My name is Simon "Ghost" Riley. I was part of Task Force 141, an elite group of soldiers composed of the best of the best. Our mission was to take down Makarov, the mastermind of Russian invasion of America. The team consistered of myself, Roach, Ozone, and Scarecrow with sniper support from Archer and Toad. We didn't find Makarov, but we did find a jackpot of information. On our way to the landing zone, Ozone and Scarecrow were killed by mortar fire while me and Roach managed to survive. I dragged him all the way to the LZ but fate had other plans in store for us, specifically death at the hands of our own commanding officer. Shot point-blank, the shock and blood loss made my vision blur as everything went dark. I couldn't feel my body or when I hit the ground, but I could smell the scent of something before flames engulfed the world. I tried to resist Death's offer, but in the end, I gave in. I welcomed his embrace, hoping that I'd finally find peace.
Instead, here I am, alive and kicking in a world full of bloody ponies.
due awesome story
when i read the authors note i was like
Story keeps in character with Ghost, which is enjoyable. The "Knight" Guard though, I doubt they would have the military "lingo" that similar to what is used on earth. I await more of the Adventure's of Ghost's afterlife
Nice! Some mistakes, but very minor.
It starts very abruptly with little to no explanation of what's going on. Perhaps that will be remedied in ch, 2?
Interesting concept, but in dire need of a proofreader. I'm interested, but there are quite a few grammatical mistakes. I'd be willing to proofread for you if you wish.
Okay, I'm seriously confused....
2761550 explain because I'm not.
Thoughts: This is a lovely story.
Finally a GOOD CoD story, granted MW2 was probably the last one that was the best I can at least say you did a fine job making a story out of it. And with a lovable character, Ghost.
There were many grammar mistakes and errors here and there but over all, good story.
A wee' bit confusing at the beginning since you didn't say anything about he has been in EQ for a while, just, pop and he's in Canterlot. Blimey, you could at least have told of in the description.
A common thing that seems to happen in about every HiE is the protagonist going unconscious, and this one isn't an exception. Although he was hit over the head at least is good enough.
Although i hope the main 6 doesn't get too be-friend him that much because seriously, how many times has this happened? And furthermore why THEY must be the ones to "re-form" him, an soldier that matter and be-friend him and all that junk. Blimey, too damn many stories here are the same, let's see if this one is an exception to that.
But as the old saying goes through "Beggars can't be choosers".
I'd like to see more of this and the continuation of Ghost's adventures.
Funny that I have the feeling to "ship" Ghost with a girl guard. Nothing serious like lovemaking, just like them being loveable arses at each other when they are teamed togeather.
Ps: I am very picky with my fics to read and you clearly got what it takes to make a good one, lets hope you don't spoil it like a carton of milk that has been outside in the heat to long, like the rest of these wankers.
2761790What I mean is, I understand what is happening but I don't know WHY it is happening or how it began. We just start with Ghost in Canterlot doing some sort of recon, trying to get inside this place for no apparent reason. What is he doing? Why is he doing it? And most importantly, why should I care? I loved Ghost in MW2 and his portrayal in this seems spot on. It just seems to start a little fast-paced.
There are one too many D's in that word.
Well, that's not right.
Really? A COD crossover?
Uhm, how long has he been in Equestria, because in my impressions hes been here for months from what I gathered?
The one problem I have is that there is meat... In a pony world...
TEN POINTS FOR GRIFFINDO- I MEAN YOU!
2762234 Technically everything is meat in Equestria the question is how you want it cooked. Medium rare.
2762234 But Griffins and Dragons eat meat. Also it's not completely full of ponies.
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I clearly stated that Equestria had carnivores in its ranks, thus the meat. What did you think griffins ate? Flowers?
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Not everything is explained at once. Be patient, and as time goes on more will be revealed.
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Really? Then in that case shoot me a message when you're ready.
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Huzzah! I have caught your eye! I have the next few chapters written but they need to be proofread first.
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Thanks mate! It took me a while (and a few missions) to get everything just right. As for the Mane Six, let's just say Dash and Ghost will bash heads. Both figuratively and literally. And when they find out what he did for a living....
