• Published 28th Aug 2013
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Fluttershy Adopts a Velociraptor - Barrobroadcaster

Fluttershy loves animals and she's quite adept at taking care of even dangerous ones. But can she take care of one of the deadliest predators ever known?

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We Didn't Order This

"Sign here... and here... and initial here..."

Fluttershy did as the postcolt instructed. She affixed her signature and initialed the spots on the delivery form even though she didn't have time to fully read what she was signing for. It was important, that much she was sure of and she knew the princess wouldn't trust her with it if she didn't think she could get the job done. After all, caring for animals of all kinds was Fluttershy's specialty.

Her friends waited behind her, all of them by the entrance to her cottage. They waited quietly as Fluttershy signed the postcolt's form.

The postcolt turned around his clipboard and examined it. "All right miss... Fluttershy, thank you for signing for your... velociraptor." He was clearly just going through the motions and not really paying attention to anything on the form beyond reading it and making sure it checked out. "Hope you enjoy," he hooved her a copy of the form, then turned and walked away.

"Thank you," Fluttershy said, her voice sounding uncertain. She turned to the very large package crate sitting just a few feet away from her house. It was a huge, grayish-blue box with grooves running along the sides. Dark, square, holes spaced inches apart from each other dotted the spaces in between the grooves as if to provide whatever was inside with air but not very much light.

The yellow Pegasus approached the box. She didn't know what a velociprator was, had never seen or heard of an animal like it before but she was still curious and she had full confidence that it would be safe. After all, her friends were with her.

"What is it?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"I... well, I don't know," Fluttershy admitted. The box made no noise; whatever was inside was apparently sleeping or in some state of hibernation.

"I've never heard of a velociraptor before," Twilight said. "Are you sure it's safe?"

"I've never heard of what this is either. But I'm sure the princess wouldn't entrust me with it if she didn't think it was safe."

"Are we absolutely sure this is from the princess?" Applejack queried.

Fluttershy pulled out the note again. She'd received it from Princess Celestia a few days ago by way of her phoenix. The note was a tad vague but had indicated that the princess needed Fluttershy to care for some rare animal that she could be expecting in a large package.

"All it says is to expect a large package," Fluttershy said, reading off the note.

Twilight put a hoof to her chin. "So, this might not even be it? And the princess might not even want us to be taking care of a velociraptor?"

"I don't know," Fluttershy said timidly. "But there does seem to be some sort of creature in there. I think we should open it up and see what it is."

"Now, hold on there, sugar cube," Applejack came between Fluttershy and Twilight. "If we're not sure this is the right package, I don't think we should just go openin' it."

"It was addressed to you though, wasn't it Fluttershy?" Rarity asked, stepping forward.

"Maybe it's a shape-shifter! Like a changling!" Pinkie bounced. "Maybe the princess didn't write down what it is because it could be anything! This veloci-thingy might be a mystery pet!"

"Where does the form say it's from?" Twilight asked.

Fluttershy pulled out her copy of the delivery form and read it over. "InGen," she finally said.

"Engine? Like a train engine?" Rainbow Dash asked.

Fluttershy shook her head. "No... look," she showed the form to the others. "InGen."

"What does that mean?" Rainbow Dash asked.

"I don't know... I've never heard of it before. It could be somepony or someplace far away," Twilight said.

Suddenly, a noise came from the crate. Like the sound of some whip followed by scratching against the wall, whatever it was that was inside was obviously awake.

"Oh..., it's okay," Fluttershy said to the box, trying to sooth the creature inside. "I think he wants to get out."

"Yeah, that's obvious, Fluttershy. Question is, is this thing dangerous?" Rainbow Dash said, hovering above.

"That is a mighty big box," Applejack commented.

Twilight shook her head. "I think we should check with the princess just to be sure before we let this thing out."

