Amethyst "Sparkler" Star was perfectly content in being an average pony in a not-so-average family. That all changed the day she encountered a mysterious metal disc which fell from the sky. Now, in order to protect her family, her friends, and all of Equestria from a resurgent menace, Amethyst must embrace a new destiny. She must cease to be normal, and instead metamorphose into something . . . "beyond the norm."
Presenting the first attempted fanfiction fusion of My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic and the long-running anime/manga series Bio-Booster Armor Guyver, with a little Doctor Who wibbly-wobbling in and out for good measure. So Stand-By, Get Set, and ALLONS~Y!!.
Proofreading and editing generously provided by Nonagon, CrowMagnon and Zeta040. Please Read & Review - comments and critiques are greatly appreciated!
11/3/2013 - Now 100% Approved by Twilight's Library!!!
11/17/2013 - Winner of ~The Decent Writers Club~ Crossover Contest!!
2/7/2016 - Cited by Equestria Daily in their Pony Spotlight #5 - Amethyst Star!!! (i.e. "Senpai noticed me!")
10/11/2016 - Called (Enjoyable) in a review by The Pleasant Commentator and Review Group!
Nice story. You just got yourself a favorite, a like, and a follower.
Guyyyyver~!
well this a lot nicer then opening for Guyver I mean no blood yet
You just lost a reader because he died laughting.
I am confused. Where are the monsters and the crushing and the bleeding and the vaporizing! GUYVER!!!!
I want to see Greygol's arms get broken at the joints.
When will we see this!!!
MAN this is good! You really got me with the 'Doctor', and that ending tells me a civil war is brewing in the Changeling ranks. I wonder who, exactly, the 'Highness' that Ephemero was messaging is?
And Dinky was just ridiculously awesome dealing with Diamond Tiara there. Not only did it make me want to cheer over seeing DT's bully-armor crumple like tin foil, the comment about her father having disappeared as well as Dinky's really struck me as an Important Thing To Remember Later.
Overall, the family and friendship dynamics you've built up here in the 'Slice of Life' sections have built up the characters well, and the Doctor sections have laid the groundwork nicely for the knock-you-on-your-ass awesomeness to come. I eagerly await the merging of the two.
Funny how this story made me a fan of guyver
Yes!!!!!! Finally!!!! One about me!!!!!
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Thank you very much!
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As would be expected when you mix Guyver with a world like My Little Pony.
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You will be missed, but as my plastic surgeon always said, "If you've gotta go, go with a smile."
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Patience, my friend, patience . . .
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Glad to hear you've liked what's been written so far, my friend. I was a bit worried about how Dinky's response to Diamond Tiara would come across, and I'm glad it seemed to hit the notes I was aiming for! And rest assured, more Guyver: Friendship is Magic awesomeness is forthcoming!
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*reaches into bag of potato chips, slowly takes out a chip, and eats it* Just as planned . . .
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I'm glad my story's protagonist approves!
A... Guyver crossover?
I may just read this...
I'm genuinely impressed! The narrative is very action-packed and detailed, but easy to read. And, as somepony who enjoys a good metamorphosis, I adore what you've done to bring these two worlds together. Keep up the great work!
Yeah UPDATE
now for bed(not)
Man, I wish I could upvote this multiple times. It definitely needs and deserves the exposure. Your writing style has an excellent pace to it, making both the action and the character interactions flow perfectly. This really helped in the fight scene, which was both badASS and well-described throughout.
I also love the little nods to Doctor Whooves and the idea that the Doo family is familiar enough with bizarre and unknown technologies to have a set of rules regarding how to handle such things. And Screwball! Oh, she and 'daddy' are going to have a good time watching whatever's coming next.
OH MY GOD!!!!!!! GUYVER CROSSOVER!!!! YES
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I hope that you do read and continue to do so as future chapters are released, my friend!
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Thank you much for your kind words, CrowMagnon! When writing I do wonder if I'm striking the right balance between action and more character-based description/reflection. I'm glad to hear that you think I hit the right note here, and that you liked the fight scene in general--it certainly won't be the last!
And yeah, it is fun to weave wibbly-wobbly bits of Doctor Hooves into the narrative, though figuring out just how much exposure and experience Amethyst and Dinky have with alien tech as a result of family adventures is a bit of a challenge. And good to hear you liked Screwball's cameo--look forward to more appearances (and mischief) from that duo in the future.
