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Rainbow Dash is dying, and though nopony wants to admit it, it's time to say goodbye.
Edited by Pinkies Imagination
Dramatic reading by Btman123

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Comments ( 50 )

Wow... so much :raritycry: but full of :heart:.

Well done.

AAGGHH the feels man the feels. :fluttercry:
It was an awesome story though, great job.

Aww, Spike didn't get to say goodbye. Nice story, though, you really nailed it.

Wow.All I can say is Wow. The story is so perfect I can imagine every part out in my head(and not many stories can do that to me)The situation is dire and sad.The entire plotline is perfect.Although I would have liked to have a bit of background on the sickness and how it came about.BUT that is just my opinion do what you will with your writing i see good things to cone from you!

Damn... This story made me cry...:fluttercry:

Owch... right in the feels m8. :applecry:

This is well written and tear inducing... quite much.

I may not have cried, but I felt it. This is a great story. Fine job

I got feels.....:fluttercry: Fluttershy's in my opinion was the worst. I hate it when a character blames themselves for their friend's death.....But, it does make for a good tear-jerker.

Also, as the reader previous said, I'd like to know a little more about the sickness. Perhaps a prequel expanding on the subject?

P.S. Here's a moustache :moustache: and a follow. :pinkiehappy:

First fic?
:raritywink:not bad

But.... Um...

"Tell the others." Dash rolls over to face the wall, away from Twilight. "Just..." Her voice quivers. "I don't want it o be sad."

To be sad


Also... You should submit this to a few groups...because let's face it, not many people read the newest stories section. Most story views come from groups

I really liked that last speech, it was really heavy. How all of her friends gave her and she gave back, parting gifts. Well crafted, short and sweet.

Silver out!

i was on the edge of crying, and i was in the middle of class, while reading this :twilightblush:

A decent sadfic. No glaring errors, but nothing too amazing either. All in all, this gets my approval. Have a nice day. :heart:

So much feels :raritycry:
Really good fic, well done (except where it says 'o' instead of 'to', but someone else already pointed that one out :twilightblush: )
You got me crying... :fluttershysad: :raritycry: :raritydespair: :applecry:
Well Done :twilightsmile:

Managed to make it to the end of Rarity's segment :raritycry:

I....... The story........it:fluttercry::raritycry::applecry::pinkiesad2:....it....was....so....good:pinkiesad2:

I wanna know what the sickness is too. Nice story by the way.:pinkiesad2:

Well, it couldn't been a tear-jerker, but it was hard to really care when Rainbow Dash only wanted five goodbyes. Admittedly, there hasn't been as much interaction between Spike and certain individual characters as there should have been, but it seems pretty horrible of Dash here to only share her final moments with the friends who happen to be mares and Element Bearers, as if those are the factors that determine friendship.

i... actually cried... good job mate D:

You are a horrible person. Please, write more! :fluttercry:

Guh! Bluh! And more guh!

didn't cried, but it made me feel it :ajsleepy:

Impressive. I read it twice.

~Skeeter The Lurker

This is the first story I've read that has made me actually cry. :ajsleepy::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritycry:

For stories like this, backstory and prequels are unimportant. Please don't continue it, it is brilliant as is. Well done

2542216 Thanks! That's just how I feel!

Thank you everyone for your love and support! I really appreciate every comment, fav and thumbs up.
I do have questions for anyone, whether you liked it or not:
Is it EQD worthy? Is there anything I should change before submitting it?
Thanks again everyone, I love you all! :heart:

2542359

Try to fix what you can, get a prereader and be careful with EQD, they're just doing their jobs but those jobs are very stressful and they can be a bit brutal at times. Don't take it personally.

Silver out!

I try, I really try to steer clear of sad fics, but I just can't help myself! :ajsleepy:

Very well done, you pulled on my feels organ.

2542359 get a proofreader before you do anything with EQD, make sure that it's absolutely perfect.

But the fact that this is your first ever fic and its THIS good is very promising. If this doesn't make it then I'm certain something else down the line will.

I do not regret reading this story.....but I do regret reading it while listening to sad music..:ajsleepy::applecry::fluttercry::pinkiesad2::raritycry:

For those asking about what illness dash is suffering... Given fluttershy mentioned dash hitting her head, most likely the fatal illness would be some kind of cerebral hemorrhaging... which can be fatal. Though that is just my two cents on the possible illness.

Also :fluttercry:

It was a really beautiful story and it defiantly pulled on my heart strings....

But like the others said, be careful with EQD. Find a good proofreader who will look it over and help you get it ready before sending it in. Really hope you do make it there someday :D

By far the best 'pony dies tragically before her time' story I've read. The river of tears flowing out of my bedroom is a testement to that. Absolutely beautiful. :raritycry:

Wow. That was great! :fluttercry: this is so sad. Though I did think a few moments Dash didn't act like herself. Maybe get a proofreader. This was still a great story. :raritycry:

Very sad and touching, but she they all got to say goodbye her.

So very sad, and moving. Filled with the love that only the closest of friends can share.

Within a couple years, I will be in a new place, with some of the closest friends I have ever found. I pray that, when my time comes, I have the chance to say my goodbyes, and give those last gifts that comes from the heart.

Thank you for this story.

"Tell the others." Dash rolls over to face the wall, away from Twilight. "Just..." Her voice quivers. "I don't want it o be sad."

Was the only spelling mistake I could find.

Alright.... I'll be honest right now. It is hard to make me cry. It is hard to scare me. It is hard to worry me at all. I read My Little Dashie and all that ran through my head is how great it is worded. Not a single tear. I have proofread many many stories from sad to heartbreaking without really any emotion. But after reading this.... I noticed I had a tear on my cheek, and I couldn't believe it. I had actually shed a tear to a wonderful story. And for that, I respect you. You have a lot of talent. I hope you continue to create art like this. Thank you for making this.

I posted a dramatic reading of your story on my YouTube channel! Please check it out! Tell me if it's good or not!
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=nKShWSdUJh4

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Oh my gosh, thank you so much! Thank you thank you thank you!

This was a great story man!

Being the first sadfic I have read in a while, it was certainly impressive and tugged on my tear glands. Stories like these are the reason that this fandom is so awesome :moustache:

Meh. Didn't exactly hit me in my feels, to be honest. :unsuresweetie: Still, it was a good write.

"How can I be cheerful? How can I SMILE?" She sobs. "When you're gone?"

How indeed?

That was filled with so many feels! :raritycry: One of the best stories I have read in a long time. This is going on my favorite stories list. Just a great job! :pinkiesad2:

......Some psycho I turned out to be......*bursts out in tears*

I just finished reading this and I'm crying.:raritycry:
Here's a Scootangel for you:) :scootangel:

I cried... I tried not to, but I cried.

It was so, so so hard keeping myself from crying. As I type this, there is a big lump in my throat as I tried to keep my composure and not let any tears out.

This is a remarkable fanfiction. Congratulations.

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