"I'm sure he's perfectly fine," the box shook violently as the yellow Pegasus spoke. "He's been cooped up in there for so long, he must be getting lonely." She took to the air and moved towards the box, looking for a way to release the creature captive inside.

"Fluttershy, no!" Twilight shouted, stopping her friend. "We don't know what it is that's in there. We need to go see the princess first."

"She's right, Fluttershy," AJ agreed. "I know yer pretty good with animals but we need to check this out. Whatever's in there could be dangerous... and might not have all its shots."

Reluctantly, Fluttershy returned to the ground. Her instinct was to try to help the poor creature, whatever it was inside the container. Certainly it couldn't be something as scary as a dragon, could it?

"We'll take the train to Canterlot first thing tomorrow," Twilight said, turning back to Fluttershy's cottage.

"Wait!" Fluttershy stopped her friends. "We should move the container inside. It might rain."

"There's not a storm scheduled until tomorrow night," Rainbow Dash said, bringing up Ponyville's weather schedule.

"Oh," Fluttershy understood. Rainbow Dash was Ponyville's weather manager so she would know. Still, it didn't feel right leaving the poor creature in the box outside all night. "Well, do you think we could just move the box into the living room? Something might happen to it at night."

The box continued shaking; the animal inside, restless.

Twilight thought for a minute. Something didn't feel right, was telling her that whatever was inside that container wasn't the safest thing in Equestria.

"We'll carry it inside your cottage... but I don't think we should leave you alone with it all night. We'll stay over, too," Twilight declared.

"We... will?" Rarity asked.

"We will," Twilight replied, making it official.

"Well, all right then." The matter was settled. The six ponies carefully wedged the large crate through the backdoor to Fluttershy's cottage. It wasn't easy but eventually they pushed the crate through and into the living room. The ponies then left Fluttershy's cottage with Fluttershy sparing one last glance before she closed the front door to her home. She'd never met an animal she couldn't befriend eventually. But she also hadn't met every animal.

And inside the large box in her living room was a creature that was very eager to meet Fluttershy.

Comments ( 47 )

When is the next chapter due?

3117778 I'm very sorry but I'm not sure. I want to hit 100 stories in the next couple weeks or so, it's a personal goal.

Again, I apologize but I don't know when the next chapter will be done. If you have any ideas or would like to talk about it or anything else, feel free to PM me.:heart:

This story has much promise. Even more so if the newest addition to Fluttershy's home really likes her but considers everypony else to be some kind of chew toy to play with.

3117863 We still don't even know what's in the box yet. Could be a tape recorder. You don't know. Not even I know... and I'm literally writing it right now.
Could you tell me please? Where am I going with this?
Nah, I'm just messing. But would you like me to go somewhere with this? I've got dinosaurs and ponies! And I'm mixing them together~
Seriously, if you want to add an ingredient, just lemme know.

3117880 As long as there is a scene in which our friendly neighborhood velociraptor is chewing on a pony like this , I shall be happy.

you are aware that a velociraptor is only about the size of chicken.

I think everyone's thinking of the utah raptor, like the size in Jurassic Park (sounds much cooler than a two foot tall chicken

I now have a feeling to sing "Jurassic Park" by Weird Al Yankovic. Well at least it's not a T-Rex. Can you imagine a T-Rex chasing poor Fluttershy throughout Ponyville, while Doug Walker's "I'm a Motherf---ing T-Rex playing as background music?

3118374 actually the velociraptors in Jurassic Park were based off of deinonychus, not utah raptor.

I was not aware of that, that is very interesting. But I think it would be more interesting if Ponyville were terrorized by the movie adaptation rather than a prehistoric chicken.

3119564 Doesn't look like it even has teeth. As far as those toenails go, those look pretty sharp but still meh.

They aren't vegans, they do use eggs. And the pigs are fattened up and sold to the Gryphons. :pinkiehappy:

Lol I luv the idea of this plz make the next chapter a priority.