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What did you think it was when you saw the picture of Ghost? A skyrim crossover?
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On the dot! Errr, mostly. He's been there for a few weeks, a month at maximum. It doesn't matter how long he was there, only what he did during that time. *Hint hint*
EDIT:
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Fixed it. Thanks for noticing that. ^_^
2762470.......YES!
Lol, I kid mate. You keep on writing. I just have an irrational hatred of crossovers
Sorry for my misplaced joke.
You've probably already heard this, but I think you're confusing Commander Shepard from ME with Lieutenant General Shepherd from MW2. The name I get, but the rank? It's stated like every other time he's mentioned that he's a general, but it is still an honest mistake.
A Ghost is in the base? Protect the mess hall!
I like this... It's got style to it, lot of clean, colorful detail, and Ghost has quite the mouth for a trained, disciplined soldier. Well, I suppose that when you're in a world of colorful talking horses that defy all forms of known physics, after getting shot in the chest, your tongue might loosen up a bit. I know mine would.
I can already tell from the synopsis this is going to be just GREAT.
Seriously, the feature box is packed with QUALITY reading these days.
Christ.
2762681 Here's to less clopfics! *raises drink*
Oh, now this is good. But to be honest, I would have just popped the princess when she appeard, especially if the rounds he had were non-lethal.
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I think I'd pick five mediocre clopfics over another HALO / CoD crossover or asinine HiE self-insert.
A glowing sword that sets things on fire and named Dawnbreaker, Skyrim reference anyone? XD
*slow clap*
PONY used SNEAK ATTACK!
It's super effective!
In my view there are a few problems with the story... first there are guards stationed outside a meat locker. If I am not mistaken ponies are herbivores and it makes no sense why they would be guarding meat. Second, the story abruptly starts with him taking down ponies with his weapons. And third, you are a bit overdoing the references...
I got chills reading the description alone! Or maybe because it's winter in Australia. Not sure.
But this is awesome! And that moment that Ghost was shot in MW 2, was the saddest moment in the entire series. Equal with soap dying in MW 3.
But now, he literally is a ghost. *Evil laughter*
I like the way the story is written so far. Favorite for now, I'll add the like when you have more behind the story.
Aaand he goes from badass to unconscious badass in three seconds flat.
Keep up this awesomeness!
I hope Ghost stays as hardcore as he has been.
I'd rather see him go "Gary Stu" than bow to anybody.
Most HiE fics these days never keep the human a badass.
Perhaps this story will not end abruptly like the rest? CoD characters always interest me, mostly because CoD has great campaigns. (Can't say the same for mp though)
I SHALL ENJOY THIS STORY.
This story is awesome, can't wait for more
Dear god this was painful to read.
Wow... This is actually pretty good! Keep it up!
This...is...EPIC!!!!!!!!!!
I'm guessing no one else caught that TF2 reference?
nooooo he got taken out
That kinda doesn't make much sense, considering that he he apparently cleaned her wounds and put her in a closet.
I'd read this if I didn't have an irrational dislike of Ghost.
CoD is shit lelelel, Battlefield FTW!
Anyway, this story is really... meh. BAD GRAMMAR OMGWTFBBQ! MURDER HIS FAMILY AND SEND THEM UNTO THE CROWS!!!
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GTFO you scrub.
2764477 I think I did.
2763639 Because it goes against our nature.
2762711 I think Ghost have a medium level of Intellect.
'That huge horse just came out of nowhere in front of me and dosen't seem to know what this weapon can do, Let's shoot it in the face before it have a chance to do anything!' - This ain't gonna happen', ever.
Once Ghost finds out about Magic, he should be happy his head wasn't ripped clean of his body once he encountered Luna, after all, he DID kinda kill nine guards and seriously injure half a platoon...
It's a great story...but PLEASE get a proofreader. The grammatical errors are making the story a little hard to follow.
Nonetheless, you're doing well so far. I love Ghost
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How about we play a game of "Fuck off"?
You go first.
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Soldiers aren't scholars, but they can be pretty creative at times.
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Not reading a story for just that reason is kind of like not eating a watermelon with seeds.
You don't know what you're missing out on.