Sombra wasn't born naturally evil. He didn't enjoy enslaving the crystal ponies that he was raised around. But he did feel different. He was the son of the Crystal Empire's King and yet Sombra wasn't a crystal pony himself. His 'father' made sure that he new that, and that he was a bastard child, and would never inherit anything. He was always in the shadow of his brother who was his father's true son, but Sombra never gave in to these shadows cast over him. Not until he was forced. But that would be much later. After he met the most amazing mare in the whole of Equestria.
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I like it, little in the grammer errors. The only thing to do that would make this better would be to pace yourself.
good idea of story
Awesome. I always liked Sombra. Keep up the good work!
I'd like to read more :3 though don't think about rushing your work keep it good quality
And another story added to my favs. I'll be watching this one.
ohhh i like where this story is going! ill be watching its progress!
What they said. Also, if you're going to "flashback" to certain instances while narrating background, try and make it clear that it's an excursion from the main timeline. So outbursts like making fun of the arabians should be clearly delinieated, maybe with italics.
i've heard dragon shit is pretty useful. and its a very strong fertilizer.
Young Sombra's life reminds me of this little gem:
i.qkme.me/3rfohn.jpg
And I do believe that Sombra made the aquaintance of a griffin who told him something along the lines of this:
"Let me give you some advice, bastard. Never forget what you are. The rest of the world will not. Wear it like armor, and it can never be used to hurt you."
2696804 That's one hell of a comeback line.
Looks good. Will track for now.
I saw the picture and I think that a human, teenage Sombra would be too fucking sexy!
2699174 Haha you think? I guess I'll take that as a compliment, I drew the picture myself
2699701Well you are a really good artist, I'm jealous