a tunnel close to the top,” Rainbow began, “I was about to try and go through it, but that’s when Luna found me.”
“It was a good thing she didn’t go through that way. Upon further inspection, the hole had been blocked by a grid of lasers, as well as some type of force field. Had she attempted to fly through, she would have been killed.”
“So, then how are we supposed to get in then?” Applejack inquired.
“The Diamond Dogs have inhabited this mountain range for many years,” Luna explained. “If they are working with her, then I presume that they excavated a labyrinth of tunnels for her to use to conduct her operations. But their mines would have originated here by the base of the mountain. There should be some entrances to those tunnels in this area.”
Chell took a quick breath. “There’s gotta be a way in somewhere at the base of this mountain.” We’ll go counterclockwise around the mountain. “Rainbow Dash, fly high and look all over the mountain for a way in. Luna, fly lower, and look closer to the ground. The last thing we need is to lose sight of each other. Princess Luna and I will go to the right. If one of us finds a way in, we’ll let you know, then we’ll circle around and meet on the other side.”
Rainbow Dash raised her hoof. “Is that the best idea you have? How will we even know if the tunnels will go to the right place?”
“Do you have any better ideas?” Chell responded, exacerbated. “Would you have rather have been killed going in the way you almost went through?”
Rainbow Dash didn’t respond.
“Let’s go. We don’t have time to waste.” Chell barked.
With that, the two groups split and embarked for their designated directions.
Chell, Applejack, and Rarity walked briskly along the circumference of the mountain as Princess Luna and Rainbow Dash soared overhead, scanning the area for a way in. The sun was high in the sky, though the blizzard up near the mountain peak blocked much if the light from coming through. The area was cold, barren, and desolate.
“Why is it even snowing here when it’s the middle of summer?” Chell’s voice resonated loudly enough for Luna to hear overhead. She descended a little lower to speak without having to use her infamous Royal Canterlot Voice.
“Many ages ago, long before my banishment to the moon, a dark evil resided within this mountain, casting it into eternal winter. Although the source of the dark magic perished ages ago, some ponies believed that it had left a curse on the mountain that lingered ever after. It is said that in the presence of evil, winter would follow on the mountain.”
“HEY GUYS! I THINK I FOUND AN ENTRANCE!” Rainbow Dash yelled from about a hundred yards away. She waved her arms around to get their attention, then she flew to a spot on a ledge relatively low on the mountain, but still difficult to get up to for anypony who couldn’t fly. Princess Luna soared towards where Rainbow Dash was waiting.
Chell created a portal just above the ledge, and then one on the ground nearby. She beckoned Rarity and Applejack to follow her through before jumping in.
On the ledge, the ponies looked at a large pile of rocks only half-hiding a dark tunnel behind it. Chell used her portal guns to levitate some rocks rocks and tossed them aside
Princess Luna used her magic to help. Rarity tried as well, but she wasn’t able to lift anything too large. When all the rocks had been cleared away from the now passable entrance. Chell apprehensively approached the gaping hole in the mountain and took a deep breath.
“Are you all ready?” she asked the party.
All of them nodded simultaneously, except for Rainbow Dash.
“Are you sure this is the right way?” the blue mare asked.
Princess Luna closed her eyes and focused her magical energy. She could feel GLaDOS’s presence through the tunnel.
“Yes, this way connects to GLaDOS’s lair. We just have to work out way up to the top,” Luna announced. Her horn glowed a gentle, shimmering light, illuminating some of the darkness ahead. Rarity illuminated her horn as well.
Chell took a deep breath. “Well, here goes nothing,”
Slowly, the small group of ponies entered the deep, dark tunnel. The sounds of their hoofsteps grew faint as they disappeared into the mountain.
Damn you cliffhanger, we meet again
Need to fix that word in the end
How much do y'all want to bet that Twi has some sort of unknown implants just waiting to be activated? Paranoia sense going off on my end, or is it just sleep deprivation? *shrugs*
Sooooo... They put on their diapers and got into the cave?
