• Published 12th Feb 2012
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The Stars of Darkness - D4ftP0ny



Specters from Luna's dark past return to haunt her and her friends.

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Epilogue

Dear Princess Celestia,

Because of the events of the past month, this letter will not only be my report to you about friendship, but also an update as to the state of repairs to Ponyville and Whinnyapolis.

After Dark Star vanished and you returned to Canterlot, Luna was kind enough to teleport us back to Ponyville. Everything was in a shambles, as you can guess, but when we came back everypony was already working on getting things together. Even the ponies from Whinnyapolis, who had only been in our town for a few days, were lending a hoof wherever they could. It was an inspiring sight, and our victorious return only added to the atmosphere; we held a party that night, despite the work that needed to be done, and Luna returned to celebrate with us. It was great to have your sister join us, and it was obvious to me that she needed cheering up. Pinkie Pie took that job upon herself, of course, and by the end of the night Luna was laughing and smiling. It warmed my heart to see her enjoying herself, Your Highness, and I thought you would like to know that she seemed happy, despite what had happened.

The next day we started repairs in earnest. It was a lot of hard work, but by the end of the next week, most of the damage in Ponyville had been repaired. This was great news to those of us who live here, but it did nothing to help the displaced ponies from Whinnyapolis. That was when Mayor Mare made a decision; that Ponyville would send every filly, foal, stallion and mare that it could along with the refugees back to Whinnyapolis to begin repairs, and that they would leave the next day. Of course, we all volunteered.

Rarity, Applejack and Rainbow Dash took a while to get back to normal. Applejack refused to go anywhere without Fluttershy for almost a week, until the effects of the Element of Anger completely wore off; she was a little out of sorts for that week, but thanks to Fluttershy’s quiet, polite nature, she pulled through just fine. She told us she was ready for work.

Even after our talk in the library before the last fight, Rainbow Dash was so quiet the first few days after Dark Star’s fall that I was really worried that she would never really get better. I thought for sure that Falling Star had worked fear so deeply into her mind that she would never free herself from it. She didn’t even fly for a few days! Rainbow Dash! Not flying! It felt like the world was going to end. However, thanks have to go again to Pinkie Pie, who would not leave Rainbow alone until she took a flight early in the morning (and you know how persistent Pinkie Pie can be). The love that Rainbow has for flying helped her overcome her fear, and now she’s the same old Rainbow Dash… although she really doesn’t want to talk about what happened between herself and Falling Star. I won’t press her.

Rarity is still having problems, even as I write this. Dark Star knew what he was doing when he sent Morningstar to Rarity; she fell into jealousy easier than any of the rest of us would, and she’s horrified by the things she thought and said. She’s begged us to forgive her, tried to make up for it, has done everything she can think of to make it as though the whole thing didn’t happen… but it did. We’ve forgiven her, of course, but she’s going to have to take time to forgive herself.

Anyway, we set out for Whinnyapolis the next day, and after a nice night of camping out, we made it to the ruins of the city. Everypony was pretty discouraged by the sight, but Mayor Mare (who told us that she would be coming to help, no matter who tried to stop her) helped me organize different teams for different tasks, and work began.

It didn’t take long for other ponies to show up; the entire population of Whinnyapolis came back to rebuild their home, and ponies from every town that had sheltered refugees sent some of their craftsponies to help! It was really a breathtaking sight, watching all those ponies helping each other. I still get tears thinking about it, so I apologize if the letter is splotched.

As for Wild Wings, Morninglight and Shooting Star, they stuck around to help. Morninglight and I have become friends and she’s helped me further my magical studies! Oh, the spells she knows, Princess! She’s not as powerful or as amazing as you, but it’s so nice to have a unicorn to work with who shares the same passion for learning and knowledge that I do. Together, we’ve built several houses with just our magic! Can you believe it? She’s truly repentant for what she did, but sometimes she still gets that jealous look in her eye; luckily, all I have to is give her the eyebrow arch, and she blushes and apologizes. We’re working on it, and I have high hopes for her.

