• Published 8th Jun 2013
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No Escape. - Pen Brush



A cube is the only thing to save Pinkie, and she knows it.

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The cube

The stupid block was floating in the middle of the doorless, windowless room, waiting. It knew I couldn’t get out without its help, and it was just waiting, floating weightlessly as I ran around, looking for any way to get out. I hate that block. I hate it so much. There is something odd about this room though.


I never get hungry, I never get thirsty, or tired or need to use the bathroom. It’s just a light brown room, with me and a weightless black block that can move anywhere it wants to. Sometimes it would hover above me, when I'm sitting against one of the smooth walls, and drip some sort of black mist into my straight pink mane from its surfaces. It’s trying to taint my mind, make me go insane, but it never lowers itself to actually touch me. It wants me to beg for it’s help so it can laugh and me and say ‘I told you so Pinkamena,’ and continue laughing.


It knows my thoughts, and when I try to grab it to throw it away from me, it hovers away, out of my reach. It’s a nuisance and it can leave anytime it wants, but it doesn't. It wants to see me suffer, and then see me beg.


I will never ask for it’s help, the block is full of empty promises and broken dreams of other ponies. I won’t make the same mistake that the other ponies before me made, I will not ask for the blocks help. I won't give it that satisfaction.


I should stop trying to find a way out of here, but I still have hope, there has to be a way out, or the room wouldn't be full of light. Unless of course the cube is the reason for the light, but I don't see how that is a possibility since it isn't bright at all.


I don't even know what happened, I was at the rock farm when suddenly I got teleported here for some unknown reason, it would have been fine if it hadn't happened a minute after I got my cutie mark and finished the party with my parents and sisters. But no, I guess the universe just hates me and wants to see me suffer and beg to a cube.


I wonder what my family is doing and if they even miss me. They might not even know I’m gone, or if they do, they might have thought I went and left the rock farm to throw parties at some other town. Octavia sure would think so, I don't know about Inkie though, she would think that I ran away and hated them. I shouldn't think about my family in front of the cube, it might decide to bring them here too.


The cube has started to float around the room now. I don't understand why, or even how it does that, but I really don't care what it does anymore. I just want a way out, and I want to find a way without its help.


Say what you want, that I am obsessed, that I’m insane, but I know what I am talking about, I have been stuck in this room for two weeks, with this one cube. It was already in the room when I woke up, and a note was under it saying it would help me out if I asked it to. It also said it wouldn't leave me alone until I asked. I think I might have noticed the empty promises it held and the broken dreams of the ponies before me, but I didn't pay attention to that. Needless to say I named it Cubey when I arrived. I hate Cubey now. I hate it with every fiber of my being, I don’t throw parties anymore, I am sadder then when I worked at the rock farm, and my mane won't get bubbly and fluffy like it used to.


I guess it would make sense, since the cube seemed to have sucked my happiness away and I have no desire to be happy in this nightmarish room. I sometimes get close to asking the cube to save me, but I remember what is inside the cube, and I quickly forget. It’s getting harder and harder to forget that I have a way out, in the shape of an evil cube.


I said before I will say again, I am not insane, the cube is tainting my mind. Making me wish for a way to escape, so it can steal my dreams and my promises, and keep them for its collection, and then keep me here, unable to do anything but wither away in my boredom. I don’t think I can die in here, unless the cube is operating the room and decides when it is time it will kill me.


Sometimes when I decide I want to look inside the cube, see how many lives it has stolen, I see images. I see blood, I see broken limbs, I see so much, and most of all: I see sadness from the ponies who had a friend or family member taken from them. I don't understand that part, why would a cube have images from others who it didn't have with it?


I also see images of ponies laughing, ponies playing, and hugging, and just generally having a fun time with each other and enjoying life. I wonder sometimes in the hours that I am here, why Celestia hasn't found out about this place yet. Is she the one putting ponies here, or does she know nothing about it? Is it a mystery to everypony, or does somepony, perhaps a unicorn, pick a victim, take them at some point, and seal them into this room, to see what the pony does with the cube. As said pony silently watched from behind one of the walls.


I can't take this life much longer, I don't even think you can call it living. Doesn't feel like I am living in any way at all. I’m slowly going crazy, I know I am, and I understand now that the cube isn't making me go insane, it is me who is making myself go insane. Thinking the cube is making me go insane. Just that thought makes me laugh. I look again at the cube, which is now coming closer, and I see that the broken dreams and promises it has weren't taken away by it, but saved by it.


I have judged the cube, no Cubey, wrongly for the past two weeks. He has been trying to help me, to get out of here and give me some sort of second chance, and I have thought him to be a monster, an evil monster that wished to take everything away from me. I know what is wrong now, why I never hunger or thirst or tire. Now I must ask for his help, or I will lose myself forever.


Before I even ask, I can sense that it knows what I am thinking, at least I got that part right, and it comes over to me, and slowly lands atop my head, and I open my eyes to bright blinding white light.

Comments ( 58 )

Is this ever going to have a conclusion as to whether the cube was evil or not?

I personally would be fine with it ending as is, but if there is a finish I want to know.

2694669
I leave it to you to decide

Wow.
This is the best fic under 2000 words I've ever read. It was damn well written. Why do I keep thinking of portal and the companion cube?