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That's what happens when spell check fails to correct to the right word.
Take out the paranthesis, and include sense like I'm sure you meant to.
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Fixed. thanks.
*fair
The stupid grammar fixes were helpful, but I was hoping for some more feedback on the content of the story itself. *Sigh*
4038973 You want feedback? Here you go...When did this fic become so dark?!
I mean don't get me wrong, this is a fantastic story. Its just that I have a hard time going through some of the chapters without cringing in disturbance or disgust. GLaDOS is characterized perfectly in this story...albeit too perfectly. I swear there were a few times in the fic that I wanted to leap into the story, turn into Raiden from MGR: Revengeance and reduce her into scrap metal, without a shred of mercy.
If I were in your shoes, I would have it so all the characters in the story (including GLaDOS) have a happy ending. Keep up the action and adventure, but tone down the darkness a bit so that readers like me don't get upset s.
And, that's about it. Hope this was helpful.
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Why, thank you! That was exactly the type of feedback that I was looking for. I have to agree with you about it getting dark, especially when compared to the original story, which was a lot more lighthearted. To be honest, I never really made a conscience decision to make this feel so downright heavy (hence the Sad and Dark tags were added later, after the Fluttershy incident, I believe.)
I try using some humor to lighten it up from time to time, but nothing can sugarcoat GLaDOS' despicable actions. She can be a funny character, and there is absolutely nothing I love more than writing GLaDOS dialog, but when it comes down to it, she is capable of doing terrible evil, and I can't shy away from that. In fact, she was originally going to be much nastier in Portal 2, but Valve toned her down when test players hated her so much that they refused to pick her when they found her in the bird's nest. She became a very nice person by the end, but then in Better Living, well, let's just say that she went down a dark path. And what's happened to her happened. I have to work with that.
As far as the ending that I have planned, I've had the general gist it thought out for quite some time, and... well... I don't want to give it away, but I think you will find it satisfying. I can assure you that it won't be a downer. I don't have the heart to put characters that I love through all that pain, only to leave them with their lives destroyed. This especially includes GLaDOS.
I really want these characters to be happy, including GLaDOS. I cannot begin to tell you how much I miss Fluttershy and how bad I feel for Twilight for all I put her through. And I place a lot of sympathy on GLaODS as well, despite the terrible things I make her do. However, the ending that I have planned would be far less powerful if were not for the grueling hardships that these have to endure. So, yeah, it's tough getting there, (and I probably won't get there for a couple months, and there will be darker times ahead), but I intend on making the difficult journey worth it. This story-telling technique is nothing new, in fact, it's a trope. See Earn Your Happy Ending.
I will try to lighten things up ahead. Ch 19 already has even more of an adventure feel, and it will stay rather light. But there will be much darkness as well, which I can't avoid. But hopefully, I will find ways to push some much needed light into it. However, i can assure you of a few things: this will not be grimdark, and I will not push GLaDOS beyond a point that she cannot come back from.
The fact that you care this much is a good thing. Your comment was very helpful to me. I really appreciate you taking the time to write that. I wish this were completed so that you could read it all at once and get to that ending. But unfortunately, you're gonna have to wait for me to to finish. It will be dark, but there is also happiness ahead.
4040272 Alright! Thanks for the comment! And to lighten your spirits up, as much as I hate to admit it, I have seen darker stories on this sight.
Stories that are darker than this fic:
-The Endless Nightmare
-Rainbow Factory
-bits and pieces of So I heard You Like Music
-any/all Your Human And You fics (I'm not saying all of them are dark, just the majority)
-and quite possibly the darkest thing any-Brony has ever written...Pattycakes
This list is for you to know that there are darker things out there than this.
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True, but dark isn't even a bad thing, only if it's mishandled. As I said, I use it to make the story have more of an emotional impact. If it incites feelings in you, then I did my job. The worst sin a story can commit is to fail to get its readers to care. Sometimes, being dark can do that.
