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This is a story all about how Diamond Tiara first met Scootaloo.


THis story was written for the Lunaverse, for the May Monthly Writing event (This month's theme: First Meetings)

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HA! I like the ending there. Not that DT was every very subtle about her feelings...

Ok, now I need another when DT realises her true feelings for Scoots, NOW!

awwww, DT :heart: Scootaloo is my new OTP. They are just so cute.

Just kiss her, you fool!

Great ending. :pinkiehappy: And the meeting went off just as I suspected it would. :flutterrage::fluttershbad::derpytongue2:

LOL! ok, that was great. That was just great.

Aside from that not sure if Diamond Tiara continued to 'hate' her sundae while Scootaloo ate hers or what but that was unintentionally funny typo (if it was intentional that was adorable!) and I can only hope future bits are as this entertaining. :pinkiecrazy::heart::heart:

Excellent. Scootaloo is the one filly that Diamond Tiara can't control, so of course she wants her!

Nice appearances from the parents, too! I like that Nocturne was the one to break them up when they started fighting again.

And don't insult Diamond Tiara's mane! I really like her mane!

When I read Scootalong to the Cheer, I couldn't help but think that Diamond's infatuation was a bit underdeveloped. Given that it wasn't the main focus of the story, I figured you'd use a different story to establish the origin and reason behind the one-sided relationship. After reading this, it would seem that the origin part has been satisfied, but the reason still lacks clarity. Diamond believes Scootaloo to be the most amazing pegasus ever, but we have no idea why aside from inferring from the subtext. I'd say the biggest aspect that needs elaboration would be the reason Diamond changed her mind between the initial meeting and the present. As of now, it seems inconsistent, but I can see it being easily cleared up with a detailed sentence or two.

I can't say I'm familiar with the old "scary baby costume" gimmick in haunted houses. I guess the Lunaverse has some weird forms of entertainment like that. Nice little snack cake you have here. Be wary about using those parentheses. In formal writing, they can throw off a reader's immersion.

Scootiara is up there with Diasnails in the list of best DT ships.

Servants know enough secrets to burry their employers, so two weeks off isn't a big deal by comparison.

2610150 I would assume the reason would be that Scootaloo defied Diamond. She's been the only one thus far to do so, which is what she wanted. She's anti-social, bullying because of her very poor pony skills (despite not really wanting to. A much better explanation than Maneverse Diamond. It also shows she wouldn't act like the the DT in Flight to the Finish) Now, if you had control of everything....what would you want? I figure its the fascination of this pony being uncontrolled that started it THEN the crush. I guess thats the reason this portrays.

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If I had control of everything, my first plan of action would be to ensure that the economy is stable.

4292239 Well, its not that control. She is a kid-I'm sure her father does have that though. She's been brought up like she does have everything.

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