Lightning Blitz (Rainbow Dash's dad) had an affair with FireLilly (Spitfire's mom) three months after Rainbow Dash's birth. FireLilly got pregnant with a little colt named FriendlyFire. FriendlyFire finds out that Rainbow Dash and FriendlyFire are family. He goes to PonyVille to reveille Rainbow Dash's long-lost brother.
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Cool story
Thanks!
Love it
How does this have likes? This is the worst story I've ever read.
Allow me to explain.
First, You're grammer is horrible. Fix it.
Second, this is the dumbest idea ever. This is like a parody of bad ideas.
Third, whoever drew this is a horrible drawer.
Fourth, the OC looks stupid.
Fifth, this story SSSSSSUUUUCCCCCCKKKKSSSS!
There, a review.
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No. Review's are long and detailed, helping the author along the way.
I don't even know what yours was.
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A half assed review?
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No, it came across more like the pathetic mewling of a beaten puppy. A review, a real review, goes into more depth. This is a step above your usual "THIS STORY SUCKS" but if you want to be taken seriously, you need to put effort into your work.
How ironic. You go for a grammar flame and misspell words in the process. But the grammar isn't horrible. Yes, there are grammar errors and spelling mistakes, but it actually reads more like a story written by somebody that has no idea how to write.
It's no worse than what you've written. But then the author of this piece isn't a little whiner either. Seriously, that in itself gets you a lot of thumbs down.
I mean a "dumb" idea is having your OC own a tardis and be the element of time. Now that is stupid.
Irrelevant to the story at hand. You can cry foul over a Pony Creator image. Something drawn by hand is usually rated a little higher. Also you shouldn't talk as your image for the Element of Time is pathetic.
So do you, but we never say that now do we? You got anything else to say about the actual story? Being a critic is pointing out the flaws. This isn't a flaw.
And there you go. Your catch all phrase for anything you don't like or that has been received in a better way than any of your work.
Here's a clue for you: you're the reason your stories get such bad press. It's your attitude that results in half the down votes. The other half are because you can't write.
So what predictable response will this message get of you?
Thank-you Umachan. I never had anyone stand up for me. It means a lot.
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A dumb idea is when a random OC has sex with everything.
The cover art for the Element is really well drawn compared to this.
I'm not called "FanficCritic." So that argument is invalid.
That is why I'm going to put in my story to not thumb down the story just because it was written by me.
HA! You haven't seen my best work.
Go fuck yourself.
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Oh, please. He wasn't standing up for you and your stupid self insert Gary Stu OC fanfic. He's just being a dick to me.
"and your stupid self insert Gary Stu OC fanfic." What the? What is that? I re-read that over and over again. What does that mean? Help me out here. I really have no idea
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I could draw better art than what The Element of Time has in a car. And have. In pen none the less.
Really? A pen? Well that's very impressive. Did you trace anything, or did you free hand it? I free handed my first drawing then traced over it with another piece of paper and a sharpie
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Alright. Draw something. I await your response.
TheaterCritic, your back! Now about that " and your stupid self insert Gary Stu OC fanfic." I still don't know what that means.
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Here's two images Ive previously drawn in the car.
fc07.deviantart.net/fs70/i/2013/003/c/c/cadence_by_kazlene-d5q9p6f.jpg
th02.deviantart.net/fs70/PRE/i/2013/005/f/e/fluttershy__by_kazlene-d5qk5ap.jpg
And here's just a quick doodle I did in a friend's yearbook
fc01.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2013/190/0/d/image_by_kazlene-d6cr56x.jpg
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Ok since theatrecritic doesn't seem to be answering I'll tell you what he means. An OC obviously is an original character, a self insert is when you insert a character that is you into a story. A Gary Stu is a male Mary Sue, a character that is too perfect and flawless. These characters upset any flow the story might have had and Theatercritic here has one that has gotten torn apart so many times, the bitterness in the young one's heart has turned to hatred. He just likes to lash out at others so as to make his story seem better.
Well thank-you Normal, for answering. And those are some good drawings in my opinion
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You're welcome. And danke.
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So where in this story does that happen if that's the definition of a "dumb" idea? Or can this simply be sour grapes because there's a story out there that you hate that is getting more thumbs up than anything you've ever written? Yeah, I'm thinking it's the latter too.
Did your Mommy tell you that as well? Kinda like how she says you're a good singer, really handsome and strong and all that kind of stuff? I hate to be the one to tell you, but she's only telling you this to bolster your ego. It's something that most Mothers do.
Doesn't matter, you're not much of a critic when it comes to movies either. Saying "Oh my god this was the greatest movie ever" is not being a critic. Being a critic means actually taking the time to formulate something and not just saying "this sucks". And if you're not a "fanfic critic" then why bother with saying, "There, a review." after you wrote that shite? Could it be that you actually thought you gave valid and cogent points?
So are you. But what does that have to do with what I said?
Brilliant! Nobody has ever thought of that before... no wait, they have and it usually results in a downvote storm.
I would hope not. If what I've seen up until now actually had any effort put into it, then you're truly a bad writer and there's no hope for you.
Just about what I expected.
C'mon bitch, you've been gone for a couple days, crying into your chocolate milk, whinging about how everybody is so mean to you and this is what you come back with? You're really not bringing your "A" game to this now are you?
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Don't thank me, I thumbed this down due to problems in the way it's presented and the rather childish writing style. No, this was entirely directed at Lil Bitch who you might know as "TheaterCritic".
But just to piss him off, I'm going to thumb this up. But you really need to work on your writing.
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Fuck you Theater Critic, your Oc is fucking ten times worse then his drawing. I can never draw what he drew, it is good compared to yours. Yours looks like pooped pooped on pooped So shut up and stop being a hypocrite.
So, everypony likes a horrible story, dislikes my comments, and likes everyponies comments that have to do with bashing me and my reviews.
Fuck you all.
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Sounds about right. And it seems you never even acknowledged the drawings.
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They are crap.
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Ah, the words of the young.
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May I ask what you'd be able to draw free hand in the car, with pen?
This is really good
I'm hoping for chapter 6
*claps really exitedly*BLOODY good job!