However, if what I write makes you want to see the ponies (and even GLaDOS) make it through this, then I know I'm on a good path.
4040272 wonderful job on the story so far. Loved the rewritten chapters as it me a better understanding of Tia's actions. Also, in this chapter you did keep things going nicely and kept the stupid stick from falling too hard. For example, when they were discussing how to take care of Twilight by taking her to the spa; I was yelling at them to take her to the hospital instead. (insert head hitting desk here). Still I may be jumping the gun here :P. besides that everything was fine to me.
To all readers, it's about to shift into maximum overdrive... Stay tuned!
oh no........ shit is about to hit the industrial fan
by the way, awesome story, and it has some dark as other people explained in the comments, but still AWSOME!!!!
Rainbow, why do I not get a good fefeeling about you coming along. Also, your GLaDOS may be the best interpretation of her I have ever seen, and I hate you for it. Your GLaDOS is a character I can't help but love to hate. With the fact that she is more human than before, along with the hints along the way, I know that she isn't all bad, but I still shutter at the things she does. Want to read something that really makes you feel bad? Read this fic from GLaDOS' perspective, a girl forced to have her emotions hidden away, and then is given a new life goal. To learn through testing. Everything she does is "for the ponies who are still alive", but she can't discern what the worth of life life is. I feel you get your point across HARD. Great job so far, looking forward to 20.
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I'll take you hating me as a compliment. Also, "love to hate" is probably the best thing you could ever say about a villain, so I'll take that as a compliment to GLaDOS as well. You pretty much summed up my version of her. I love GLaDOS very dearly, which is why I'm dedicating a novel-length story to her. It breaks my heart when she does these terrible things, but she really can't stop. She doesn't know how.
As much as I loved the original, I felt that she didn't get much justification for her actions, in start contrast to her development in Portal 2. So, this raised a huge question: What the hell happened for her to become this way? And then I realized that behind all this, there was a profoundly tragic story that needed to have light shed upon. And that's what I'm tying to do. As dark as this story gets, I try to give it an optimistic tone overall. Perhaps this will be more evident by the end. I hope that this will be a story that will make you truly happy by the time you get to the end, but it will be sad much of the way through. I also try to stick to the show's core themes and hope that this it willl carry a meaningful message.
If she were in the show, she'd probably be my favorite MLP villain, hands down. Anyway, I'm GLaD that she's been getting so much praise. This is her story.
4038161 Just curious, did you find this to be a problem in chapter 11 as well?
Interesting story so far, quite interesting actually. Granted I wonder if something will happen at the end to rectify several now VERY prominent problems, but that is my personal thought on the matter. Still its quite well done and doesn't feel like its shoehorned to fit into the 'mythos'.
4079414 I was actually working on this when I received your comment. Well, I think I know what you're talking about regarding rectifying problems, but could you be more specific? One of the purposes of this story is to explore in-depth some things that weren't really shed light upon in the first, mostly regarding GLaDOS' re-descent into villainy. But a thread that must be tied must be completely unwoven, first.
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Except to do that, you'd have to finish the story first, otherwise you wont get the chance. Time will tell if you rectify them or not by the end.
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Aye. It will be a good day when I finish this. The one thing that this story needs is to be complete, because this work should be judged as a whole, and not just only what has already been written. But alas, it is a long ways off. Still, I will never stop until it's done. The more I think about the ending, the more I realize how extremely important it is. Because the wrong ending can make the entire story pointless, and the right ending can make it extremely worthwhile. I hope you'll stick around for it.
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Not wanting to pull a Mass Effect 3 then I take it?
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Well, I want to respect my readers by not wasting their time, as well as mine. This fic is something I truly care about, so I don't think the ending will disappoint. And I certainly won't pull a Half-Life 3. BTW, Valve, any year now.