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Thank you very much! Balance is something I work hard for both in the narrative and technical sides of things, particularly because I consider myself a novice story writer, so I truly appreciate your critique and feedback of what I've written so far! Look forward to more metamorphic crossovery fun in the chapters to come!
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Well, a truly awesome, mind-blowing opening theme like that deserves . . . a seemingly out-of-place J-Pop closing theme . . . in Russian.
When might this be updating?
I love this story and would love to see more! Pwease?
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I'm working on Chapter 4 as we speak. As I explained in my most recent blog post, I've been pretty busy IRL as of late, and as such have had little time to devote to writing. That being said, I fully intend to continue this story and am in the process of writing Chapter 4, which I hope to have drafted in the coming weeks.
Thanks for your continued interest!
3251410 Okay! Sorry about your busy life. I know that feel bro.
Can't wait for more! It's a good story!
Love the Tale of Two Cities reference. Great job on character design too. They all have very distinct and vibrant personalities, are well developed, and interact in unique, non cliche ways.
Well now, this was interesting. I wasn't sure I would like this, being that I am not a huge fan of crossovers. However, you seem to be doing crossovers right, where you don't need to understand the secondary source material to enjoy it. As long as you continue along the path and quality you have currently shown, I see no reason to deny you.
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Wear it with pride;
-Lumino
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I'm glad you enjoyed the references! Keep your eyes peeled in future installments, as I'm sure there will be many more hidden/not-so-hidden references and shout-outs to follow!
And thank you for your kind words regarding my efforts at characterization. The nice thing about background ponies like the ones I'm using is that they don't really have any set characterization outside of fanon, which allows for a high degree of flexibility in portraying them. This flexibility can also be a challenge though, as starting from scratch means having to put extra effort into molding a character from very little to somepony who the readers can care about, and who isn't just a "one-trick pony" for the purpose of plot progression.
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I am truly humbled by this honor, Lumino, so thank you so much. I will do my best to live up to this seal of approval by making this crossover fanfic as enjoyable and accessible as it can be!
And this is why giant robots are just better.
Really glad to see more of this! Like Sparkler, I am very suspicious of this "Question Mark", though I'm betting that she's affiliated with the late Dr. Ephemero, rather than Chrysalis's goons. Either way, you've left me eagerly awaiting the follow-up to see what's coming next.
ITS ALIVE!!!!!!!
Will this story make any sense to a reader who isn't familiar with the manga series you've used?
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It gets even better when you combine the two . . .
Glad you liked this first part--look forward to the next coming soon!
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I've been trying to write this story more from a MLP:FIM perspective from the start in order to make the Guyver elements more accessible to people who aren't familiar with them. I realize a lot hasn't been explained yet (about the Guyver units, the new transformations of the changelings, etc.), but that's because the story hasn't reached a place where those revelations come to light. I promise, my intention is a blending that allows people to slowly acclimate to the story elements from Guyver without traveling too far away from MLP:FIM.
Is there anything in particular from the story thus far that you're confused about or feel merits more explanation? Please let me know, because I would appreciate the feedback. Thanks for reading!
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I've not started to read it yet-- I was a bit apprehensive.
Hot Fuzz?
For the record, I know next to NOTHING about the Guyver, aside from the review I watched of the AWFUL live action movie from the 90's (no offense if you actually like that) recently conducted by the Nostalgia Critic and Bennett the Sage. That said, you've got an intriguing story hiding in the background in the form of whatever Time Turner/Doctor Whooves is up to (I'm assuming that's who it is), and the bits you've teased us with so far have been just the right amount to keep readers hooked without giving too much. As for your main character, the selection of Amethyst Star is a welcome one indeed. She's a great background character who, when properly utilized, makes for a great main character in her own right, and you seem to be doing just that right here. My favorite creative decision of yours so far, however, would by far be your decision to set this several years after Twilight's coronation. It's interesting getting a look at these characters we're familiar with when they're older, but not too far forward in time either. Not too many things have changed, nor has too much stayed the same, and this "new" setting gives you a lot of room to build your own world out of one we're already well-acquainted with. Will get to the other chapters when I can, and will also try to read up more on the Guyver, but so far after the prologue and Ch. 1 I am thoroughly enjoying what you've got here Mares Guyver!
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Thanks so much for your awesome feedback; I'm glad you've liked what you've read so far!
