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The idea for this story is rather interesting. Maybe make her "recovery" slow so that each character tries to interact with the witch. Her sobbing is a big part of the character so include lots of scenes with that. Hope to see more of your story soon.
A lot of grammar issues....in the description no less. Sets of warning alarms that does.
The premise has my attention, though.
grammar issues and typos. i would advise getting a pre-reader to help you with those.
also try a bit more spacing between paragraphs, it'll make it easier to read.
Don't forget she would most likely suffer from severe delusions of insanity and most likely never be a truly normal person. I'd say she should have like schizophrenia when she's cured, voices of her witch side, always prompting her to kill.
Just some ideas.
so the princesses know whats happening in that world and there trying to help by making a cure to release in the zombie world to end the zombie threat?
I buy it.
Oh now this premise I can get behind... please don't fuck it up.
Idea is great, grammar needs work. Recovery should be slow, as Ketvirtas said. What Ufiix suggested would be great, as well. Take your time, don't rush. This is a really good idea.
Take time on this but please don't take weeks to do it.
I'm interested to see where this goes, heck, just the premise will have me watching this. I do hope you take a little more time with your grammar as others have said, maybe go to the beta forums and ask around?
Good luck.
I like the look of this even though there are a lot a grammar issues, I'll track
Good idea, terrible grammar/spelling. How did this make it into the top 3 popular stories? Ah well, I'll follow, see where this goes. Please clean up spelling and grammar. And do not disappoint.
Thanks for the advice, I'll have the next chapter by tomorow.
Also, good point about the recovery, I have an idea about that so I'll add it to the next chapter.
nice stargate reference
Better grammar!
lets see; Very very nice premise, pretty good execution, not bad grammar, Stargate references. The only problem I have with this fic is there is not enough of it.
Well, this is still drawing me in that's for sure. I believe its going to be quite a deep delve into Witch's emotions once the cure begins.... not going to be easy to reconcile cannibalism.
It's official, I hate spell check
Various grammar errors and remember to separate character dialogue and action
Not bad but could use work and dat reference 
Good chapter.
GOW reference.
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And the fact that it's spelt "cries" maybe?
This story is good overall but it does seem rushed, after reading the other two chapters I wouldn't expect her to stop the virus' effects by the third chapter.
I was also expecting the Mane Six to have a more important role rather than have her free herself.
(This was a pain in the flank to write on my cellphone.)
I will be honest. I love this story :D. But your spelling is horrific lol. So plz try to get it proof red before you post it
Very nice chapter :3
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I facepalmed when I saw the name.
OK the problem with the prologue has now been sorted out now and I will get TheGrooveDuke to read through and edit before up loading.
also there will be explanations in the next chapter.
Slow down please... There were like.. 20 spelling/grammar mistakes in chapter 3.. and more in 2.
At least proof read your story before posing it.
In left 4 dead witches were always an enigma to me.
I'm going to take longer to upload the next few chapters, I'm working on correcting the grammar issues but they should be up over the next week
Sorry it's taking so long, i'm still waiting for chapter 3 to be grammar checked.
Also I am looking for additional readers and grammar checkers, if your intrested please contact me.
2750065 I did some research and I read that the Witch mutation is triggered by mental trauma such as for example zombies invading a brides wedding or losing some one you've known for a long time.
2750345 well she just lost three good friends a few days before and that is still fresh in her mind.
So mix that with just getting brutaly attacked and you've got mental trauma
2750597 Indeed
Didn't see that coming
The bomb just got dropped.
I wonder what happened to the SG teams my guess is there probably on Atlantis, or one of the ships / alpha sites.
I need 3 names for 3 BC-304's that will be in this story, Leave a comment with your suggestion.
hmmmm... wonder how this will turn out
i liked the idea of a witch going to equestria and all that but... not only did it feel very rushed but stargate and equestria dosent really mix that well... oh well i gave it a shot and it dident work out.
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RED VS BLUE REFERENCE!!! AHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!...................................................Pinkie approved.
I'm really liking this story!
"I Think it sucks." SMACK! "Ow!"
Yes I have to admit this wasn't my best work, but it was abit rushed as the orignal was currupted and I had to spend a good portion of the night salvaging whwt I could to get tjis one out.
I promis the next chapters will be better.
Sorry the next chapters taking so long, I'm trying togetthis done throught a number of things going on in my life, but the next chapter willbe out soon so bear with me
I think you were trying for grenade.
good chapter over all.
Thanks, I keep forgeting how thats spelled>>3215371
3218445 tis ok Next time you're unsure of the word think of it phonetically... Sounds like it's written, spell it out.
other than that keep up you're writing. will we get a chance to meet O'neil, carter, jackson, and teil'c at some point later on?
Mabe.... could even see some of the atlantis team too.3218448
Yes, I need to get ahold of my editor, and to answer the thief, it started ou as just a left 4 dead fic and sort of became a fusuion of the two
awesome way to go
hehe for a second i thought you were using dead space creatures