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elmagnifico


Chronic reader, author errant, general purpose nuisance, perpetrator of shameless popery, pernciously prodigious punster, and a bit of a fool.

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A bipedal canine of similar structure to the creatures in "A Dog and Pony Show" finds herself lost in a swamp.

Naturally, she can't remember a thing about how she got there. Just that her name is Winona, the hat she found belongs to a good friend, and she should probably return it.

The world being what it is, her journey will not be that simple.

Slightly spoilery, but this story grew from the desire to have someone refer to Celestia as "Frith". Sometimes I love where the spiders in my head take me.

Story Quality brought to you by Amneiger the Editor and Chautauquan the Prereader.

Due credit also to Klondike, the scholar and gentleperson who let me use their art for the cover.

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 33 )

i'm fave your story

2685431 Good job mate!

WHen I read through this it seemed implied that she was a human. But then you described her like a collie. WHAT THE HECK IS SHE?!

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She's a diamond dog. Sorta. Look, here's an image of what I'm thinking of. I would have used it as cover art, but I didn't want to bother the artist for permission.

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So human-ish features, but still a collie.

I guess the answer is "Both."

2690428 Ohhhhhh! Srsly, make that the cover image. the story will make MUCH more sense!

Nox

You really need to swap pics, the DD Winona pic is much more fitting.

You've got some talent. This has an interesting premise, and the writing so far is smooth and immersive; conveying sensations through writing is one of the trickier aspects of writing, and yet you manage to do so in a natural, organic way. I look forward to seeing where you go with this.

Good chapter, mate :pinkiehappy:

I really like the vibe of this story.

I'm really looking forward to seeing Winonas' adventures and eventual reunion with Applejack.

Also, a cookie to whoever can figure out who that tribe of griffons I introduced are based off.

I'm going to make a wild guess here and say that the answer to this is some kind of elves.

3777909

Bzzzt. Incorrect. Sorry, no cookie for you.

3777909 i know the griffins are based on the warden from the "martin the warrior" redwall books the "i am the law" made it clear. do they eat law breakers too?

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Let's just say there's a reason Solitaire steps so lightly around them. Also cookie for you.

Well you certainly seem to have introduced some interesting characters, ad the story seems to be moving along nicely, overall very good chapter. :pinkiehappy:

Interesting concept. I'll see where this is going. :raritywink:

Great job so far! I love the use of non-pony OCs. Can't wait to see where this goes!

Comment posted by Myrandall deleted Oct 6th, 2014

*Throws possibly epic reveal out the window in the first chapter*

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That it does. Now I just need a secure place to hide its phylactery...

5104807

Care to clarify? Is it the name?

"Focusing as she was on trying to keep her catch up, she very nearly trampled Solitaire."

Might want to fix this sentence.

5113676

Will do, many thanks!

Is this dead?

6156774

There's dead and then there's dead. I have about half a chapter's worth of work done, but stoking the muse is slow going, plus rousing the editors from their dark sleep, and actually getting the story pointed in the general direction of the endpoint I have planned. I don't forsee an update for a while, but I do intend to finish.

I'm liking this story so far. Love the characters and the originality of the story. (Don't see many Winona stories after all.) From just reading the story and looking at the grammar/dialogue, I can tell you've put some effort into this story. If you ever need a reader or part-time editor, I would be happy to help.

Have a strange thought that the twins are like Ulf and Wulf from the brother-band series.

Please continue.

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