Yeah, I do have a bit of a soft spot for the old '91 live-action flick, but mostly because without it I may never have discovered the world of manga and anime outside of what was available on TV at the time (due to the Guyver anime OVA series being conveniently located across the aisle from the live-action film at my local Blockbuster). Looking back at it now . . . yeah, it's really a hot mess of a film, but to my younger-self, it was . . . a revelation. There are many reasons for this messiness (as explained expertly by internet reviewer Apollo Z. Hack in his video review), but it's still fun to look back at it now and, like the Nostalgia Critic, go into a coma of glee at its hilarious awfulness. Thank God for the sequel, Guyver: Dark Hero, starring David "Sexy Voice" Hayter. Even on a much smaller budget (which, unfortunately, does show), it's got better choreographed fights, better costumes and CGI effects, a better and more serious story, and (mostly) better acting, showing the potential of what a live-action Guyver film could be. "NERD!"
A-a-anyways, I'm glad that the story has managed to keep you hooked so far, and that you like so many of things I've tried to do with the narrative, cast of characters, and setting. I hope that you continue to enjoy my story as well as what I've got planned for it, and with fingers crossed it will meet whatever expectations you might have at this point. Thanks again for your feedback! YAY!
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Ok, one last bit of Guyver fanboying! I swear!
Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhh . . . . . . .
While I don't know too much about Guyver itself, I do know enough about anime-superhero (I'm sure there's a different term for it, but that's all I can come up with) shows (from reviews and my own exposure to the fantastic Trigun, absolutely loved that show) to know that in a prologue and three chapters, you've managed to more or less cover all the tropes of an anime-superhero show's premiere, especially in the hero's reveal. Star's first outting as the Mare Guyver was a phenomenally executed scene which reminded me very much in its pacing and the way the fight played out of the first time Vash the Stampede definitively shows who he is in Trigun, episode 5, "Hard Puncher" (again, one of my all time favorite scenes in anime). There's a stylized romanticism and almost turn-based style to the way Japanese fight scenes play out in the few shows and movies I've watched in Japanese media, and you seem to have encapsulated that perfectly, so as a crossover of this given genre, you seem to be excelling and hitting all the right notes at the moment.
At the same time, you've done a great job of world building with the way you've been handling these characters from MLP, not giving us too much, but enough too know that this is a very original interpretation of Equestria. The Changelings have been very interesting in their behavior, and your thoughts on their biology seem to make sense. One question: why are their quotes encapsulated by these symbols < >? Just curious is all, not calling you out for it or anything. I think my favorite changeling interpretation is still Mister Friendly's in his Irony of AJ series, but you've presented a very interesting interpretation yourself. Can't wait to read the next chapter!
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That's for the fantastic Thundercats reference.
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And that's for making me feel old for getting that reference.
This scene would've then gone two ways: the way it ended up going, or this way...
Dinky cried out in pain as Amethyst sharply smacked her across the head with the backside of her hoof.
"Ow, Star, what the-"
"WE DON'T SPEAK IN PUNS IN THIS FAMILY!!!"
Very nice follow up to the previous, action-packed chapter. I'm a little confused as to why Amethyst is so distressed at the beginning, or why she ran off at all: I know she saw at the end of the last chapter that they were all afraid of her, but as Dinky herself mentioned, she wasn't aware of any of the fight or the changelings even showing up, so it just seems like she should then and there be more confused than distraught. Eh, whatever, she ran into Question Mark so it was worth it. Gotta say that right there is a INTERESTING OC you've cooked up there; will be very interesting seeing how she develops and communicates with others, as well as learning more about her as the story progresses. Dinky's getting her cutie mark was a great way to cap the chapter, and you've got a very cool grasp on how to write the application of magic. Very stylized and detailed, much like your fight scenes, I like that. Overall, this story is not disappointing in the slightest, and definitely an upstanding piece of work. Glad I'm all caught up, and can't wait to read the next chapter!
You bastard! I almost thought that was a Doctor Who reference!
