Flung into another world by an outer god, Rainbow Blitz and Butterscotch are shocked to find that everyone they knew has flipped gender. Their predicament becomes even stranger when they meet up with their opposite sex selves. They want to return to their home, but find themselves becoming attached to their gender flipped counterparts.
WARNING: The first chapter is a bit dark ( some death, swearing, complete monster bad guy). After that I don't intend to have many more dark chapters. just thought I'd warn ya. Im not sure if I should put a dark tag or not.
Also, this fic wont be updated on regular basis. Right now my focus is on my other fic " The Sad Sad Life of Poopy McScooperton"
The image used is NOT mine, it belongs to JaquelinAmyRose on Da. If they want it down, I will gladly change the image
If it's Butterscotch meets Fluttershy, there's definitely going to be some cuteness
FIRST TO COMMENT!
I like it ! Smiley is a total dick and to be honest I dont think i would care if he even returned... Im just here to see how the relationships play out.
i think i might be one of the few people cheering for smily
214204
While in another fic he would win and just slaughter everyone ( I like unhappy endings), I'm afraid in this one he wont be winning. He wont be losing either though.
214204
Oh hell be returning, though only to dick around and taunt Butters and Blitz. The main focus is on the relationship, not Smiley. He's just there to be an omnipotent asshole to everyone
Dang it I'm an idiot...Put Princess Celestia and Luna when it should have been PRINCE Solaris and Prince Artemis. Oh well, fixed now. Sorry everyone
Don't really like the idea of a god to just run around and use swear words. I would've been better in my opinion to actually use Discord himself. But I like it so far - any rule 63 fic is a must read for me. But for the part where Fluttershy meets Butterscotch, I would do a lot more description, in the same manner that you described the human. And it felt a bit rushed towards the end, think about reactions too - Butterscotch has never met Fluttershy, correct? I think they should react that the pony looks exactly like themselves. And oh, I think Blitz is taking stuff a bit too easily, he doesn't seem to react very much against seeing a female version of himself or Dusk Shine, and I would tune down the dark a bit - there is absolutely no reason for him to destroy the world - not storywise, anyway. Work with the reactions and the description and this will be golden. I enjoyed the read, and I might draw a picture if a interesting scene comes up.
214270
Oh im aware of all those problems and intend to work on them in following chapters.
As for the god bit. Discord wouldn't work, I don't see him having that kind of power. Yes he can warp reality, but I see it as limited to his own reality, unable to interact with the realities of others.
As for the description...eheh...wellll I can try. Its not my strong suite
RAINBOW BLITZ FTW........now onto the chapter
214270
Oh and actually there is a reason that he destroyed the 63 planet. It was so Blitz and Butterscotch couldn't come back. I probably should have explained it better.
As for the darkness, it is going to be toned down. The first chapter is probably the darkest of all, only gets lighter from here on.
Ill take your advice though and fix all that stuff
214284
Hope you like it
Actually very interesting, compared to what I expected. Good job!
214312
Oh, well thank you I enjoy hearing that
i hope that smiley gets some limbs ripped off..... slowly, or gets raped by molestia
214355
Limb ripping wouldnt work, He'd just grow them back.
Also...he actually has been before. I was gonna put that in as a joke later on. Needless to say he didn't enjoy it
"bi-Pedal like Rainbow "
214406
Did I use the wrong word?. yes yes I did .Gonna fix that
Kay fixed
You use the word "Fuck" in the whole thing...then say "Dang" instead of "Damn" in the AC at the bottom.
I didn't like the story. Gonna be honest. Its only chapter one and I hate it. The concept of GB versions meeting their counterparts is good. Even better you limited it to only two of the Mane 6. Interesting choices on top of it.
make for the best. It just feels right. But the whole Smiley...Sue...I know what you said, but I have to comment on it or this kind of stuff won't ever get better. I feel he should be more of a near-omnipotent jackass like Discord. Near. Keep it realistic in a sense. He should be more of an asshole who travels from place to place with the ability to bring trouble from other universes. Hop around out of harms way. Kind of like Paradox from Ben 10 UA. It would work out if he had that kind of limit. The whole killing a universe he doesn't like is a little extreme, but you can still go with ruining the whole happy shit he doesn't like.
You have a good idea. Just improve on it. A little.
214422
Cant really do all of that without completely altering everything I wrote.
Sorry that you don't like it, I cant please everyone.
I can however recommend a story that has similar concept and is FAR better done than mine.
Its called On a Cross and Arrow, similar concept, far better written than my drivel, no omnipotent beings.
Next chapter please
214464
Ill get it out when i can, hopefully next week. But first I'm gonna fix the first chapter, add more details, get the reactions to them seeing their opposite gender selves more worked out.