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So long as they don't pull a Duke Nukem ForNEVER (those guys took decades to finally get it out) Though based on what I learned from their behind the scenes doc for Portal 2, maybe they're just hitting a creative roadblock
Why do you keep using Princess Celestial instead of GLaDOS when she's at the Library when it's clearly GLaDOS in control???? Also, having to read through 4 massive chapters for revisions made my head hurt, if you could have put in just a few scenes and told us key words to find them like you did in chapter 16 I would have been better off, so keep that in mind for future revisions.
And if nothing else, this chapter almost made me close the window when GLaDOS used the letter opener on herself to try to shut up Celestia.
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Sorry about making you reread everything. Many of these changes were rather subtle, and I removed more content than I added, so at least the chapters are shorter than they were before. Still, I apologize. I did summarize the changes in a blog post that I recommended you to read in the author's note. Perhaps I shouldn't have said to reread everything. I just wanted feedback on weather my changes were effective, since so many people were having problems with it before. I'll remove that note eventually, or at least trim it down for now.
As for GLaDOS being refereed to as Celestia, I was, of course, referring to Celestia's body, not the character. The way GLaDOS speaks makes it incredibly obvious that it's her. In fact, I have to remind myself to read that dialog in Celestia's voice, and not GLaDOS'. The alternative is to "lavender unicorn" it up, just a little bit, using descriptors to describe GLaDOS in Celestia's body, like, the pink-maned alicorn, though I usually avoid those. Still, it's not like you had trouble telling who was the one talking.
GLaDOS stabbing herself in the head was actually a late-edition. I thought it really highlighted her insanity. It could have been a lot worse, but this ain't a gore fic.
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Well, so much for Caroline.
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It's most likely just me and my experience playing Alan Wake and reading fics based on it, but I've been finding the constant pitfalls everypony keeps getting dealt to be far over the top (no, I'm not comparing this story to Alan Wake, but it does bring to light some of the boundaries that well written stories should follow, no matter the genre). If it wasn't for Celestia having lost her immortality and GLaDOS practically building herself into a situation where she can't possibly lose, I may have thought differently. Then there's the whole "innocent" piece inside GLaDOS that Celestia is trying to reach. In my experience in reading, this always paints an ending scenario where she (Caroline) either sacrifices herself upon coming to her senses or basically getting off scott free with a simple slap to the wrist and a phrase about friendship that has no right to be working after refusing such a thing for so long (very much like Sunset Shimmer in Equestria Girls). In short, this is turning out to be more of a horror story in my eyes. The price is getting too high from all GLaDOS is causing (such as Celestia losing her immortality and in such a way that makes it sound permanent) that I can't see GLaDOS/Caroline getting out of this in any way other than absolute paper weight dead.
Truthfully, I don't know what I'm expecting at this point. In a way, that's good, because the moment you can correctly guess the ending of a story is the moment it becomes boring. However, what I was trying to get at above is that with all the loss that's been happening, a pretty $%&# big compensation should be following. Far too many stories that I've seen have the main characters going through such massive losses, pretty much losing almost everything, only for the story to end on a neutral unsatisfying note. Villains gone, all is supposedly well, but such loss has been procured that you find it hard to see the heroes feeling a sense of having "won", yet moving on almost as if nothing went wrong. These are the bad stories (unless they're horror, but that's a whole different ballpark I won't go into right now). The kinds that may start out good, but by finishing you wish you had never started at all.
I'm not trying to antagonize the author or state how the story should end, but after having unliked and unfavorited too many stories here that have fallen to the same thing, I couldn't sit by and not voice my opinion anymore. Good stories too. Was sad about some, angry over others. Either point, I just wanted to bring it up and hope the author has a good idea of where this is going because personally I've just lost all patience for that kind of crap (as well as for those who start an extremely good story, a diamond in the rough so to speak, only to get a few chapters in and drop it without even setting it's status to "on haitus" even a couple years after their last update).
