I've always been interested on Pinkamena's motives on why she murders. Is it insanity or is it something more?
(Contains Anthropomorphizations & implied Hebephilia)
(Please note that this is my first attempt at a rhyme poem. Any criticisms will be much appreciated.)
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Hmm... interesting. I like the poem idea, and only one mistake really stood out to me.
should be sow.
One thing, though, is that you said that this is your interpretation of Cupcakes. I dunno, I think that it'd be more interesting if you took from the source material. Sgt. Sprinkles give plenty of room for interpretation with lines like "Your number came up and, well, I don't make the rules." Stuff like that is ripe for analysis. Also, in the story Apple Bloom is her apprentice, not Scootaloo, so that doesn't make as much sense. I guess my point is, it's hard to call it an interpretation when the only the bare basics bear any resemblance to the original story.
I dunno, that's just my take. I did love the poem aspect, though. Very creative.
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Thank you! It was half-mindedly done with 20 hours awake.
It started out as an homage to Cupcakes but, as I wrote, it became more and more an homage to grimdark's origins. Hence why it's an amalgamation of Sgt. Sprinkles and CrookedTrees. Also, I read Cupcakes nearly a year ago and vaguely remember the details.
I've also found how CrookedTree's paired Pinkie with Scootaloo interesting. Their relationship in the comic was on a romantic level but never explicitly said it; mostly implied.
I've also tried to logically (in my sick mind) work out the idea why one would own and operate a rock farm. It had to be a cover for something. What better way to cover something up when you're the Equestrian equivalent of Amish?
THIS SHIT IS GOOD!
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Thanks! I tried and I thought I failed but the response has been pretty positive so far. c:
Why in the name of our great lady genuviel did i not find this before, i like, love, adore, this brilliant piece of work. Bravo my friend. bravo!
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Why thank you! I'm getting rather taken aback at all of the positivity I'm receiving over this. Glad you like it!
Lame
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So saith the member of this site who has absolutely no stories to their name nor followers or people who themselves follow. To give me such a asinine critique when you have no discernible talent or social skills is the absolute embodiment of being lame.
So a word of constructive criticism? Watch your fucking tongue next time, before you pass any judgement on those who do more than you boy.
Get off my page and the internet before you get hurt with such zingers as 'lame'.
That was AMAZING! I love every aspect of this poem. It was so beautifully written and had the perfect dark feel to it. Good job. I must like and fave NOW!
Is it bad that I thought this was sorta funny?........heh heh
Fucking nice, I have no other words!
Extremely well written, well done rhymes, a perfect horror feel, perfection lives on this page
Her body must be bled. (Word this differently, it's currently incorrect. Ex: Nothing compares to a body that's bled)
What we had just seen was like sex and we are in afterglow. (CHANGE THIS!!!!)
She's so cute. She gave a meep! (Find a better word for the rhyme.)
Inkie, Blinkie and Scootaloo (What about Maud? Also those are not their current names, they're Limestone and Marble [Pie])
But then it will be far too late for any kind of reason. Execution for the crime of high treason. (I don't think that's treason/the best word to use even if it is treason.)
Other than that, nice work.