My name's PJ. I'm from New York. I write pony fics. I go to parties with bronies. I'm not good at self-introduction.
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In Twilight Sparkle's dreams, all her friends are turning on her. The nightmares are steadily driving her mad and preventing her from getting any kind of sleep. The cure may be found in Canterlot, or must Twilight find the solution in her own mind?
I'm labeling this dark because some of it gets a little intense, but there shouldn't be anything too off-putting, unless you're Twilight!.
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This was quite good.
There were some sentences which seemed to be a tad on the long side (mostly speaking ones), but they were very minor. A little more... ugh, a little more... emphasis on the change from the dream to the real word would have made said change less... ugh, I think it would have made it better. I quite liked your portrayal of Dashie, but Twilight seemed... she seemed a little off.
Good job
I took a nap with this on my iPad, woke up without reading the title and read it, thinking to myself, WTF is going on with RD is the author stupid? Then I looked up and see the name.
well nice story anyways.
Wonderful chapter!
I can't see Rarity not letting Twilight talk about her dreams. I mean she likes to gossip right? So why not hear the story? But then again, when you think about it, it's all a dream...er...nightmare. Please continue! 
To think Rainbow and Rarity would do that! Oh Celestia! That's horrible! Again, wonderful chapter!
What's happening to Twilight? I would hate and love to see what Pinkie and Fluttershy would do. I hope Twilight gets better though. I hate to see her like that.
Please write moar!
I hope Twilight is okay.Having to wake up night after night having terrible dreams of your friends hurting you. It's horrible!....I can't wait for more!
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It's hard to determine which is a dream and what isn't....I love it! It builds suspense!!
I feel bad for Twilight! Let's hope she doesn't have a dream about Princess Celestia!
For the first four chapters, it was fairly obvious early on they were dreams. As for Chapter 5, I find myself rather confused about the whole ordeal. Bravo, goodsir/madam. You effectively hold me in suspense for the coming chapters.
One thing that bothered me, however, was your constant use of the word 'said.' A relatively minor gripe, but it can be rather repetitive, and boring, to constantly see the same word over and over. Try a few synonyms or more descriptive terms for how the speaker is speaking; whether or not they are whispering, or perhaps describing their tone of voice.
Other than that, I eagerly await the next edition.
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Thanks! I'm glad I could trip some people up on what's real and what's not. I'm just hoping I don't get confusing. As far as the "said" issue, I read somewhere that you should stick to "said" as much as possible because most readers just go right past it and don't notice. It's a tough balance to strike, and that's why I try to have most of my dialogue be unattributed. But here in a group it's harder to do.
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Funny, I read that most readers notice when 'said' is overused. I do agree, though, that finding that right balance between using it and opting for another choice is mind-boggingly tough. Especially in groups of peop...er, ponies all talking amongst themselves.
And by all means, confuse us. I love a good mystery.
“Oh, this is so awesome!” said Pinkie, “Although, I match even less than you. I may be color-blind, but you’d have to be really silly in the head to think that Princess Celestia was pink!”
I see wut you did thar.
Also, I commend you for making Pinkie happy, instead of attempting your own version of Cupcakes. Please, do continue to write like this. I heartily enjoy it.
-Tricondon
This was a really nice read. The nightmares, the 'real world' and the dream come true. Everything fit in perfectly.
Really awesome fanfic.
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"I see wut you did thar."
I love getting that response. It means my joke is subtle, but you still got it, and that's the spot I'm aiming for as a humorist.
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Thank you, and thank you for reading!
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You're welcome. Subtle humour is best pony.
-Tricondon
"Shoot, it’s no wonder she’s an only child."
Well, at the time. . .
such an awesome read. Each chapter keeps you hanging on for more and more
1158341 Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
1158402 only had time to read the last three but this series calls for late night reading when i get home from doing family things which i must go and tend too.
Loving the series, can't wait to read more
"But wait, unicorns can’t just change themselves into pegasi or alicorns! That’s a rule."
Well, AT THE TIME. . .
That chilled me.
Smart chapter.
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I'm glad you liked this. So much of it has been countered by subsequent developments in the show, though.
Luna....you haven't been doing your job.....fix Twilight......please
623411 yah, Shining Armor! you ruined the fanfic!
This was the very first story I read on this sight. This story has its own place in my heart.
Just about to read the pinkie pie one...already know this one is gonna make the others look like a cakewalk
Huh, when I saw a Twilight and Pinkie chapter I almost expected something reminiscent of "cupcakes" I like this though it was a pleasant surprise
Messed up
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Wow that was ok
ok
This was an excellent story! the early chapters make you feel for twilight, understand her fear and just wanting to hold her. Pjabrony, you are quickly becoming my favourite author here on FimFiction.
Afte Khat of course. 
Sorry, nobody tops her.
4682112 Thanks! But, can I ask who's Khat? I'm always looking for a good author to read.
4682316 *epic sounds of silence, the whole universe stops* ..................
.....You don't know who Khat is.... She wrote Fallout: Equestria. Which was so awesome they printed it. TWICE.
4682337 Well, I've heard of the story and the verse, but I'm not into them, really. Sorry.
4682337 Kkat, not Khat. Secondly, she?
4682494 Whoops! seems i either forgot that, didn't know it, or typed it wrong. And i heard things... from people..... that Kkat was a she.
4684503 hmm...
4684510 Haa! I found where i heard it > http://book.fallout-equestria.com/faq/
4684510 it says it right at the bottom of "did you get Kkat's permission to do this"
4684586 were you even reading the comment I replied to...?
4684584 okie dokie
4684587 I thought i was, and if i read our comments in order from oldest to newest they make sense. Unless i missed something somewhere? Feel ABSOLUTELY free to correct me on what comment i was replying to. I'm sorry i if i replied to the wrong one.
4684649 no, I thought you were someone else replying to me saying that it was already in this comment thread. Brain wasn't working right (not a surprise)
4684664 Whew. I HATE making people mad, especially in online comment boxes.
4684668 lol
Jokes on her, Twilight just didn't tell them yet.
Twipie moments..