Wild Wings and Shooting Star returned to Cloudsdale with Rainbow Dash for a few days, but have returned to help rebuild Whinnyapolis. They told me that they were happy to return to their ancestral home, but that they knew most of the ponies there wouldn’t believe who they were. I asked if that really mattered to them, and Wild Wings just smiled and told me that he didn’t really care if anypony figured out that they were the real Wild Wings and Shooting Star or not; they knew who they were, and they were just glad to be back.

Wild Wings apologized to Applejack so many times that I was starting to think it was the only thing he could say. He refused to leave her side, which I could tell was making poor Applejack uncomfortable. Finally, after almost all the rebuilding was done, he and Applejack took some time off to talk together, and after a few hours they returned, walking together and smiling, even though they both looked like they’d been crying. I asked Applejack what had happened, and she just smiled at me and said, “I promised I’d keep our lil’ talk a secret, sugarcube; Wild Wings said he’d talk ‘bout it when he’s ready, but for now, it’s between us.”

As for Shooting Star… well, he still doesn’t talk much- I guess he never did. Rainbow Dash told me that he’d asked for her forgiveness in Cloudsdale and she’d given it, but when they returned, the only pony he wanted to spend any time with was Pinkie Pie. They’ve been working together on everything, rarely going anywhere without the other; at first I thought they were just friends… but THEN I caught them one night, staring at each other and blushing! I guess opposites do attract! And with as much as Pinkie can talk, it’s probably a good thing Shooting Star doesn’t do much of his own. It’s hard to say exactly what will happen between them, but I wish them the best, and Pinkie knows how much we love her; I for one (and I can’t believe I’m writing this) trust her judgment completely.

I don’t know if you knew, but Luna has been helping us, as well. We’ve been working during the nights as well, and Princess Luna was spearheading that effort. Recently, Mayor Quill and Mayor Mare announced that enough of the city had been rebuilt that we could all return home. There was an amazing party, held by the ponies of Whinnyapolis. It was a time of very mixed emotions, Princess; we’d all been through so much together that it was hard to leave our new friends, but we all knew that it was the best thing for now. Towards the end of the party I wandered off- Pinkie Pie mixed her Ponyville Packsa-Punch a little stronger than she usually did, and I needed some air- and I found Luna sitting outside of the lights, staring at the stars. I started to ask her what she was doing, but I saw tears in her eyes, so I stopped; however, she knew I was there and turned to me, a sad smile on her face. I knew without asking that she was thinking about Dark Star. I smiled with her, went forward and sat next to her. Neither of us spoke; I don’t know exactly how long we sat, but we sat there through the rest of the party. Finally, after all the lights were out and all the other ponies were in bed, Luna rose. “Come with me, Twilight Sparkle,” she said. Then, without warning, she teleported us all the way back to Ponyville, right into my library!

We walked to the center of the room, and Luna’s horn glowed again. From the kitchen, a large saucer and a pitcher of water floated out; the saucer settled onto the table, and the pitcher poured its water into the basin before setting next to it.

I recognized the magic she was working, a scrying spell, but I didn’t say anything; even for your sister, it takes concentration to find what you’re looking for. Luna muttered a few words, and the water in the basin went completely still, then began to glow. I stepped up to see what was in the water, even though I had a pretty good idea what would be there.

It was a small hut, tucked away in a forest somewhere. It was probably only one room, very similar to the one our friend Zecora lives in out in the Everfree Forest. Out in front of the hut hung a sword, one that we are all very familiar with, and I knew that Dark Star must live there. I turned to Princess Luna, and her eyes were filled with tears. I couldn’t help but feel so sad for her, Princess… to have the pony you love leave, never knowing where he would go or what he would do; finally, I worked up my courage and asked a question that had been on my mind since our confrontation with the Elements of Destruction.

“Princess Luna… do you think you’ll ever see him again?”

