• Member Since 5th May, 2013
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An evil mare calling herself "Phoenix Flame" has appeared with one goal - to smother all of Equestria in flame! can twilight and the rest of the main six stop her?

Takes place before Season 4. Cover art by me.

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 33 )

That mare's on fire! Tsssssssssssssssssssssssssssss hot to the touch. Damn dat mare be lighten up the room! Hot plot! Insert crappy pun here!

2539326 The mare, the mare, the mare is on fire!
We no need no water let the motherfuckers burn!

But in all seriousness, I'll give it a read laters :twilightsmile:

EDIT: Not bad, I'll be looking forward to the next chapter.

Isn't that Solar Flare? The Celestia version of Nightmare Moon?

Hmm, eh Ill give it a read.

Dude, Celestia is Phoenix Flame! That's why she tossed the letter, isn't it? :pinkiegasp:

Well your doing better on this than I am on my fic lol I have a good idea for like three dif ones and I just havent got up the nerve to start any of them yet lol. PS. I realy enjoyed this fic please right more

Thanks for all the positive feedback! I really did not expect this much of it! :yay:

2539412 This did feel a bit rushed when I wrote it, but the very beginning was the only part That I hadn't thought through ahead of time:twilightblush:. I just wanted to get to this part out of the way so that I could write more easily. Hopefully the next few chapters will not feel as rushed:pinkiehappy:!

Also... Who said Princess Celestia read the letter:trixieshiftright:!

but thanks for the constructive critisicim!

I have a few other Ideas for fics too but for now i am just going to stick to this one:trollestia:!


Myyyeeeeeep. The story's been done a few times before, so I'm not going to read a rehash, but this'll be good practice for the author. Who knows, maybe he'll do it better. :ajsmug:

Comment posted by pennello deleted May 15th, 2013

1. LOVE THEM IDEA!!!:raritystarry::pinkiegasp::yay::twilightsmile:
2. 95% sure Phoenix Flame is Celestia.:derpyderp1::derpytongue2::derpyderp2:

Excellent Read, my fine pony compatriot, but a bit light lengthwise.

I hope I do it better! :pinkiesmile:

Anyway, I don't blame you for not reading it. This is my first fanfiction, so it may not be probably isn't any better than all of the others. I even have to admit that it it has quite a few mistakes and is super rushed.


If you'd like help with fic writing I spearhead the collab writers group, we have quite a few big names and generally help one another write, as well as a shared account for group projects. We chat live on skype to keep up with everything.

Not to be that pony, but could you PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE PLEAS PLEAS PLEASE post some more soon
Again, not to be a nag; I just am enjoying this story most out of the several "evil Celestia OC" stories i've read thus far.

Sorry. Half of me is like "you need to update your story it is important blah blah blah"' while the other half is like "Meh. I don't wanna have to write. I'll do it tomorrow."

Also, thank you for the compliment!:pinkiehappy:

I thought her name was Phoenix Flame...


opps!:twilightblush: I guess that's what I get for not doing much editing. don't worry, I fixed it!

You may want to do some more editing. Like a lot.:twilightblush:

Pretty good so far, my only gripe is that the chapters are a bit short. Also, R.I.P. the Fourth Wall:ajsleepy:

sonner or later I'm going to go back and lengthen the chapters. yay. :pinkiehappy:

Hey Pen!! I love this fanfiction so far! :pinkiehappy: But how many times to I have to remind you to keep writing?! :twilightangry2: :flutterrage: You need to get working. NOW!!! :flutterrage:

This story sounds like something I would say when drunk. It has plot points, a semblance of a purpose, and effort. However, like me drunk this story is just idly wondering in the direction of its resolution. I half expect this tail to turn into a clopfic or start ranting about left-hooved Pegasus representation in the media.:trollestia:

The capitalization in this made me cry too. :fluttercry:

Applejack was thinking about how her life sucked and that she needed to ditch her life in Ponyville

Why isn't that the story you went with? Your "style" (look, an end quote mark!:trollestia:) would work wonderfully for that concept! :yay:

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