This story is a sequel to Rainbow Dash's Spike
Love is a tricky subject. It isn't something that just affects one pony, or two, but everypony around them, It is something that affects everypony differently, too.
Spike and Rainbow are going to have to learn this the hard way.
How will their friends react to it the same. Will they all be happy for the new couple? Willthey try to break them apart?
Prequels:
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/100505/to-live-is-to-love
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/83194/rainbow-dashs-spike
Events from those stories have influenced this one. Some things might not make sense if you have not read these stories.
Chapters (13)
"Well, time to pop a cold one and sit back to watch this breakdown."
"Love and tolerate my arse if I do say so myself."
first
I don't think good Spike run out for the your mother with the first problem. He could go take a work and a place in first. But, if he is going to call Celestia for help can RainbowDash, it's another thing.
Mom?
What did, son?
Twilight taked my marefriend to the moon... and she is interested in my anatomy too.
Twilight?!
Eeerrr... Sorry?
This is progressing nicely; can't wait for everything to come to a head, that needs to be popped and drained of all the hurt so that it can properly heal into a semi happy ending.
how did I miss this?
There hasn't been any Mother/Son quality time, not that way you perverts, but if you would put some family moments of Princess Celestia and Spike.
You teleported away someone's girlfriend during a make out session. Anybody would be mad Twilight.
Time to sit back, relax, and watch this train wreck while eating some popcorn.
...Since when is paralyzporting someone two seconds after you see em' an okay reaction!?
I... Don't really know what to say. Other than "Read later" So I see what you're going to do with this thing.
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I'M MIGHTY PISSED!
I'm simply stunned.
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2655100 I'll provide the candy and drinks.
Can I have some popcorn?
2655482 Sure
which one do you want. Train wreck popcorn or shit hitting fan popcorn? How about awkward situation popcorn?
Thank you so much for uploading this
2655507 First Awkward situation popcorn when Spike tells his 'mother' Celestia about his relationship
with RD.
Second, Shit-hitting-the-fan popcorn when Celestia seeking retribution from Twilight. Mama bear instincts.
Third, A complete train wreck popcorn When the rest of the mane 6 argue amongst one another
over the course of everything. Then Celestia shatters buildings & eardrums alike with the Royal Canterlot
Voice.
Time to sit back and enjoy the show.
Not that I'm complaining (I fully intend to read this story and its predecessors), but how in the world did this make the feature box when Spike's Crusade did not?
The constant perspective shifts make me feel funky. It, or something else, severely compromised the impact of the last scene. I just felt... like reading off of a script. Maybe it was the lengthy internal monologuing in between the characters' dialogue and actions (RD getting zapped was WAY drawn out because if this, it should have taken two seconds). Maybe it was the utter lack of context. I will keep on reading, however.
I would just like to say excellent work mate
now i have NOT been looking for errors with grammar and wording
but i have been reading for the story
from what i read you have been doing a FANTASTIC job
hope to read more buddy
Brony On
Wait... so were all those Pinkies from the last story mirror-pool Pinkies? Because if they weren't she would have known about him going to ask out Rarity and that he and Rainbow went on a date.
Dude, this is your own storyverse, keep your own continuity.
Furthermore, Spike went over to Pinkies with the thought to ask her if he could stay and to ask for help finding Dash, seeing as he didn't know where she'd end up, as Twilight had said that she wasn't sure where it would send her last time she did it. He completely forgot about finding Dash.
Congrats in making it into the top of fimfiction popular list.
Oh, I'm gonna love this.
Really do love the way you first-person Pinkie Pie.
And shouldn't this be called Not everypony will be happy?
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Bad luck, I'd guess.
Also, I do imagine that more people read non-mature than mature.
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I'm afraid the perspective shifts will continue, though I can always work on making them more meaningful. It's always a... balancing act, making sure that they only happen when they'd mean something. Too few, too many, they're both so easy to do.
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Huh?
That's all I can cay. :| Seriously, what are you talking about with the mirror-pool Pinkies in the "previous story"? There was one Pinkie who knew that he was going to ask out Rarity. As for finding Dash, hold yer horses sonny.
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Thanks.
2656686 Anytime
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Yes it should be
2656686 Pinkie appeared twice in mirrors and talked to Spike in the last story. Pinkie appeared and talked to Dash in the last story. Pinkie knew exactly what was going on in all three of those instances.
Now she knows nothing.
See next comment quotes.
Chapter One of Rainbow Dash's Spike, right before he goes to ask Rarity out.
