Sequel to Sky Dreamer's Journal. Read it first or you'll be left guessing.
After joining House Whitegold months ago, Sky Dreamer's life took unexpected turns. On one side, he adopted a filly as his daughter, has enjoyed a life of luxury and is now working for Whitegold as a Nighthoof. However, such luxuries are not important to him, his friends are. Unfortunately, the war makes it really difficult for him to keep his friendships intact and a secret, especially from the manipulative leaders of Whitegold.
This story takes place in the Equestria Divided universe created by PoorYorick
Chapters (15)
YES
A sequel!
Victory!
Show don't tell and give your characters more depth then just good guys and bad guys . Sky Dreamer is really a bland character which didn't matter so much in the last story because the focus was on the people he met rather than him. You keep spelling out what tones of speech and similar things mean instead of just showing them and letting the reader infer, even when it's quite obvious what they mean.
2604838 Thanks for the tip. I'll look into that
Well here's hoping he's not captured or its the death penalty.