Just a simple writer living in the shadows.
It has been 10 years since Equestria had been at peace. 10 years since the Elements of Harmony disappeared and Luna had gone to find them, only for her to disappear as well. Filled with grief and loss, Celestia loses her mind and becomes willing to protect her subjects at any cost, even if she has to hurt them to do so. Now is the time for a new generation to rise up and stop the madness. Now begins the New Lunar Republic. And the CMC are ready to take the lead.
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Think you mean 'loses'. Also, you don't need to capitalize 'tyrant' in the middle of a sentence; it's not a pronoun.
I want to like this, I really do. However I'm noticing some things that need to be fixed before I can truly like it.
I'm going to go in order but this is a rather minor thing.
The phrasing of this sentence just seems awkward somehow.
Now this is just an error in consistency, previously it has been things like anypony, no pony, ect.
We already know that she is past curfew and we can assume that from her running she knows it. Maybe instead say whether she is running trying to get inside or trying to meet somepony.
Also in your next paragraph you start quite a few sentence with the word she, that just doesn't flow right.
This sentence just seems confusing, I'd like to ask if english is not your first language?
Just a pet peeve of mine but it is grammatically correct to spell out numbers when writing. And remember to start new paragraphs when one speaks, you're not the first person I've had to tell that to today.
The type of regular you are using here probably only pertains to unicorns. I'm sure that pegasi and earth ponies need modifications so when sixty-six percent of the population uses a modified bow the "regular" should no longer be referred to that way.
The word you are looking for is cope.
2619201 Man that's bad. I am usually a lot better at grammar but I wouldn't call myself perfect. I was wondering if you might consider perhaps becoming an editor? I could really use one.
2619180 Thanks.
Fixed.
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I wouldn't be prompt or perfect either. If I get free time I can edit small sections here and there but I have family coming in town next week for my high school graduation and just this Monday I graduated from college. I've been having a full plate of late.
Loving it. Nothing else needs to be said.
Wish i could like the Story more than just once, it so Awesome
2657770 you do not know how many times I have said those same words. You would have thought that Siver Spoon would be part of the rebellion.
This a quite an interesting story. I can't wait to find out what happens next.
I must admit, I am interested in this story. I'll be keeping track of this.
2748475 Thanks, be sure to check out the pre-sequel I will be releasing later tonight. It'll help explain a few things in later chapters.
Not trying to sound impatient, but is this story still going on?
I was wondering if someone was going to ask. Yes but it is on hiatus. I have bitten off more then I can chew. I can only work on one story at a time and right now that story is KH: Road to Twilight. I will be coming back to this story as soon as I get more free time.