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Richer19


A simple writer/ game designer/ brony/ dragon fan.

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A strange machine uses my laptop to suck me into the land of Equestria. With a new body, forbidden knowledge of the land, and a backpack filled with my technology; will I be able to adapt to the way things are here and find a way back home, if I want to return in the first place.

Yes this is a HiE. Yes this has been done like over nine thousand times before. I know that I am not a very good writer but I hope you will give me a chance with this.

Will add characters and categories as they become relevant. I only own any OCs that are used and this story. The rest is own by Hasbro, Hub, and Studio B

Chapters (17)
Comments ( 38 )

i decided
"eh s/he is new why not give em a chance?"
so i did....and i gotta say its not bad...thoguh i will wait until rate but im gonna track it for now
hopes for a great story
Signed
Lightning Streak

Run-on sentences galore. Makes it hard to understand.

So, there are a multitude of spelling and grammatical errors in this, of course this can easily be remedied by getting it proofread. Despite this and the fact that yes, its not quite a brand new idea, I'm intrigued. I like the ambiguity of this opening and the potential of where you could take this is, honestly, huge. This is a great start and I will be following this with interest. I look forward to your future updates! :pinkiehappy:

Good so far. Quick question: is the whole waking-up-and-rubbing-your-eyes-with-a-hoof-only-to-realize-it's-a-hoof-and-not-a-hand thing a reference to "Through the Eyes of Another Pony"? I'm just wondering.
Also, refering to something that you said last chapter: I agree with you that Ponies is like a plague, but it an awesome plague that I don't really want to get rid of.

Pretty good. Only one complaint so far: Why is this chapter so short!? I. Need. MOAR! :D

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I really had no idea I made such a reference. It was really just how I believe my actions would be if I was put in the situation. As for the second part, I couldn't agree more.

215765 Thanks, just checking. So we agree that if by any chance someone finds the antidote, that they should keep it to themselves?

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No...if by chance someone does fine an antidote, it should get a one way ticket to the sun. :trollestia:

Great Story, cant wait for moar:pinkiehappy:

216136 Sounds good to me.:twilightsmile:
This pleases Fluttershy.:yay:

I agree with ketcham1009. Keep up the good work.

Good, but you need to start a new line when someone talks.

I know the picture of Whirlwind is kind of blurry but it was the only one I could that was small enough to fit. Once again, I am really sorry for this being so late.:fluttershysad:

my reaction
HAAAX
watch the whole video please

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Probably the most random...yet strangely accurate video I have see so far. Thanks for the comment. :twilightsmile:

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no problem
but also
HAAAAAXXXXX
-throws computers at you at speeds over 100mph-

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-use hax to redirect computers back at you-:trollestia:

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-computers do nothing, and your hax disables as i throw more at you while more DR.HAX's appear and start throwing them at you-
15 dr,HAX voices:HAAAAAAX HAAAAX THE HAAAAAX

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well...crud -gets crushed under all the computers, breaking my bones and preventing me from typing another chapter in the near future-.
...
.........
.......................not really.

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GOOD.... BECAUSE THEN I'D HAVE TO haaax myself
EDIT:
damn you capslock

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Tis a dangerous weapon to the untrained.:twilightsmile:

Just FYI, the information on Darksiders II is based solely on the cover picture I found on IGN and what I believe is going to be the content. Hope that doesn't confuse you all. :twilightblush:

Shit is about to go in a direction that is not up, isn't it? (left)

And thats how you died, the end

And thats how you died, the end


Other then the grammar mistakes. There are quite a few but I don't mean that as an insult :twilightsheepish:
I am reading a whit ton of fanfictions right now to gather ideas for my first fics.
I don't think your method of getting the main character to equistria was unoriginal and I have read quite a few hie fics.
I enjoy it so far and I might take some ideas from you and use them in my fics. :twilightsmile:

I like this so far :twilightsheepish: other then the grammar mistakes:twilightsheepish:
I also saw a few mistakes with your tenses. One example was when you said((something about the foods main theme was apples(sorry I'm just lazy and don't want to keep scrolling up and down to get the quote just right) I was overwhelm)
I think the word overwhelmed would have been better becouse(sorry again bit I am going to use a very technical explaination for this)
But since he was thinking about being overwhelmed it came after the fact.(okay I'm going to stop now becouse if I'm confusing myself you'll fare no bette :facehoof:)
anyway I just thought it would of sounded better with a past tense.
and now I will say that you are the first person who had applejack find the main character instead of fluttershy. I enjoy that:yay:
Thank you for bearing with me and if you could give me a tip or two on how not to be so boring I would very much enjoy that:twilightsmile:

I like the idea of this very much so. But I thought what will happen if ponies get addicted to video games? Would they become lazy like humans did?
And I am not trying to insult any takers out there bi am one as well
I'm. Really just curious to know the answer:twilightsmile:

should the story have a human tag in it?

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