Your sister’s tears dripped into the basin, causing the picture to waver, but her smile was hopeful. “I will live a very long life, Twilight Sparkle,” she said quietly. “I’ve seen many, many things since I was born, and I will see many more before my time here is done. I have seen triumph and defeat, happiness and loss, joy and pain… but nothing as strong as love and hate.” She turned her eyes to me, and they were so sad, Princess, that I started to cry as well. “Dark Star has so much hate inside him that it would not surprise me if he never defeats it… but I cannot help but feel… deep in my heart… that our love is stronger than his hate. Maybe, someday, he’ll come back to me.” We both looked back to the basin, and before our eyes, the image shimmered; the hut went from well kept to a shambles, run-down and abandoned, and the sword was gone; it was clear that nopony had lived there in a very long time. I couldn’t tell what the basin was showing us, the present, the future, or even a POSSIBLE future… but Luna sobbed, and her eyes were full of hope once again. “Someday…” she whispered.

These past few weeks I have learned a lot about friendship. I learned that no matter what happens or what you do, a true friend, one who knows your heart as well as (and sometimes better than) you do will never give up on you, no matter how angry or jealous you get or how fearful and withdrawn you become- your friends will be there, and even if they can’t help you through it, they’ll be there afterwards to help you pick up the pieces of what’s left. And sometimes, that’s all you have.

I also learned that friendship can’t defeat hate. Hate is blind to every wonderful, magical thing that friendship offers, and try as you might you simply can’t break hate. The only thing that can defeat hate is love, and even that doesn’t destroy hate; it simply makes it seem insignificant, and makes it easier to turn your back on it.

Only time, combined with love, can destroy hate- and luckily, time is something we ALL have plenty of.

Always your faithful student,
Twilight Sparkle

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THE END

Comments ( 41 )

wohooo happy ending tho i wonder will there be a sequel?:twilightsheepish: this story is just extremely awsome pluss there are a few loose ends i'd really like to see wraped up nicely:twilightsmile: but... thats ok if you dont.:eeyup:

Its over?
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Awesome story from beginning to end. Well done.
Though there is one thing that bothers me: How does this story only have 19 likes?! Should be at least 100.
Keep up the good work.

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Oooh Xaldon... there's plenty more where this came from. LOTS more... :raritywink:

In fact, I'll probably start posting the first sequel here in the next week or so, depending. I do have another story I'm working on, and one that I would like to post here soon. ^_^

woot!792477 i love your work bro anyway till the next story cheers o and whats your opinion on twilestia shippings?

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Well, thank you for your kind words, Scrap. ^_^ I love this story a lot, and it makes me really happy to see others enjoying it too. :D

And if you're interested in seeing more about these characters, I have plenty of other stories coming with them in it. ^_^

Hate is blind to every wonderful, magical thing that friendship offers, and try as you might you simply can’t break hate.

Wise and terrible words, Twilight Sparkle. No truer statement has been made than this, and frankly it's quite a frightening thought. But she's right. Hate is blind and deaf to both reason or friendship, and the only thing that can defeat it is, as you said, love and a lot of time. It's easy to hate, but it's so difficult to stop doing it.

Quite a wonderful story you had here! I enjoyed every word of it, and I must congratulate you on finishing it. Not a lot of authors manage to do so! I'll be sure to take a look at the sequel once it comes out. Cheers!:twilightsmile:

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Thank you, Keeper- and indeed, Twilight's words are frightening and true. This is without doubt the longest thing I've ever written, and also the one thing I'm most proud of- and I'm also proud of the parts of the sequel I've written so far. There's plenty of story left to tell, and I hope you enjoy the coming parts as much as you did Stars. :twilightsmile:

too bad we didn't get to see what happened regarding wild star's relationship with honeysuckle and thistledown.

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Actually, that's exactly what the first sequel is about. ^_^

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So you're actually working on a sequel to this story?

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I am, actually. There are going to be several sequels- I think around 8 more stories in this arc. Most of them will be much, MUCH shorter than Stars, with the possible exception of the very last story in the arc- it might be longer than the rest. ^_^

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As far as Twilestia shipping goes, I've seen it done well, and I've seen it done not-so-well. In my personal opinion it's not my prime choice for Twilight, but it certainly can work given the right circumstances. Plus, Butterscotch Sundae does that ship so well it's hard for me to not like her version.

