My name is Ryu Nintendo and I know all the cheat codes.
Apple Bloom has a crush on a certain colt, but doesn't know how to express her feelings. When Big Macintosh and Applejack prove to be no help, she turns to Granny Smith.
Granny's advice, however, proves to be a bit different than what Apple Bloom expected...
Page generated in 0.179 seconds
Total duration
1,022 users online
277,845 hits today, 2,814,898 yesterday
My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic Fanfiction
Designed and coded by knighty & Xaquseg - © 2011-2024
Support us
SubStar
Chat!
Discord
Follow us
Twitter
MLP: Friendship is Magic® - © 2024 Hasbro Inc.®
Fimfiction is in no way affiliated with or endorsed by Hasbro Inc.®
Oooookay, that was...well... something. Actually it was pretty much what I expected so carry on.
umm... ok? im actually kinda interrested in the idea brought about in the actually chapter. it would be cool if ya turned it into a full blown story of applebloom tryin to win pip's heart
Hey I love those violent video games. This is an awesome story: I love the giant robots, existential crises, conspiracy theories, and a lot of emotional baggage from Big Mac apparently.
I'd love to see Rarity being told "You can't trust that Fashonista, Rodney, she's a spy!" She called me Rodney.
That's a mule's name... 
2580222 No offence to mules, of course.
Hmm...
I really want to like this. The premise is excellent, but your execution was a bit off. A few things:
1. "Remember, when using speech tags, you use a comma," Tweak said. He phased for a moment, stroking his chin. "If you don't use speech tags—which, if I'm being honest, is preferred—then you use a period."
"Oh, unless you use a question mark or exclamation point, understand?" he asked.
2. Your tone seemed to dance around a bit. It felt like it started as a heartwarming tale of schoolyard crushes, but then you made it all super serial and whatnot.
3. The characters felt inconsistent. Apple Bloom seemed to randomly age by several years every other sentence. She's either a young filly who is ignorant of love, or a jaded teen who just want advice.
4. I did love Granny Smith's batshitness. So, good job there.
All in all, this was an entertaining diversion, but it could have been a great story. I'd advise you reconsider some dialogue chooses and decide the tone you're looking for. If you ever need any help, feel free to drop me a line.
Why would he need to paint the dool magenta?
That color is a bit like Rainbow Dash's eyes.
Very nice. The pacing is a little fast in some areas. Try adding details like body language to slow it down a little.
I love the way Scoots and Sweetie Belle were arguing.
I laughed so hard.
Nuttier than a gay squirrel orgy at wintertime.
2580111
The idea was Apple Bloom getting "the talk" but instead of just "oh gee my eldery grandmother is talking about sex how embarrassing" it turns into conspiracy nonsense because one of the characters is insane.
I can't exactly continue this because that'd mean I'd have to break Apple Bloom's heart. I don't write happy successful romances.
My next story will involve me personally ruining Rainbow's chances with Applejack. Not because I steal her, oh no, but because I let it slip the story's a romance.
2580921
I think what I want to write are miserable old men, since they don't move around much. But I'm stuck here with ponies. Somehow.
2580487
At least with tone, it opens with Cheerilee teaching school kids that free will doesn't exist and choice is an illusion. I establish frightening existential nightmares in the first line!
all in all, damn that was silly
I am so using that someday.
2580361
Sure why not. Mules are ponies too. I mean half of their hybridization comes from ponies.
...................
That was...
Beautiful. *wipes away a tear, slowclap.*
2584877
One of the requirements of being on fimfiction is an intricate, almost sociopathic knowledge of minor details and quirks of Equestria, such as using mules in similes and apologizing to a convenient mule for the casual racism.
The mule is so conditioned he doesn't know the entirety of society thinks he's living garbage.
Who here likes me pretending like I know what the fuck I'm doing?
Well HER EYOU GO:
http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/165493/authors-notes-granny-smiths-dating-advice
This fic made me want to blow the grounsils with my girlfriend.
THE ILLUMIPONY TAKEOVER IS AT HAND WE NEED TO BUY USALT WEPINS SO WE KIN DUFEND THE HOMELAND
2589720
I like you.
Good story!That's really funny!I give up...Ok. This story made me laugh. It was alright. I'm just really bad at expressing how I feel through text.
2596868
Consider a tree. Not just any tree, but the tree you think of first from the unqualified word "tree". The ur-tree, the platonic ideal of tree.
It most assuredly doesn't match my ur-tree. It may be a different type of tree, or in a different setting or condition. Perhaps some experience one of us had the other didn't is connected to the ur-tree. Regardless, they're different. The one word "tree" can refer to different ideas.
This is true of all words. How many different emotions, processes, and identities all fall under the one word "love"? I can love my mother, my child, my spouse, and the act of writing post-modern My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic fanfics, and these four are different concepts.
You're not bad at expressing how you feel through text. Text is bad at expressing how you feel.
WHAT THE BUCK DID I JUST READ
I laughed so hard I started coughing, poor Pipsqueak, he does not deserve this, Gods, I want to see her try to inspire more fillies and colts, this is funny as shit!
Thoiugh I saw the word hand when it should have been hoof and the CMC know what video games are after Sweetie Belle pointed to a colt in the song 'The Perfect Stallion'
What?
2636718
WHAT
Goddammit I referenced both episodes we see AJ's room to see if she had a closet
how do I miss something like that
I have failed my own creative process and must now commit sudoku
2580885 Cheerilee.