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Thank you very much for your feedback, Batbrony! I'm glad that the pacing of these "origin" chapters and the fight scene in this one played out well for you, and I see what you mean about the "turn-based" execution of anime/manga-based fight scenes versus the more throw-everything-you-can-get-your-hands-on, all-at-once style found elsewhere. Guyver itself is very much rooted in the tradition of sentai shows like Kamen Rider/Masked Rider, Super Sentai/Power Rangers, Ultraman/uh, Ultraman and Japanese Spider-Man/?????, which in-turn share a lot in common with more Western superhero fare, and since I'm huge fans of both that influence is likely going to continue to be strong. And to have my story compared to Trigun, one of the all-time great, genre-blending, action animes out there, is a huge compliment which I very much appreciate.
In regards to your question, the "<>" signifies that the changelings are speaking in their own language, as opposed to Equestrian. After all, having a world where everyone speaks the same language to one another regardless of culture or species just seems silly to me. It's also my way of illustrating that in my particular headcanon changelings are individuals rather than a hivemind, though a minor telepathic link does exist between them. And as we saw with the Changeling Commander, they are capable of switching to standard Equestrian as the need demands--wouldn't be very effective infiltrators otherwise.
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I'd have to be just as old in order to make it, my friend. And you're never too old to feel young. TA-TA-TA!!!
Heh, I'm sure if Amethyst weren't in such a frazzled mental state, she likely would have teased Dinky as mercilessly as you suggest. Oh well, there's always blackmail . . .
Besides, this is Dinky we're talking about: a character so agonizingly adorable in fanon that even as an adolescent I imagine she can still get away with inducing diabetes every once and awhile. I mean, just look at her!.
My justification for her reaction is partly based on my own speculation on how the bio-booster armor operates. Given the fact that it's a bio-boosting symbiotic, technorganic armor, rather than mere powered armor a la Iron Man, I imagine the effects on the host while active would be much akin to swallowing multiple Red Bulls, drinking a case of Mountain Dew, hooking your brain into a car battery, and pumping a few thousand cc's of adrenaline. In other words, everything from the senses is supercharged and amped to the nth degree--faster, more extensive, and more intense than anything Amethyst would likely have experienced before. She was aware of this rush for barely a minute or two before the armor detaches, likely causing an immediate physiological crash both from the transition as well as the fact that she would have been drained from expending bio-energy and magic in the fight (in Guyver canon, firing the Megasmasher/chest-cannon more than once is enough to totally exhaust a host). Add in the fact that it was the end of a typical workday, the last thing she remembered before waking up was being attacked by a cross between a facehugger and tentacle monster, she wakes to see a partly-destroyed forest and her own body transformed into some kind of creature without explanation, and even after the armor retracts her sister and friends seem to be scared of her. Given all of that, yeah, at least to me Amethyst taking a little mental vacation and sprinting into the woods seems a bit more excusable.
And yeah, maybe I also needed some reason for her to run into "Question Mark" somewhere in another part of the Everfree. Glad you like her character, by the way. You'll certainly be seeing a good amount of her as this story unfolds. Heh, heh, heh . . .
As always, thanks for your comments and great feedback, Batbrony!
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No problemo, happy I could help, and OK, that makes sense when you explain it like that. Currently in the middle of a major edit myself; EqD reader and friend of mine suggested it, along with some great writing tips, and it's really paying dividends so far (plus it'll be a great exercise before jumping into writing for Ch. 7). Anyways, can't wait for the next chapter!
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Glad to hear you're getting the help you were looking for--I'm sure it'll pay off when you finally do make that EqD bid, because your story definitely deserves an admission!
Speaking of edits, going back to your earlier comment about Dinky's somewhat cutesy statement, did Amethyst's reaction as written seem appropriate and (more to the point) in-character for her as she's been written so far? I'm trying hard to maintain consistent characterization, so if this is an issue at any point, I'd certainly like to address it.
great amazing totally awesome story, mostly because it has a well writan Amethyst star in it.
So far I'm liking the development and the build up of this world. The MLP version of the Zoaniods was cool and make me excited to see what you make to give the equivalent to the Hyper Zoaniods and the Zoalords. The bits of humor are also, I really liked the nod to Hot Fuzz last chapter, but I do wonder if you'll bring the Doctor into the mix at some time. Either way, I'll follow you done the rabbit hole just to see what you've cooked up next. All in all great work keep it up!!!
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Thank you very much for the compliments, my friend! I particularly appreciate how you like how I've written Amethyst thus far. She's definitely a fun character to work with, and so full of potential character development!