Although if you take notice, in Stars I sorta implied that in my headcanon, Celestia is Twi's mom. >_> So there's that, too. XD

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Yeah, he's kinda in a bad way... and not necessarily the best target for a Leroy Jenkins attack. XD

*hands Inar a bigger fish* You'll need this. :twilightblush:

799756 ok so then whats your twilight shipping preference?:twilightsmile: also how long till the next story?:trixieshiftright:

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I usually don't write just for the sake of shipping- if it happens, it happens. The only story that I have done purely for the shipping is the one I'm going to post soon, and it's Rarishy for a good friend of mine.

However, if I had to pick a Twilight ship, I'm a fan of Twinkie Pie (TwilightXPinkie) and Twixie (TwilightXTrixie). ^_^

And as to the next story... well, I'm going to post my Rarishy fic here very soon, but the sequel is going to start being posted probably within the next week or so. :twilightsmile:

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I think it became an "Us against the world" mentality. She knew he loved her, but she felt betrayed by the rest of ponydom- and Dark was more than willing to help her however he could- and through it, he became her primary weapon.

Now I'm sad...:fluttercry:

You wrote it perfectly, right through the end.
Love how FallingXPinkie stopped evil from winning.:pinkiesmile:

799913 woot now i know that the next week is gonna be awesome, also looking forward to that sequel. cheers for now!:twilightsmile:

873955 no actually i liked all of them i just feel sorry that they were used by the elements of chaos to wreck destruction about the elements of harmony i am tho quite pleased by the turn around. my favorit tho of the four was the one who held the element of fear.

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Yeeeeah... Dark is a bit clouded at the moment. And how the Stars react to Pinkie's party..? You'll see. X3

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THE BLASPHEMY!! THE HORROR!!! DON'T TOUCH SWEETIE'S TOYS, MORNING!! You evil mare you. :twilightangry2: :flutterrage:

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Actually, I don't have Sweetie in this at all... it would have gotten just a bit too complicated with Morning. >_> I'm a bad person for excluding her, aren't I... v_v

1285188 mine was falling stare as i stated before.

cheers:twilightsmile:

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Shooting Star/ Falling Star seems to be a heavy favorite in this story- what makes you guys like him so much? I'm just curious! :3

1295133 falling star because he actually makes sense and i like him because he was the first to break with the elements of darkness and their mission. also i like him because he was able to show up dash and become pinkies coltfriend i think.

anyway cheers.:twilightsmile:

which of the stars did you like the most?

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Shooter had the most growth in "Stars" of all of the Generals, I think- at the very least, the most obvious changes. I'm really glad that everyone likes him so much; I honestly wasn't sure about how people would respond to his relationship with Pinkie Pie, but I'm glad that everyone likes it so much!

To answer your question, Xaldon; I guess I really don't have a favorite. The three- Morning, Shooter and Wild- started out as throw-away characters: baddies to be developed slightly and then thrown away after "Stars". However, as I wrote the story... they developed in ways that I'd never imagined they would, and they each became so amazing that I couldn't help but write more with them! So it would be incredibly hard to choose one over the others!

However, I will admit that Dark has a special place in my heart- I've spent a lot of time developing his story, his character evolution, everything about him... and I can't help but favor him just a bit. X3

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I'm glad you liked the story, Morfonious! And I promise that Dark's story will continue, though slowly. XD Dark's story is going to be told in 3 smaller increments, all under the main title "The Chronicles of Dark Star". Think of them like Indiana Jones style stories, full of adventure and action, with lots of Dark Star development! I hope you'll stick around for them. :3

Just finished reading this, and I enjoyed it very much. I thought you had a bit of a rough start, but your concept kept me intrigued and you quickly recovered. More people need to read this.

Only one thing about it I didn't like was in the begining, when you introduced Pinkie, I felt that you made her too silly, and incapable of acting seriously. However, like I said, you recovered quickly and in later chapters where her actions mattered you portrayed her, in my opinion, perfectly.

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Thank you very much for the read, ProfCharles- I'm glad you enjoyed it! I really love this story, and I'm always glad to get more readers, especially ones willing to tell me what they thought!