2694923
I have no idea, that was not the desired affect of the cube

I thought the transition to the ending was accomplished a little too fast - only about three paragraphs. I understand that the story is not long and doesn't really need to be, but a bit of polish might have been nice.

Still, I'm really only arguing the difference between a great story and a perfect one. Either way, it deserves an upvote.

This is why i hate one-shots.
But this is too epic to hate.

This right here is just pure yes.

It's a cubey mark?

:rainbowlaugh:PAWN'S GONNA BE PISSED!
Glad at least one of my ideas were used!:pinkiehappy:

Umm...I honestly have no idea what just happened.

2696675
I wanted to write a one shot, you gave me a good idea, I took 2 weeks to write it. Who is pawn?

2696757
Pinkie was dying, to put it short
2696264
I have no idea what your talking about :unsuresweetie:
2695822
I usually hate one shots as well, but I wanted to try one, and see if people like them more then multi chapter stories, since I see a lot of one shots get featured, I wanted to experiment. I got my answer
2695573
having trouble figuring out how to make her sound insane and then totally normal with no idea how other then the description to work with is hard, 2 weeks carefully writing and I got this. Not as bad as I thought it would be honestly...

2697242 Pawndidater. He has wanted to use this idea for a LOOOOONG time.:rainbowlaugh:

2697865
well...why dd you give it to me then?

2698058 Because he still won't write it.:rainbowlaugh:
Don't feel bad, he'll deal with it.:rainbowwild::pinkiehappy:

2698066
took 2 weeks to write this and make it not seem like she was saying the same thing over and over, I think i did the crazy well

Alright, now you have to continue. I wanna see the world Pinkamena wakes up to!

The cube is evil, sick and twisted, but it`s the only thing that can help. It tortures you, hoping that you`ll make the right decision on your own. It makes you sad, but only wants to make you happy. It is an innocent demon. It is an angel from hell. It isn`t evil, nor is it angelic. It is just simply part of the world, watching life go by. Dedicating its life to destroying ponies so that they can finally see the beauty of life. It`s a gift and a curse all wrapped up into one simple cube.

2698451
dear god i feel like i went to a class of phylosphy...thats good
2698442
Looks like this wont be a one shot anymore...I was planning to write another chapter :raritywink:

2698503
It doesnt involve Pinkie

2698480 I`m just a very smart and poetic person. I find the beauty in misery and the deeper meaning in comedy. Nothing in the world has no meaning. Even meaningless things have some truth lying behind them. Knowledge stems from creativity and that is what philosophy is all about. Philosophy is a way of life. It proves that you can never judge a book by its cover, for there`s always something beautiful hidden within.

2698522
words to live by

2698534
what you said is true

2698516 WHAT?!

...

Oh, I get it. Not Pinkie, Pinkamena. Right?

2698789
who said it wouldnt be the thing that was with her the entire time? :unsuresweetie:

2698820 ...
I...
But...
Uh...
...
Huh?!

2698859 Hey, when you gonna write that next chapter!!! Your killing me man!

2939646
I wrote it before...and people said the first chapter was better and I agreed with them. I deleted it because the first chapter leaves you thinking with mystery

2939651 Grrr! :twilightangry2: Why????????? :raritycry::raritydespair: Please!!!:fluttershysad:

2939658
I'm sorry, but it is gone now

2939667 Oh well. Very good though. I might have to make a story kinda like this, but longer and involves multiple ponies. If you wouldn't mind. :scootangel:

2939674
don't mind I was actually thinking of doing the same thing. not gunna

2939677 Okay. Do you want to be mention w/ link? If I can figure out the link.

2939684
do you see the thing above with the youtube logo? the thing right next to the right of the color wheel is the add link button

2939692 Okay, thanks.... Hhmmm, what should I call it... :unsuresweetie:

2939705
well this is called No escape...so how about you call it Escape? The point behind this story was that the sonic rainboom had crushed her insides and she was dying in the hospital, I was going to write 5 other stories for all of the other elements because they got hit by it (indirectly) as well. The thing is, they do not remember the time they spent with the cube and don't remember why they are in a hospital room with 5 other ponies. Rainbow had it worse.

Highly intriguing until the end. I always love a good, psychological story, no matter how short. Nice work!

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2989463 I think I could make that work. I have to put it on my story que, because I only write 2 at a time.

On the to-read list. Please hold.

I don't get the ending? :derpyderp1:

3179332
She is going back to the land of the living.

Hello, this is HRH Twilight Sparkle, formerly known as superpony55, reviewer and admin for The Gem Hunters. Congratulations! I deem this story a sapphire.

Before I start my review, I want to say wow. Much better than the last story I reviewed. I can see the strand of hope, she is clinging onto, feel her despair. Wow.

Grammar:
The grammar is very good in this piece. It seems a bit off, in a way, but still, nothing too noticeable, or distracting. 8/10

Plot:
The symbolism is amazing. Just... wow. That story makes me think. 9/10

Characters:
Pinkie was a bit off, as I didn't exactly hear her voice, but it was enough. 7/10

Overall, this story was awesome! I would love more, and it just made me feel peaceful, as a well put together story usually does. 8/10

3738921
But it isn't in the sapphire group...

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