THEN there is Mr. dark, dull, time stopping, all powerful and cryptic. I have not played the Half-Life games (nor plan to) so I don't know for certain, but after growing up around the show "STARGATE", I have absolutely no love for characters like this. Seemingly "ascended" individuals or groups who "play" upon mortals for their own cryptic amusement just because they can. Yes, I read the wiki link about him and he is no better than the ancients in STARGATE (ascended who say they care about the mortals only to brick wall them from getting any sort of good foothold while completely turning their eye to the other ascended who are out to kill said mortals). Him giving Celestia cryptic help and a vision only to turn around and impede her mentally shows he's the type to play upon them for his amusement. I know it's kinda biased towards the author, but him just being in the story at all causes my opinion of it to drop.
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Hi. I appreciate your honest heartfelt criticism. I read all of my comments and take them very seriously, so you deserve for me to take the time to address your concerns.
Many of the things you criticize are a result of me deviating from my original intention. Celestia's loss and sacrifice in general have received quite a bit of criticism. Twilight was originally supposed to power the machine in GLaDOS's plan. My decision to include the G-Man has received strong criticism as well. His presence will not be strong from this point, and in fact, I don’t know when or if he’ll return. Though, I don’t want to completely and conveniently forget about him by the end either and let that go unresolved.
Anyhow, I am back on track of my original intention, and I’ve finally gotten this story to a point I have intended to get to for a year (it is unpublished as of now and still being edited). Despite the long delay since my last post, I have been working consistently on writing chapters 19 & 20. It’s just that these next two chapters are very long and very important (more so with 20), and writing takes time.
The type of ending you refer to is known as an Esoteric Happy Ending. It is basically when an author has a bittersweet or downer ending, but refuses to acknowledge it. I intend to do no such thing. The ending is the single most important part of this entire story, and will either make or break it. I will not make the entire story feel like one giant waste of time. Whatever happens to Equestria and everyone in it will not be forgotten about. Equestria will not be rebuilt in a day with everything going back to the way it once was, sweeping all the tragedy and loss under the rug. That can never happen.
Whatever happens to GLaDOS, any loss caused by her or sin she commits will have moral consequences that I intend to address forthright. I’ve made it very clear that she has a conscience, and even now, I show that she is haunted by it. The thing with Sunset Shimmer was that she was a lazily written one-dimensional villain whose redemption was unjustified because her character did not earn it. GLaDOS, on the other hand, is without a doubt my most developed character. I take pride in my portrayal of her.
Having GLaDOS obtain so much power by this point (though I did not originally intend for it to be that way) can cause an utter sense of impending doom and hopelessness, which, when accompanied by how downright nasty and vindictive she is, can make the story unpleasant to read or downright depressing. And it also puts the characters in a place where it feels like only the author can save them.
But, there are no easy solutions that will fix the wrongs that are made. Any victory achieved in the end must come about through hard work, from both GLaDOS and Chell. As a result, not matter how dark or depressing this story gets, I hope for the ending to make it feel like it was all worth it. I realize that's a tall order, but I have put too much effort into this to let my readers down.
I humbly hope that you continue reading until the end. I have put over a year of hard work into this, and I have no intention of delivering anything less than my best.
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I'm glad to see an author who understands these fundamentals and works to achieve them. I hope you can bring out the kind of ending you're hoping for and I'll be patiently waiting to read it.
I also understand that writing a sequel to a story written by an author like Pen Stroke can be quite the tall order, but you're doing pretty well so far in my opinion. Keep it up.
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Yeah, no offense to you on the G-Man, just with growing up around STARGATE, you tend to... well, I already stated it in my earlier comment. *shrug*
This story is bad and you should feel bad!
BEEP!
Sarcasm self-test complete.
4275010 YOU ARE BAD!
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And here i was thinking i was the only one with a good sense of humor. Oh well, you cant be the best at everything..... wait, yes. Yes you can. (Say in GLaDOS voice)