I've noticed that the beginning was pretty rough, as you pointed out, but I'm not sure if I should go back and rewrite it or just leave it- I DID rewrite chapter 1 (it was terrible before >_<), but I'm conflicted about the rest. Does it bear thinking about?

As for Pinkie, I can definitely see why you would say that, and if I rewrite the chapters, I might tone her down a bit- but I'm glad that you think I portrayed her well in the end; that's where she really matters most! ^_^ Again, thank you very much for reading and replying!

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Personaly, I don't think you should rewrite them, as they are fine as they are. The story quickly grows on you, and its nice to see an author improve over the course of a story. But ultimately it's your choice if you want to rewrite– do you want to go through the effort to achive a smother beginning? Would any rewrites cause continuity problems in later chapters?

And it was my pleasure to read.

Well, that was an adventure.

I have to hand it to you. I have seen most of this done so horribly so many times, but you not only made it work, you made it work incredibly well. I loved what you did with the Elemens of Destruction, and I especially loved your characters. I wasn't expecting them to be as well-developed as they were, nor was I expecting to get to know them so intimately. I was surprised at how well they interacted with cast characters, and while it wasn't perfect, it was really, really good.

In short, these 137,000 words were well-worth reading, and I wish you the best of luck in the future.

~Scribblestick, TWE's notoriously friendly and pleasantly surprised moderator

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Thank you very much, ScribbleStick! I really put a lot of time and love into this story, and I'm glad to hear that you enjoyed it. I'm also very grateful for the compliments on my OCs- they developed far beyond what I'd originally intended, but I won't complain! XD

Thank you again, sir, for your read and your kind words. If you'd like to see more of them, I've started publishing the sequels to this, and have plenty of them planned. ^_^

~D4ft

That was quite a good story, the characters of the 3 generals were also good and had interesting interactions with the mane6 + OCs. The weakest link for me though was Dark Star, I found him rather boring, he got better at the end but was still the least interesting of all the characters.

I think that is because his motivation doesn't make any sense for most of the story, it probably would have helped if he had only known and thus fallen for Luna when she was already being somewhat controlled by Nightmare Moon, that way her normal behavior would seem off to him and make more sense for him to think she was being controlled or make his hatred of Celestia more of his motivation then loving Luna. As it stands now he starts off pretty much being offered everything he wants and just refuses to take it, its like someone being offered a million dollars but instead decides they would rather rob a bank and run from the cops to get it. I guess it could happen but it still doesn't make any sense. He kind of makes the start of the story a slog since he gives the impression of a villiansue type character who isn't happy getting everything he wants right at the start.

You also might want to take out the bit about Celestia being willing to sacrifice herself, I know why you did it since you wanted to show that Celestia would do anything to prevent bloodshed of her ponies but it comes off as short sighted since her ponies rely on her for more than just raising the sun.

Lastly, you also seemed to kind of forget about Morningstar and Rarity, they have some interesting interactions though the story but after Twilight offers Morningstar friendship, there is only one more time where she has any interaction with Rarity and then they aren't really mentioned in the same paragraph anymore.

I know it seems like I had allot of complaints but I did like the story, weak parts just tend to stand out to me and I feel compelled to comment on them.

:ajsmug: This looked to be an amazing fanfic and i was right! i fell completely into the story and read it in one sitting. and then quickly read of thistle and honey! it is so great, and i can't wait for more stories to come! :pinkiehappy: :rainbowkiss: I wish Luna and Dark Star could have just been together though. :applecry: even though i respect him for trying to find who he is. I love these pony emoticons!!! :pinkiecrazy::derpyderp1::scootangel::moustache::trollestia::yay::duck::eeyup::raritystarry: Anyways, thank you for such amazing creations! If you ever want some hoof drawn fan art for your characters, i would be very excited to try for ya!! :twistnerd:

1295133 He is like me! not wanting to be alone in a crowd, that spoke so loudly to me! he is so great! he seemed to me to be the only one of the generals who was not completely consumed by his element in that he made have been afraid, but he from the beginning cared about others. at least, that is how i saw him. but then, i found this story by reading the one about him and pinkie on the stars of darkness tumblr first... but i love it!!!!!!!:pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy:

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Sorry it's taken me so long to reply to this, Spice of Life! Things have been hectic around here. XD You left me a good, long comment so I'll try to give you a good, long reply!