Thank you for reading my crap
214441 Well thanks for the story, I'll check it out.
Sorry for the whole rant, I do realize you can't please everyone. Just keep it in mind for future stories.
214255
face
good cause when i read it i had a
214486
No. No its fine. I shall keep it in mind. Besides your right, I do need to depower Smiley, which i already have a way to do, Your comment just showed me I need to introduce his weaknesses immediately. Thank you for your criticism.
214494
I can easily understand why. If it was Lyra it would have made some sense . Rainbow ...pfff. NO , makes no sense at all.
Thanks for catching that for me.
214503
i meant the part about Cealastia and Luna
214590
Ah that. I felt so stupid when I realized that mistake.
i.qkme.me/261v.jpg
Keep up the good work my good sir.
214647
Yeahh that picture basically sums up this chapter
.
As for good work. I SHALL TRY!!*cue heroic music!*
Smiley = accidental nightmare fuel.
Seriously, I like the fic and the concept, but can you get rid of that guy on the end? Like, some god-of-all-gods decides he is fucking up reality too much and kills him?
Otherwise, keep going.
214692
Actually getting rid of him wouldn't be too hard to do. I imagine him having alot of enemies, since he messes up other worlds and all, some of them just as strong as him and hunting him down. So yes it is possible to me to do that. probably how I'll end the story, with him getting what he deserves.
214705
Yes, do that please. I would be very happy with such ending.
Just a little note, you called them Princess Celestia and Princess Luna when they were supposed to be Prince Solaris and the other guy,
Also when you first introduced Smiley I though he was just an Anti-Brony from the internet, and when you said he's name was smiley I remembered that used to be my nickname at school since I always got that grin on my face
214735
Well your wish will probably be granted. I just need to figure out what gets him. I'm thinking perhaps a really pissed off Alicorn Twilight he once hurt, or maybe letting him have run in with Lauren's Alicorn OC ( who I'd imagine is incredibly powerful)
214760
Yeah, I noticed that earlier on and (hopefully) fixed that.
I guess Smiley is sort of an Anti-Brony, a very very very violent one
Thanks for reading my story.
214486 Wait you haven't read on a cross and arrow?
I love the rule 63 stories, and this one is no exception. Can't wait for the next!
214806 Nope working on it. Just read chapter one.
214305 I did catch that, and I understood it, I just mean that 1. There would be a unlimited number of other universes they could "return" too. And 2. I dont really understand why he would make it so dramatic, if he is almighty, wouldn't he just be able to snap his fingers and destroy all the universes? And he doesn't seem to have a reason to destroy shit, just because he wants. Which I dont really feel like is a reason that contribute to the story.
216264
Yeah i have taken that into consideration and plan to bring up the unlimited number of universes things later on.
As to why he'd make it dramatic, that's cause hes NOT almighty. powerful yes, but he doesn't have discords abilities to warp reality. His reason's for destroying the planet pretty much equate to why a human might smash a bug; its annoying and its there.
I'm revising the 1st chapter, so I plan to fix all these issues that ive been told about.
216264
Actually, now that Ive really thought about it. I think I'm just gonna rewrite this whole thing and remove Smiley from the equation. He really doesn't work.
Trying to use him was really a stupid idea on my part.
216852 I feel kind of bad now, making you rewrite your story and stuff - that doesn't mean I ain't happy you're doing it. As Luna puts it: Huzzah! The excitement has been doubled!
217490
naaaah dont feel bad. Its just I realized trying to use the character of Smiley doesn't work outside of original stories, that's all.
Im gonna rewrite the story without him and improve it.
You meany, meany, meany, pants you. Destroying a ponyworld and killing scoots????? Good thing I already read you other fic that is so much funner than this one or I'd be super mad at you instead of just really mad. Banish smiley to a super colossal black hole and leave him there!
LOL I was listening to Down With The Sickness when I was reading this.... Good timing iTunes!!!!
261519
Oh he got worse
...he's stuck in a world of Pinkie Pies
Oh, gawd you are right! He'll be rocking back and forth, curled up in the fetal position, while singing friendship songs. He'll even have to go back and fix the worlds hes destroyed just to make the music in his mind finally stop.262902
Some of these comments are over 5 weeks old... will there ever be an update? You've got a nasty habit of writing the beginnings of really GREAT stories, and then not updating for a very, very long time! Show consideration for your fans!
339684
THIS story will never be updated. ever. Never again. For this story was a very very very bad idea from the start.
Strange Love (which will renamed here soon) will hopefully be updated this weekend, hopefully.
341180 You know, I could probably continue this for you. I'd write it, send it to you, then you post it. I have what has been referred to as a "Left of center" sense of humour, enjoyed reading cupcakes, and have a mind which has the incredible ability of "What if". Just because this is so brilliantly absurd and cancelled, if it weren't cancelled I'd let the writer do the writing, but it is so I'd love to make it longer.