• Published 26th May 2013
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blazing beats - blazing beats



Its about a pony named blazing beats and his life traveling equestria trying to find a way to get back into cantrolot and ponyville.

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the begining

Original story by Joseph Maestas Editors: Autumn K. Keller and Normal from fimfiction

BLAZING BEATS (THE BEGINNING)
It was late at night, and a deep blanket of clouds hid the light of the moon behind their billowing grace. With the combination of the weather, a deep typhoon-like rain, and the wee hour, all ponies around were away in their beds, long since asleep. All but two ponies that is. Two ponies running through the rain, a mare and a stallion, side by side .With the hush of a whisper the deep voice of a stallion breaks through the torrential sound .
"We must go, we won’t be seen, I promise”

The response of the mare’s is hesitant and such hesitation drifts through her answer too.
"I…I … know, I do…but I don’t want to leave him here, and it is still raining out here; do something!" Eyes peer up at the stallion, pleading.

Irritation spreads over the muzzle of the stallion but he relents. At his side wide wings spread. And soon the stallion takes to the sky, his form a shadow in the dark.

Just as soon he is back, his form lit up by the light of the moon. He did what pegasi did best. Cleared the clouds.

“He will be fine now. We must leave, and swiftly.”

Life was always hard for him, and he didn't understand it, but he had to live with it. Blazing Beats is his name -- no parents, no home, but he had rarely needed them. He had two ponies as his family that he was respectful to and happy to have. He enrolled himself in a school and went to school like any other pony. Blaze, as others called him, got bullied a bit but he decided to try his best for the ponies he loved anyway, and that’s what he did.

After school every Monday and Friday, he went to visit a pony very close to him named Rainbow Dash. He learned how to control his flying patterns and how to fly better by this pony. On Tuesday and Thursday he went to visit another close pony to him named Vinyl Scratch. While on his visits to Canterlot, he helped her with her music and everything else she needed. On Wednesdays and Saturdays he helped everyone else he was wanted and whomever needed it. The pony he helped on this day was Pinkie Pie, who always needed help in the bakery. She wasn't too good at baking, so Blaze taught her how to bake. On a day after helping another pony named Fluttershy take care of her animals, he went to help Pinkie Pie like always, and, to his surprise, he walked in and she told him she didn't need help that day. Instead, she gave him a cupcake. It looked amazing with sapphire blue frosting, three edible gems on top -- red, blue, and green -- and chocolate cake mix with a purple wrapping around it. He was afraid to take a bite because usually they looked good but didn't taste well. He took a bite anyway and it tasted great. He asked how long it took to make, but she said there was work to be done and hopped off.

Later on Monday that same week, his teacher Mrs. Cheerilee asked to speak to Blaze after class. It was not because of bad grades; it was because he was surpassing the level of education that was needed for his 5th grade class. She asked him to bring his parents in to talk on Friday. On Thursday Blaze went to ask Vinyl and Dash to come in to his meeting to talk about school. Only Vinyl could go: Dash was too busy practicing her flying patterns.Blaze didn't want to admit it out loud, but he thought it was a load of shit. Vinyl went and she was surprised to know he was going to be going to two grades ahead of him in Canterlot. After Friday he went to tell Dash the news but she was gone. He went to Fluttershy’s cottage, but she was not there either. So he asked around but no one knew where they were. So in disappointment at Dash he decided to go to the bakery. He opened the door to be surprised at a party. It was to celebrate when he was found or the day of his birth which no pony really knew. He went to the front of the room and spoke.
“Thank you everyone... I know I’m still young small and not capable of many things but I have big news.” Blaze hesitated to say. “In about a week or so I will be moving to Canterlot.” Blaze started to say more sadly “because I have surpassed the best among my class and will be in a school there.”

Pinkie said with a surprised expression and bouncing around like she does "Well how amazing, I will have to make extra sapphire cakes for you!"

Dash said with a determined look in her eyes, "Well we knew this day would come, but never thought we could see you go."
Fluttershy exclaimed quietly, "Make sure to come and visit us OK."
"I will and thanks for the party- Let’s celebrate!" Blaze said with tears of joy.

Everyone congratulated him on his success and as everypony turned away, he walked to a seat and sat down. Blaze watched everyone have fun wishing the best for them. He ate one of the sapphire blue cupcakes that Pinkie made, because those were his favorite, and drank tea Fluttershy had made. He wished to have more parties to come like this, but as he sat down he wondered, why him? Blaze got up thinking the music must be changed and pulled out a CD, gave it to Dash to play, and had a good time.

Author's Note:

Well here it goes again hopefully its not an eye sore anymore thanks to all these wonderful editor and more to come.

Comments ( 18 )
VX
VX #1 · May 26th, 2013 · · ·

Just read first chapter and wow. You need a pre-reader. I can help if you would like.

Try to fix punctuation.

EDIT!:"cuntralot"?

:rainbowlaugh: cuntralot HA!

:rainbowlaugh:cuntralot HA!

How did this utter piece of SHIT ever pass moderation? I suspect whoever approved it assumed you're retarded and was being kind to the mentally disabled.

LEARN TO USE YOUR SHIFT KEY. Capital letters exist for a reason.

Major minus points for naming your story after yourself. That was the very first clue that this was going to suck massively.

And basically everything about this story is just...bad. It's badly written, there's no evidence whatsoever that you bothered to proofread it, and what little I was able to force down before my eyes rebelled and threatened to cut off something I'd really miss unless I stopped.

Comment posted by VX deleted Oct 10th, 2013

Uh... no.:facehoof:

3335683 Everyonce in a while I come back just to see your comment and laugh my ass off. Thank you.:rainbowlaugh:

The response of the mare’s is hesitant and such hesitation drifts through her answer too.

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Good idea poorly executed. :applejackunsure:

sorry guys and girls for the crappy story im taking it down don't worry but it will be back up one its edited and it in better condition ie grammar structure wording etc etc sorry to leave a bad impression i was like 12 when i started, again im sorry chapter 1 will stay up for now, again im really sorry and im working on the final draft ie editing thank you for all your comments even bad it gives me a better view on what i need to do sorry again and thank you all.:ajsleepy::twilightsheepish::fluttershysad:

2642165 As i assure you that this will no longer be a problem, i invite you to edit this piece of crap yourself if you want to or are willing to help if not you will just have to wait or deal with it thank you for your words and it is being worked on.:twilightsheepish:

Comment posted by Electro-Kitten deleted Jul 26th, 2015

I found this in the foalcon area of the rape group

Comment posted by falloutlover1 deleted Oct 21st, 2017
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