Over a long period of time, Rainbow Dash has instilled into her mind this complex ignorance of all things uncool, the most significance being negative emotion. She likes to believe that emotions like sadness and hate are things which she shouldn't bother with.
So her solution is the hide them all, lock them away deep inside herself in a place where she shouldn't have to worry about them anymore.
Only there is a problem.
Sometimes, you can't bottle yourself up forever.
-Accepted into Twilight's Library
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Powerful stuff. Being afraid of yourself seems like a silly fear, but at the same time I think that everyone has a little of that in them at some point or another. The one thing that you see in yourself that can shatter the whole enchilada. Kind of would like to see this idea come out in another fanfic, just to see where it goes from there.
This is a scary, yet great story.
I have never thought about this, and you make a good point.
I'll be watching you for more stuff like this.
I will admit, the first person kind of threw me off at first for some reason, but overall the story was short, simple, easy-to-read, and, most importantly, powerful. I love seeing these different sides to the characters of the show, and I think you really drive home the idea that Rainbow Dash is insecure and uncertain of herself, merely putting up a brave and strong facade. You showcase that perfectly in this quick little read. Good job.
If it weren't for this line, I was just about to quote OOC! But nooope. This changed everything. Well done. :)
Deep
Autophobia is also the fear of being alone
Good story. I explore Dash's personality too in my own way in another fic. Pokeking95 hit it on the head I think with saying Dash is actually insecure. I call it hiding behind a wall of bravado. Anyway, good job.
Hey, Dashie. Look at me for a sec.
What exactly is it about yourself that scares you? That you're not as strong as ponies think you are? That's nonsense. One, you're plenty strong. Your pride may get in the way sometimes, but you don't leave anypony behind. And what's more, you've grown. The Rainbow Dash who got cold feet before the Best Young Flyer competition is not the same Rainbow Dash who stood up to Lightning Dust.
Two, so what if you're not that strong? Your friends wouldn't give a flying feather if they knew you had this softer side. Heck, showing sensitivity isn't a sign of weakness. You still read Daring Do, don't you? You still show compassion to Fluttershy, Scootaloo, and Tank, right? So why not open up a little bit more? If anything, your friends will appreciate the honesty.
A wise pony once said that everypony has fears, and they all have ways of facing them. But they must be faced, or else the nightmares will continue. Your protégé Scootaloo took that to heart. Maybe you should, too. *pats RD on the back*
That basically sums up my feelings about this story. That and the fact that Dashie was accepted into the Wonderbolt Academy, and even became a lead pony. So, yeah.
BRILLIANT!!! I found you off of MLP forms by the way. I have the same user here too.
2638454 You know, you gave me a possible idea of writing a similar first person story with Twilight or somebody responding to these thoughts Rainbow has. I just might have to write that now
WOAH! Unbelievable awesome story. Nothing more to say. Oh, yes, one thing: Sequel, please
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Me like...
So this is going to sound snippy, even though it's really not.
I'd love to see this as a story.
As this currently stands, it's a good blueprint. But it's also first-person navel-gazing that doesn't come off as anything but unbelievable (and OOC for Dash). There's no situation, there's no conflict, there's nothing here that allows us to discover Dash's inner pain for ourselves because it's all just laid bare here for us in TMI-levels of detail.
Think back to that one scene in "The Mysterious Mare Do Well." The "I hate being alone" scene. That was hinting at something big -- just before backing away from it as quickly as possible, but it was still powerful stuff, and the framework around it was solid as well because it still provided a situation for Dash's hangup to come out and be shown to us naturally.
There's golden stuff in this, but right now, it's not a story. Just the promise of one of the greatest Dash character pieces ever if you decide to do something with it.
I really hope you do.
Good writing to you!
3062944 I never did think about expanding this into a full fledged story, but the fact that you see a story like that within this is intriguing.
I'll have to admit, you got me interested in doing a story based on this. It probably won't happen for awhile, but I have ideas for what I could with it.
If I decide to make this a full story, I'll definitely let you know.
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Definitely let me know if anything comes of it.
So glad to hear you have ideas in mind! The great thing about writing is that there's no rush.
(Also, looking at your other stories -- just as a thought? "Autophobia" is very much a Twilight word...
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I couldn't help but think about how much this perfectly describes how I feel on the inside...
Wow, this was quite the story. I am unbelievably impressed with how this was written and the idea you used. Short and simple, deep and powerful, that is all I can say about this one.
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3075253 I second Bookish Delight on this one. I was almost disappointed when i saw it was a one-shot(still loved it though!) you could make a whole story about this and use this as a general plot-outline.
Is it me or is this strangely reminiscent of Rocket to Insanity, this would probably happen after the alternate ending where pinkie survives, and it did read out like she is talking to twilight as a Psychiatrist.
MOMMY!!!
I understand how you feel I sometimes suffer from this as well
never told my dad or mom...
Wow! It really feels like we're inside Dashie's mind. Definitely a very good read. Excellent work
(I've translated your story in French for my blog, would you accept that I publish it? Thanks in advance
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