Not a very clever writer. I like pie... I think that's it
Behind Spitfire's office door, Soarin is rolling his "wings" in his hooves. The pin signifies his position as a member of the Wonderbolts, and he has to give it up.
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I like it
Ooh, nice. Love the concept, it's well-written, and I'm glad it went the sad, but not depressing route. Plus, implied Soarinjack. I really hope to see more of this universe, if not more of this story.
Nice job my friend.
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I might continue this, I'm still not sure though. Surprisingly, I don't think I've ever actually read any Soarin/Applejack. If I do continue, I probably won't, just so that I can make this my own.
The main issue in dealing is that I've never written a "shipping" or "romance" story before. I have read a few, but I am still hesitant about my writing ability; although, I am curious to see if I can pull it off.
I'm guessing you didn't decide to go ahead with developing this further...
This was very well done, and you capture the dynamic between the two very well. It would be a pleasure to see more. Nice work!
good fic. made me a bit sad while reading it. but now i want to know, who is soarin's crush??? eh, ill bug you about it later. I WILL FIND OUT
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It's Applejack. As I explained the other night, I never cared for the "Soarin loves Applejack because he likes apple pie and bought one from her once" trope. That part of the story might be reworked a bit if I ever decide to revisit this. My original intention was for Spitfire to be the kind of pony who is always harassing Soarin about being a "ladies man", despite him being the opposite. This is comes out a little bit when she mentions the "cute receptionist" when he first enters her office.
After rereading it, I can already tell that I might want to go through and clean a few minor things up and reword the whole Applejack thing a bit (maybe have Spitfire being the one mentioning the donor thing). I know I still have my notes from when I had given a lot more thought to expanding on the idea. However, they are all neglectful of Spitfire (she kinda was dropped from future chapter outlines for some reason) despite her relationship with Soarin being what readers (and now me after rereading it after so long) seemed to like the most.
Nooo