Hmm me thinks this story is progressing well so far. please keep it up for i am awaiting to determine if this story is as good as i think it will be.

i love le epic meme pic dude xD.

3117880 Pet gigantosaurus... Plz...

I hope Fluttershy doesn't bitch once she finds what it eats

3119564 scootaloo at dino ages:rainbowlaugh:

Saw the title, laughed my ass off. Read the chapter, and now I want more. Please continue soon.

Only one word: MOAR! :flutterrage: :flutterrage:
We need more stories with dinosaurs in this site

3982252 Agreed. And we need a sequel to Halo Wars.

3982580 Indeed, though from what I've heard the Spirit of Fire and her crew will reappear in one of the next issues of Halo Escalation.
P.S. Can't wait to see the next chapter. What's in the mysterious box...?

3984838 Now hold on a second, Dragon hunter, a boat's a boat but the mystery box could be anything! IT COULD EVEN BE A BOAT!

Yeah, but what kind of boat? If you remove the cover, you get a raft. But if you have the whole box, you have a submarine :pinkiegasp:

I'm tempted to follow this in case the author decides to continue.

Raptor's name should be Clever Girl, because why the :yay: not?

I just realized something... A velociraptor is a prehistoric Scootaloo!!!! Fluttershy ordered a freaking pony-eating orange chicken!!!

:yay: Who's the cute little sickle-clawed predator? She's just a little feathery sweetheart, isn't she? Who's a clever girl?

MOARMOARMOAR PLEAEEEEEEEEEEEESE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy:

Very eager?
More like very hungry.
Fluttershy or Celestia or who ever thinks this is a safe (predator) creature is not a clever girl:fluttercry:
But the raptor is...
Clever girl.

Ooh, interesting start! I can't wait to see where this goes. :twilightsmile:

5917365 You couldn't resist now could you? You just had to make a clever girl joke? well you get a moustache on the house :moustache:

6633503 I tried I really did try to not do it but the clever girl joke was too powerful, too powerful man!:fluttercry:

6633509 Its okay, just go quietly...
*shoots in head*
ssshhhhhhhhh :pinkiecrazy: sleep now...

6633554 *Takes out two bayonets* You'd think that would kill me, but it doesn't, you can say I'm a very big fan of Alexander Anderson so I got some sugery to get the same power as him, Full regeneration even if it's fatal *Points one bayonet* Now you sleep! *Insane Laughter followed by a lo of slashing*:pinkiecrazy:


Agreed. And we need a sequel to Halo Wars.

You got your wish

I honestly hope you update this, this makes me think of Blue from Jurassic World~ :yay: InGen baby! :rainbowdetermined2:

Is this story abandoned? :rainbowhuh:

*pokes at the poor dead corpse of a story*

Is this ever gonna get updated or is this officially dead? I love the idea, also agree on the need of more dino stories on here :3 and here's an idea, just like the movie where they f up and make it so the Dino's can change gender have a second raptor and it be the same gender and change over night in reaction to it's opposite counterpart.

I'm sorry but a lot of shit has gone down in my life this year. I lost my dad, I recently had to sell my house, I live with two total fucking dumbass chemically-dependent invalids, just a lot of shit has gone on. It's hard enough for me to update my main story every week.

But I'm continuing to write in all the stories that people are halfway interested in, including this one and my Pirates crossover. It's just very slow going.

Im so sorry to hear that, I hope things get better for you.

Could this story be updated...?




Still working on a lot of stuff simultaneously. Seems like every day I think that there's not enough hours in the day. I'll work on all of my other stories, though.


So, like Harry before her, Fluttershy adopts a velociraptor.

"Fluttershy Adopts a Velociraptor" has to be one of the best titles on Fimfiction. I've read the comments, and totally understand why you never continued it. I just wanted to thank you for writing this chapter. It truly felt like it could be the teaser opening to an episode.

šŸŽ¶Jurassic Park is frightening in the dark...

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