I wanted eternal night. Looks like I got it.
Luna sits on the moon, mentally recapping how and why she got sent there.
(Cover art done by MsLilly on deviantart)
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CutieMarkChallenged
Just someone who loves to read, write, watch ponies, and listen to music. Not much else, because ponies.
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Wow....this is a really good one. Luna is my favorite pony and reading this just makes me feel sad for her. You did a good job with the flashback and how to use her feelings to make them feel like my own using first person perspective.
Though, I noticed one mistake that you made.
I shiver went up my spine. You need to change it an a, but other than that, I loved it.
Wow... It brings a tear to my eye. I never saw Luna as such a young character but that beautiful childish innocence is just amazing. I really like what you've done with this. The ending especially with the words she used showed she really wasn't a violent pony and the last line really got me right in the feels. Very, very well done.
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*Face palm* I spent how many hours editing this? I shall fix it. Thank you!
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Thanks to you too! That's what I was going for, all three of those statements. I hope I can get a second chapter up and going, maybe add more feels to it.
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Maybe something about Celestia, maybe she looks up at the moon and regrets some of her decisions.
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I don't know. It sounds really good, and I'm grateful for the suggestion, but I was going for Luna's point of view of the event(s). Although I was just looking over it, (fixing the shivering part) and I thought "How in the world am I going to transition this?" I'll think about. Who knows what crazy things I'll come up with as soon as there's no computer around?
OMG
This. Is. The. Best. Beggining. EVAR!!! 
LOL 
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Thanks! I worked really hard on it. I forget how many months though. I hope the next one won't take as long.
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3086347 Oops! Sorry! I hate authors who take forever, and I know I'm kinda doing that now. Thanks so much for wanting to read another chapter! But in all honesty. I got caught up in my six new stories (they aren't posted because they're not ready yet) that I almost forgot about this. I usually only write when I have an emotion to express, and then that's what kind of mood the scene has. Lately I've been to exhausted to feel much of anything. (Which reminds me, I need to go do my math homework...) However, I'll try to keep in mind to start working on the next chapter soon. Anything you wanna request, as a sorry-for-taking-forever gesture? I'm trying to think of more things to do from Luna's point of view. And thanks for the comment! I need to get back into the pony-writing groove. I wrote two pages for a school assignment yesterday, so I'm happy. I usually can't write a single word if I'm under pressure. Knowing that I wrote two pages in one class made me feel better. Once again, thanks for reminding me! Sorry this is kinda long. (If only my chapters would write themselves this easily!) *Edit : One hour later * There, I just went and wrote a nice 300 words for you. Not enough for a chapter, but just enough to know that there's progress and that it's getting done. Let me know if you have any suggestions, I'd love to hear what you have to say. Well, of to math homework!
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Well it's lovely to hear such enthusiasm, it really is awesome. And I have all these ideas but I think it would be better to read your ideas and your stories. After all, this is your work and one of my favorite stories to read. xD Unless you would consider working together on something just for the hell of it.
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Oh my gosh, yes! Although talking back and forth on here boosts my rating, I'm just going to message you. And thanks for your insight about the story being mine. It's one of the things I'm conflicted about, so you've really helped me.