The story has been updated to a mature rating due to gore.

In the first line it says "a grown escapes her lips" Should it be groan? I am just guessing. Also the story is amazing, I was hoping for a really good Dark souls cross-over.

2668375 I see no problem with that, and you make describing the ruined Burg seem easy.

2668495Fixed

2668505thx

MOAR!

Pretty good!
Noticed this mess up though

Another sain Human.

Sain should be sane...

Very Good!

I expect some sexy Tarkus in the future.

I am in your dept M'lady.

And welcome to the cosmetics department.

Should be debt.

Well shoot, that sure was nice, Twilight can barely absorb the damage from a beginner hollow and already she's breathing heavily... this shall be quite difficult, especially seeing as how she isn't undead, only
her companionship with Aston and the estus will keep her alive.

A CLIFF HANGER!

More editing from your local rock formation:

“This... Equestria, where is this land? I’ve shan’t heard of this land, nor have I seen a being such as yourself.”

'Shan't' is used incorrectly here. It's 'shall not'. Here, he's saying he won't hear of it in the future, which makes no sense.

Another sain Human.

I think you meant 'sane'.

nor do I hold a murmur of patience for a lier

And 'liar' here.

Considering his reaction to it, I wonder if Twilight will ever use her magic that way on anyone else?

hmmmmm.................................... you have my attention.

Can't wait to see more, liking this one.

What is up with the homophones? Was this originally penned down with a voice to text program? "Sain?" instead of "Sane?" Grown" in place of "Groan?"

“You've better explain what just happened.”

Jesus, what a note to end the chapter on.

I'm totally digging the premise and the execution. I think it's cool how I can exactly picture where they are from the descriptions. But the mispellings, weird grammar and homophones are really pulling me out of it. Seriously, it would only take you a cursory glance to find the major offenders and fix them, and thereby keep your readers from getting ejected from the story.