Chapter Three of Rainbow Dash's Spike, while Spike is in the bathroom. She then goes on to have a long conversation with Dash that convinces her to confess.
Same chapter, does the same thing.
So unless this is a mass hallucination of Pinkie being a wise sage or these are all Mirror-pool Pinkies that didn't get noticed, she knows what the fuck is going on.
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Turns out... I did a poor job explaining that second one.
*facepalm*
I really need to make it more obvious that the second/third Pinkies were more ... her mind telling her what she needed to do. Seriously, that was poor form on my part. Thanks for pointing out my HUGE mistake right there.
2656776 No problem. Still means that Pinkie shouldn't have been so happy to hear he was going to ask Rarity out. She seems like she didn't know and is only now thinking of doing a party. If she knew before, the party would already be planned and she'd just be waiting on confirmation.
Pinkie is written pretty damn well when you're in her head though. Kudos on that.
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Wish I could reason out how I screwed up that bad.
But I can't.
*facepalm*
I can only promise to explain some things better and to do at least 50% better in the future. Also, Pinkie is the hardest character for me to write.
omg, the concept seems really interesting, and ive never seen a...rainbowspkie or a spikedash?... well we shall see! favorite!
2657502 SpikeDash
I was wondering if Spike was going to write a letter to Celestia from the moment you mentioned him think of her as his mother. Hopefully Spike and Pinkie can keep Celestia from going Mama Bear on Twilight. So far I am enjoying this and I look forward the Momlestia in the next chapter.
2654758 I'm sorry...
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2656806 Hardest character for you to write? Considering that you did her thought processes perfectly you must have put a ton of effort into it. She's my favourite pony and I have zero complaints about how you did her and only praise, the only problems I had were things from the last story not matching up.
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I'll elaborate.
When I first wrote this chapter, it was bad. And by it was bad, I mean that Pinkie Pie wasn't 'fun' as my prereader told me. I stressed out the entire day, trying to figure out how it was that I was going to make a fun Pinkie Pie in such a serious setting.
Maybe I should re-write some parts of this chapter to iron out the problems that you mentioned. If I did that, though, it'd likely be Monday earliest before I was able to throw my next chapter at my pre-reader. But I get the feeling that it might be better to have a slightly delayed chapter than a story that contradicts itself.
2658811 Dude, it's your call, but my opinion would be to finish the story while you've still got the steam in you and then go back and edit all three for continuity errors, because the prequel makes some of the things in the main story not make sense.
Besides, I'm the only one who's pointed this out so far, so you only have to worry about people like me noticing it
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Alright, I'll do that.
When I go about doing that, could I get your help with it? I missed them the first time, so an extra set of eyes would be definitely appreciated.
2658832 Sure, I'll help. I'm not as anal about continuity as say, a 90's comic-book fan, but I'm sure if I look hard enough I'll find a few. Writing prequels always seems to bork continuity in subtle ways.
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Oh god, I'm George Lucas -_-
Whoa. A SpikeDash? I haven't seen one of these since Malla jong started that terrible Spike's X trend.
The image is wonderfully cute. Also, the way you wrote this, from first person; it's an interesting and harder approach, but you pulled it off pretty well. Good job, good story.
havent read a rainbowspike fanfic it was good the diffrent perspectives made it....odd but i liked it
i like the first person perspective now. and its a good story so far so... KEEP IT UP
Im glad i saw these stories and started to read them... i really like the story
Well that Pinkie Pie is a serious continuity error...Though again...it is Pinkie so who knows what actually goes on in her head...
2658844 so long as you don't reveal your universe's magic works by tiny crustaceans living in our blood streams, I think you're good.
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I started this because of Malla ...
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Thanks.
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Glad you like it. :D
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The secretary does, obviously...
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But I was going to name them Cidimorians.
I have to say I quite enjoy the perspective shifts. Reminds me a bit of the Lord of the Rings books, where different parts of the story are told in different narratives yet everything ties together quite nicely. A nice change from the usual third person perspective. With each change it keeps me glued to the edge of my seat, wondering "what will the next character internally narrate?" I will keep an eye on this story closely, as I wouldn't mind trying a story with this sort of format. Plus, it seems I rarely find a SpikeDash ship. (I wanted a clever name for this ship, all I can think of is "Spash", "Raike", and I'm sorry for this one, "Dike."
)
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I hadn't thought of that.
I partially got the idea of changing perspectives while I was reading A Game of Thrones.
2661493 Oh yes, George Martin is a brilliant author.
2661137 Yeah, I figured. No, I liked Spike's Rainbow Dash, but then he went on and shipped Spike with everything and it got really old.