Hokay, first off, about Dark. While his initial motivation may on the outside seem, as you put it, "villainsue"-ish, I tried my best to show otherwise throughout the rest of the story; for the sake of this comment, I'll try and break it down as quickly as I can here. XD He fell in love with Luna when she was still "old Luna", before Nightmare Moon, and his devotion to her blinded him to her descent into darkness. Then, he comes back a thousand years later to find her "normal" again, having been restored by the Elements of Harmony, but Dark Star hasn't had such a transformation. He is exactly as he was a thousand years ago, and so blind in his devotion to the Luna he knew that he couldn't see the truth. The story is really about him overcoming his blind emotions and seeing again, though it's kinda a sub-plot. XD

The part about Tia sacrificing herself wasn't just to show that she'd do anything to save her subjects from bloodshed- it was also to show her faith in Luna, her faith that Luna could do a good job ruling even if Celestia wasn't around anymore. Which I think she could! ^_^

Aaaah, Morning and Rarity. Believe me, I haven't forgotten about them- there just wasn't a whole lot of space in the story to touch back on their friendship before it ended. However, if you want to see more of them, I plan on there being a lot of interaction between them in the story devoted to Morninglight that is to come a few stories down the way, a story called "Morning Glory".

Thank you very much for reading, Spice! And thank you for the comment; I really do like getting feedback, positive or negative- I can't improve if I don't have weaknesses pointed out every now and again! I hope you'll continue to follow the adventures of these characters with the sequels to SoD. :twilightsmile:

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I'm glad you found Stars here! :D It makes the Tumblr seem worth-while, even if nopony ever asks me questions there. XD I'm also glad that you liked OTH- it was my first attempt at a really romantic story, and I'd like to think I did okay! ^_^ Have you read "Chronicles of Dark Star" yet? I'm almost done with the first part! :D

And if you ever feel inclined to draw any of the Generals or anything from Stars, feel free to submit it to the Tumblr! :raritystarry:

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Shooter really IS the character most people relate to. I dunno if it's because he overcomes his fear in the end... or simply because he ends up with Pinkie Pie. XD Lucky stallion! :raritywink:

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I suppose, it still seems like it would fit a bit better if he ended up falling for Luna when she was starting to go or had already gone a bit Nightmare Moon. That way seeing her all caring and such would seem odd to him and even with everything offered to him he would assume that Celestia was controlling Luna or that she wasn't herself now.

Seems like an awfully drastic thing to do just to show she trusts her sister. I don't know, it just seems really short sighted to me still. If I remember right Darkstar is still under the assumption that Celestia is pulling something with Luna at that point so if Celestia died right there and Luna didn't change, then Darkstar would probably keep being a threat. Keep in mind I read this story like 4 months ago so my memory of it is vague at best right now. But I hate the whole self sacrifice thing of a character like that, it puts me in mind of a cop show where a criminal has a hostage and tells the cops the drop their guns and they do, when that happens that means the only one armed is the criminal and suddenly he has all the power.

I suppose I should check out some of the extended stories you wrote based on this universe, I think the reason I didn't is because Darkstar bugs me, since as I said before, his motivation is still weird to me.

Wait so the generals lived? But they died, then had their life force stolen, then are reverted back to their original forms? That's confusing.

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They didn't die, but they came pretty dang close. Falling Star broke the draining effect before it was able to kill them, but their life force was weak enough that they basically went into what a computer would call "emergency shut down mode". They needed rest mostly, and a little magical healing didn't go amiss.

I'm sorry if that was confusing!

Just here to say that this story is AMAZING! I loved it! On to the sequel!
(Way too many exclamation marks in this comment)

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Thank you Lupus! :D I'm glad you liked it- this is still my favorite of all the pony stories I've written, and I love seeing other people still reading it! Thank you again for reading, and I really hope you enjoy the sequels! :heart:

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