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I'm glad you've enjoyed my melding of Guyver and MLP:FiM thus far, and hope that you continue to do so. Differentiating Hyper-Zoanoids from "standard" Zoanoids is certainly something I've been musing on, given that the "zoa-fication" process here is a little different than in the Guyver universe, but I think you'll like what I'm planning for both them and their "Lords."
And yes, referential humor and tongue-in-cheek is something of a staple of mine. I find it helps to keep proceedings from delving too far into angst and glurge, and helps maintain a balance between the more lighthearted My Little Pony and more serious Guyver. As for The Doctor, well, I'm sure he'll show up at some point . . .
Do you need to know Bio-Booster in order to understand this? I've never heard of it, does that matter before I read this?
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I'm writing this story primarily from the perspective of the MLP:Fim universe, so no, you don't have to have a working knowledge of Bio-Booster Armor Guyver to understand what's going on in the story. Everything will be explained as the story moves along, allowing newcomers to ease into the crossover story elements.
Ohhhhhhhhhhhh dear... I don't know what's more frightening. The fact that a certain TGaPT now has a Guyver unit, or the fact that a certain Changeling queen has one as well.
Good on you buddy, congrats on the new chapter releases! As usual, your writing remains a delight to read through. Now I'm off to read the second of your two newly released chapters.
Oh, and for the record, I can totally buy that Derpy would and could do that. Also, that opening scene was a regular Winningverse reunion, wasn't it! The awkward levels would've been through the roof if Eepy had been there to boot. Also, I love that you're using Raindrops's gruff, Squidward-like "I-hate-everybody" persona that I've encountered quite a bit throughout the fandom. It seems right, not to mention hilarious, that there should be at least one pony with that type of, shall we say, anti-pony persona.
*reads end of chapter* And suddenly Doctor appears! Fancy that!
Apparently you and I both have a thing for writing main characters with daddy issues... fascinating.
Also, it's nice to see that someone has a great enough knowledge of Doctor Who that they can write a Doctor Whooves character who's quite accurate to the show (something that I myself cannot claim, which is partly the reason that I'm not going to write him as a Timelord at all, and in fact go with his show-canon name of Time Turner instead, largely writing him as an original character heavily based on James Gordon). We both clearly love Derpy, the Doctor, and characters connected to them, and it's certainly always fun comparing and contrasting our ideas concerning all these characters and how they work in our respective universes. Keep up the great work friend!
4869040 Great, thanks! I'll begin reading immediately.
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Glad you're still enjoying my story, Batbrony! I noticed you had a little update of your own recently, so I'll be sure to let you my thoughts on your latest chapter of Batmare Begins sometime soon!
Are you surrrrrrrre that a certain Changeling queen has acquired a Guyver unit? Are you reeeeeeally that certain? Heh, heh, heh . . .
I thought you might like the slight Winningverse nods, given your particular fondness for that fandom. It certainly is a fun set of stories that Chengar and company have cooked up. Pity I had to make so many edits to this chapter to get the pacing right--a whole slew of Winngverse-esque gags got lost in the shuffle.
And yeah, I've always pictured Raindrops as something of a sourpuss, with a particular level of exasperation reserved for her longtime friend, Ditzy. In many ways, I guess it mirrors the Cloud Kicker/Blossomforth dynamic. Except, you know, without the sex.
Well, there was that one time at Flight School . . .
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Glad to hear it! Hope you enjoy!
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A wild Time Lord has appeared! Use Thunderbolt to stop his two hearts; It's Super Effective!!
Truth. Though I think Amethyst's issues have more to do with a fear of abandonment in general, given she was an orphan adopted by Ditzy
Now, Ditzy, on the other hoof . . . Yeah, given that she got involved with not one, but two stallions with Chronic Hero Syndrome, methinks there may be some projective identification carrying forward a bit for her. Gets even messier when you consider that one of those stallions is a nigh-immortal, alien, time traveler.
And you do the same, my friend! Thanks as always for your detailed comments and compliments, particularly on my characterization of the Doctor, given that I don't consider myself an aficionado of that fandom. I look forward to seeing your take on his more "down-to-earth," Time Turner persona in your fic when he shows up, given that he's likely going through his Gotham phase right now. .
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Yes, the Doctor will most definitely be playing a role in the story, though not right away. As for your second question, I believe the following response is the most appropriate:
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Thank you very much for your kind words and patronage of my story. I will certainly do my best to not disappoint!!
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I guess you'll just have to wait and see . . .