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ColdGoldLazarus


LDLUYAB - Still awaiting the Second Coming of SoGreatAndPowerful - Excess cynicism is overrated


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Well into the modern age, Researchers, Historians, and Crackpot Theorists alike have remained baffled by the mysterious circumstances surrounding the disappearance of Clover The Clever. Indeed, the only one who could know what happened to that bright unicorn is Clover herself.

(More bittersweet than sad, but close enough)

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That was... Actually rather interesting. So how come this was "rattling around in [your] mind", as you put it?

2551234 Thanks!

Well, the original version (somewhat inspired by this song) focused on Twilight exploring an ancient ruin and pondering the passage of time, but nothing really happened to justify any of it, so I never wrote it down.
But then this just sort of spewed out; different (And in my opinion, better) context for the same existential nonsense. :applejackunsure:

Is there anything you think I could stand to fix up?

2552332 Nah, it's pretty good. Can't think of much, especially this much time afterwards. But I just don't think there was really anything that bothered me.

intriguing, very well written :raritystarry: when I read the blurb I thought perhaps this would be similar to my own current project, but it turns out they diverged at the actual outcome of Clover... great story :pinkiehappy:

Ah, good to see this finally popping up.

2557446 Thank you!

it turns out they diverged at the actual outcome of Clover

Ooh! What's the story called?

2558075its not up yet, I haven't made much head way, and I wont be able to until after my exams, but look out for The World Rests On Your Shoulders, I've been planning it for months

2558063 Indeed! :twilightsmile: (I feel so accomplished, to have actually done something!)

2558103 Ah, okay. Shall do! (I've been planning some of my stories for just over a year now. :derpytongue2:)

so im guessing the doctor had something to do with here disaperance? (im only guessing because of the hourglass cutiemarks.)

2559845 Nope. No crossover in the tags, and the time travel was under her own power. The hourglass cutie marks are (in my headcanon) for ponies that can do timey-wimey stuff (how it works for the earth ponies and pegasi, I'm not exactly sure) and Clover planted the cultural roots to get them to do the whole record-keeping thingy. Or something.

2559897 so clover the clever is twilight?

2559845 Not at all. In fact, quite the opposite. Clover the Clever created the Doctor and all the other ponies with hourglasses in order to record all parts of history.

You labeled this a sad story. While I can see the sadness in it, I don't think it is. Clover was willing to altar the very nature of time itself solely so that she could record as much of history as possible so that no one would be truly forgotten. Maybe it's sad, but by no means is it tragic or something to be depressed about. Clover found where she truly belonged in the world and her dream was that no one would ever truly be forgotten.

2559933 Indeed!

I suppose that the ending makes it more bittersweet/hopeful, but the stuff leading up to that was pretty sad, thus the tag. fc02.deviantart.net/fs71/f/2011/090/0/3/shrugpony_twilight_sparkle_by_moongazeponies-d3cvkds.png

An interesting little story. Nice

What the hell just was this, and why don't I feel my usual violent nihilism anymore?

Im trying to understand. :applejackconfused:

Did Clover went to the future or was her disappearance still a mystery?
Also, what did the jester do to be remembered for more than a thousand years?
And why did Clover felt unfair that she got a statue while everyone else didn't?

So many questions, so little time. :derpytongue2:

I liked it. I...

I am happy.

Indeed, this was a good read.

2560688 2561917 2562074 I'm glad you liked it! :twilightsmile:

2560827 I'm not sure, on both counts. *shrug*

2561209 She went to the past. Her disappearance is still a mystery to everypony else.
He wasn't. That said, even if it was forgotten, he was worth remembering simply by virtue of having lived.
If you didn't understand that one, I can't explain it to you. :applejackunsure:

2562918 *Robot voice* Activate Automatic Response #28301a: I'm glad you liked it!
Transmission complete! Reward: Self-pat in the back *pat*

XD

This is a good story!

Now, that's a nice little fic there. You have my upvote!

2846929 I'm glad you liked it!

2847131 Glad you wrote it! I've always been a sucker for those kind of 'Restaurants at the End of the Universe' type d'awww stories.:twilightsheepish:

Oh man, this is an AMAZING explination for the repeating hourglass cutie mark thing, much more to my liking than 'the doctor'! :pinkiehappy: I wish I had thought of this for my own fanfic universe! :raritydespair: ANd nice use of Clover, too!

2847205 Restaurant at the End of the Universe? How so?

2982845 Well, that wasn't the original intention of the story; it just sort of happened while I was writing it, but thank you anyway. :twilightsmile:

2986242 Oh, you know. People existing on the fringes of time and space in a sort of external benevolence. Ways for authors to allow their characters life, while effectively giving them a legitimate death in the eyes of both their universe a the reader.

That was beautifully done!

3104800 Thanks; I'm glad you enjoyed it! :twilightsmile:

Nice work thanks for the story
glad you wrote it.

Good luck Best wish.

wonder what would happen when celestia meets her in modern day

3500940 That would be interesting. :twilightsmile:

That would be interesting. :twilightsmile:

think you could write it:twilightsmile:

This was just... Amazing. It reminds me rather strongly of Madoka Magica, although I can't put my thumb on exactly why.
Either way, your story honestly moved me, and you've earned my star.
Congratulations.

4170305 Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. :twilightsmile:

While Madoka Magica wasn't a conscious influence, it may have had something to do with it. I don't know, but either way I consider the comparison to be a compliment. :pinkiesmile:

Very interesting story. It gets the reader thinking, such as:
One on hand, Clover helped to preserve those ponies' life stories, but on the other hand, she abandoned her friends with no proper goodbye.
Overall, I enjoyed reading it. :twilightsmile:

You make clover sound like a genderbent dr. Whooves.

5121050 ...I suppose that's one way of thinking about it... :rainbowderp:

I loved it! :pinkiesmile: Especially the last part:twilightsmile:

Sadly I find myself without enough time to read these days, but this caught my attention and was short enough to read on my lunch. So glad I did, this story is fantastic. On the surface I'm always very interested in stories of the founders and in particular Clover and Princess Platinum are my favorites for reasons that are neither here nor there.

But while I was hoping for a story about Clover this was so much better. Of course, it is a story about Clover, but really it almost seems more like a emotion than a story. The type of feeling that's impossible to put into words unless you frame a story around it to give context. I have no doubt this will be in my mind for some time.

Only thing I found awkward was when all the founders were talking it seemed difficult to tell who was saying what most of the time. It's largely unimportant for the story as a whole though, so maybe it was intentional.

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